Please update D! :)
Reviewer: sbrown Anonymous
[Report This]Date: December 27 2010 07:59 am
First of all, congratulations on your first long fic, and thank you for posting this story. I hope you continue because I am interested in seeing where this story tskes us. I have several questions that I would love to have answered, the first being whom of these people are we supposed to find "root worthy" other than Sienna. Will Amelle develop some balls at some point, and finally who is the male lead in this story, because obviously cluesless David is not it, and the loathsome and disgusting Eddy leave a lot to be desired currently.
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Reviewer: Arabelle Signed [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 05:48 am
Loved it . More soon I hope. : )
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 04:06 am
She should castrate his azz. He had no right to violate her like that. I hope she does set it off.
well done, Chica, well done.
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 04:03 am
Alright, little Amelle has claws. Her description of Viv was spot on. HA!!!
I must say, this chapter was really good.
And if that's Harrison's hand, he would draw back a nub.
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 03:53 am
Somehow, Nadia does not come across as a friend to Amelle. What was her real motive for their little talk? And talk about oblivious, David... He is asking for trouble. This can't be good. Which makes it interesting for this reader.
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed
[Report This]Date: December 19 2010 03:42 am
Amelle is in the midst of a bunch of vipers.
Harrison is very talented, it seems. ;)
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 03:33 am
Could it be that David is not the one for Amelle? Her physical description smacks of someone who is not internally happy. And David sounds like a right proper sop who's influenced way too much by his shrew of a mother.
If you have to submerge who you really are, then something is very wrong.
And damn, if Vivian Banks isn't a piece of work.
This story is deliciously disturbing. Loves it.
[Report This]Date: December 19 2010 03:22 am
apt description.
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 03:11 am
Damn you Harrison! LOL! I love Sienna, and she's right - Amelle should fight back and seduce him - make him squirm, and take back some power! Great update and I find this story very interesting!
Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 02:34 am
uhm, wow. i can't even . . . wow. yeah, i needs me another chapter before i say anything.
Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed [Report This]Date: December 19 2010 02:15 am
Oh and I like what Robbin said about her playing the victim too much. She shouldn't have left her job if that is what she wanted. She could of at least tried to transfer if she enjoyed it and she knew David parents manipulated the situation, then say something. Ok Harrison is powerful, but she still could of done something sooner. I wouldn't compare her to Vivian yet, but if she keeps doing what she is doing then she might go down that rode. I say don't marry David and put Harrison in his place. Go get herself a job doing what she was doing before and have her own home.
Reviewer: sbrown Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 11:39 pm
That cocky dickhead. Come on Amelle fight this arrogant bastard and leave Captain slow. David is such a puppet, he is so wack. Amelle needs to move on but not with that spoiled asshole. Yeah he is sexy, rich, powerful, but along with that comes a whole lot of pain. Fuck him and David slow ass. She is more than some guy trophy. I say she start lighting things up, I think she can do it. Great chapter D, your on a roll. I didn't even feel sorry for David dumbass, but I do want Amelle to come out of this strong. I know a part of her wants the challenge as well, but somethings you should leave alone or treed careful. So if she wants to play the game, she has to make sure she herself doesn't get caught up. There is nothing I can say for David because he is too much of a kiss ass like Amelle friend said.
Reviewer: sbrown Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 11:23 pm
Hmmm - I like this story. Class is so rarely written with nuance, and you seem to have nailed the layers. Kudos!
Amelle is a bit of fool - from what I understand, there aren't many, especially women, bluebloods who would bother to give her insight into the social jungle of the upper middle/upper class so soon. Nadia could have just let her thrash about, but tried to be a bit of friend and give her the heads up. Never enter the arena without knowing the rules of engagement - that's essentially what Nadia was trying to tell Amelle. Deaf ears and all that.
Unfortunately, hubris is a mighty strong vice. Amelle is so busy being offended and trying to prove something that she ignored rather salient advice. Harrison wants her, and of course doesn't give a damn what anyone thinks because, hello, he's Harrison, for fuck's sake. Steer clear of a man with nothing to lose, for propriety is a lost cause, especially when he has the triumvirate of power: pedigree, money, and strikingly good looks. Plus, any man worth his salt doesn't openly mock the woman he's interested in. Red flags all over the place.
I can only assume where you're going with the story, but you've done a damn good job of setting it up. I'm thoroughly intrigued, even if I know Harrison is a wolf in sheep's clothing. Actually, strike that - he's a wolf, he knows it and doesn't care, and everyone else knows it. Amelle knows it, too, but like many women, gets caught up in the thrill. Sexual prowess has never been a guarantee of a man's character. I'm fairly certain Harrison has bedded many a woman, so yeah.....of course he's skilled.
I think David cares about Amelle, but cares about his ambition and social mobility more. Or, rather, he certainly cares for what his parents want in that regard. But, Amelle ignored this in her romantic idealizing of their relationship, based on what Sienna mentioned. Amelle seems like to playing the victim a bit too much for my liking (no one forced her to quit her job and move with David, especially since they aren't married). Actually, I can see some parallels between Vivian and Amelle personality-wise, although I don't think I should.
Anyway, I tend to have rather strong opinions on fictional characters, so I hope my review doesn't offend. I like the story, and look forward to seeing where you go with it. Thanks for sharing!
Reviewer: ribboninthesky Signed [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 10:01 pm
OK don't take this the wrong way, but I still don't understand what this story is about. Is this a romance? Ok i get about power, and rich people and politics, but that's about it. I don't have a clue about the characters. And what about David and Amelle?? Are they in love? Does Amelle love David?? It would have been a lot better if you gave more in sight story about their relationship. Give more details. From what I've read so far there is almost not any scene between them. No kiss, no love making nothing. You gave a lot more details about Vivian and Roger's marriage then David and Amelle's relationship. What about David's parents, why are the so manipulative?? If you give more details about the characters it would be so much better to understand. The story is interesting, but I do think it needs a little work. Give the character more personality, more details. It would be so much better then, to understand what this is about. Also I really hope that Amelle is a good girl and that if she wants to get dirty with Eddy, she would at least break things up with David first. It would have been a lot better if she was single. But i don't know, I really miss some insight story about AMelle and David's relationship, because right now, I really don't have the feeling that she is in love with him or even want to get married!!! She is so boring with him, i mean even tho you didn't want to move, if you really are in love with you partner, you will be just happy because you are with him. I don't know. I need more information.
Date: December 18 2010 07:52 pm
LOVE THIS STORY! Harrison is a fool, but a fool with the magic finger! HAHAHA Give him a new version of what a black woman can do for him Amelle. Shake the fools world up. David better wake up!!
Reviewer: cimmy1 Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 01:49 pm
Good update. The way that you have written Harrison, you want to dislike him but there's something about him that makes you like him. Can't wait to see what Amelle decides to do to get back at him. I am enjoying this story.
Reviewer: Romance Signed [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 01:18 pm
I am not going to lie I do like harrison yes the situation for me would be a lot better if she was single I think that I would love it even more if she was single and trying to avoid his attention. Can't wait to see how this unfolds. Great Update!
Reviewer: IzzyLove Signed [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 01:08 pm
Ok wow Harrison is an ass for sure but Sienna is right Amelle is just as turned on by him as he is by her otherwise no way she would havee let him get away with that crap he pulled...
She is not going to confront seriously because I believe she wants him but what about David...hopefully she can't be that cold or could she ..to carry on an affair right under her fiancee's nose?? But a relationship with Harrison is stupid too..given he even wants one..because he seems to just love the chase and danger of the game!!
I don't know..this is getting sticky now and Amelle is in the middle of some mess...
I love the complexity of this story...the poop is hitting the fan and I cannot wait to see where you take us from here...excellent writing!
Reviewer: neneburge Signed [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 10:59 am
*whistles* powerful chapter - yup, things are definitely switching up and Amelle better listen to her friend's advice. Thanks for another update. Since I'm greedy I hope to see more - soon, lol!
Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 10:48 am
I wrote a long review, but lost it. Anyhow, this chapter didn't make any sense. It was a plot point, but what is the plot and who are these characters? This is chapter seven, and I have no idea, who these people are. Amelle's and David's relationship doesn't feel organic. I don't even believe Amelle is in love with David. This story began in media res, so it's difficult to get the feel of Amelle's personality, as well as her relationship with David.Because of that, I find it hard to feel anything for any of the characters, other than Eddy, who I loathe.
Reviewer: Cholyn Signed [Report This]
Date: December 18 2010 10:36 am
Outstanding . I'm totally loving this story. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review!
[Report This]Date: December 18 2010 04:43 am
Amelle Amelle...You will learn not to let pride rule you! Now she has David mad at her and Harrison's hand on her thigh!
Though I loved how she read them all...she may hav given away too much of herself and suggested something she did not want to Harrison!! We will see
One thing for sure Vivian is definitely not her friend lol!
Getting good sweetie..cannot wait for more!
Author's Response:
Pride is a sin that we all suffer from every now and again and we just might learn the motives behind this prideful action. Thanks for your review!
Reviewer: neneburge Signed [Report This]Date: December 18 2010 02:22 am
Just caught up with the story and it's awesome! Love the characters and the pairing! Love Amelle's speech about designers and the clothes people wearing and the meaning behind it - really interesting! Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: I have a slight passion for fashion and so when I was choosing talking about the meaning behind the clothes, I just went off of what I saw when I looked at the clothes. Each response hopefully gives more insight on the characters. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: December 17 2010 10:40 pm
This story is very insightful, even though it is fiction, there is so much truth there. David needs to step his game up, because he is not caring about his girl needs. All he is thinking about is impressing all of those stuck up assholes. The only people that seem cool thus far is Nadia and her husband. I hope Amelle doesn't fall for Harrison advances. Yes he is charming and handsome, but he is deceptive and spoiled as well. I like how Amelle put him in his place when he tried to make her look stupid at the gathering, but it also put a target on her. It made Harrison even more into her. Like I said David needs to step up his game, because he is lacking at the moment. Your doing an amazing job with this story D.
Author's Response: I aree whole heartedly, David does need to step up his game. As far as Amelle and Harrison, we will soon find out where they stand. As much as I liked her stepping up to his challenge, there are consequences to your actions and I think she might have bit off more than she could chew. Thanks for your review!
[Report This]Date: December 17 2010 04:24 pm