LOVED THIS CHAPTER! And not just because of the amazing sex scenes and hiLARIOUS ending, but the way you write how each character is feeling, evokes that same emotion in me as a reader. And MAH LAWD, this paragraph:
'Her clitoris stood proud and erect like a hot pink pistil surrounded by chocolate petals. This flower was his; and he planned to bring it to full bloom. Sean knew that the clitoris is the most sexually sensitive part of the body for almost all women; but he planned on holding out on touching her there until he deemed her ready. Her body had been primed; but not yet at the stage of arousal that he was wanted it. He was scientist by nature; his job had propelled him into administrative work but right now he wanted to use all the skills that he learned in the classroom and those that came instinctively to make this wet lab. He had spent three months conducting extensive background research. He formulated his hypothesis on the night of their first date: If she allowed him to then he would do anything to make her happy. And watching her come undone in his arms earlier, the sound of her happy laughter, and the joy in her eyes when she looked at him was just some of the data he'd collected. After measuring and analyzing he found that he was on the right track to communicating his conclusions to her; she had stolen his heart.'
PERFECT. THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! That was some good shit.
You are very welcome!!! I'm glad you liked it. :)Reviewer: Patty Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/14/13 02:45 pm
I agree with Musicluva, this is my favirote story on this site. I think the previouss version was great and if it were posted while you were making updates it might take the pressure off of you so you can get that done without any worries. Plus I miss reading the story *sniff* :-(
Your wish is my command. :) I am thrilled to know that you like this story. I'm uploading the chapters now. *Sigh* Maybe some day soon I'll have be able to get some more editing done.Reviewer: ms_mase Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/25/13 10:56 pm
I can appreciate your not wanting to commit to a specific date. I check back all the time, because this is one of my favorites on this site thus far. Would it be possible to place the previous version back out until your edits are complete? (Pretty please ?!😍)
Okay so my plan to keep myself in check failed miserably. I'm uploaded the remaining chapters now.BTW can you do me a favor. I'm really looking for some constructive criticism on this story. I friend read it and suggested that I send it out to a few publishers; but I don't think the storyline is there yet. So if you could please after reading it let me know what you liked, hated, and what you thought could have been better. Shoot me an email if you can.
~MV~Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/14/13 11:47 pm
I started reading this story only to find that there are only a few chapters online and that the rest had been removed for editing. There should have been an indication that the entire story was not available so that people would not invest time in an incomplete story.
I am sorry if you invested any time in reading the first few chapters of this story. However it is clearly stated in bold letters on the story cover page that the chapters have been removed and the story status is listed as incomplete.
~MV~Reviewer: Maroongal Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/23/13 06:27 am
Can't wait 'til it's back. Will that be anytime soon?
I really dont' have a time and I'd hate to promise one by a certain date and can't come through. I'm working on edits in between my other stories.
~MV~Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/08/13 09:50 pm
Hi, this is one of my favourite stories - just came back to read for the 2nd time and most of it has disappeared. Will it be back at some point? Thanks, Jade
Wow that is a huge compliment that you've came back for a second helping. I suck at editing so I'm trying to take my time to clean it up in between other stories.
Thanks!!Reviewer: minajesty Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/05/13 02:01 pm
this my second time reading this story and still feels like i am reading it for the first time .One of my favourite stories on the chamber.
Thanks so much zoe zoey!!! This is my favorite couple to write about. Hopefully I can get some more short stories out with them. Couting down the 7 more months of grad school for some free time.
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Date: 04/05/13 03:25 pm
I like to give a review because that's the least I can do to show my appreciation for you writers taking the time to write stroies like these that make you laugh your head off. Mr Price watching Brent eat him out of house and home is just one hilarious moment in the story), and just entertain us. I became very depressed when I had to move my beridden mother into my home and care for her and no longer had an active life. Don't get me wrong I love my mother so much that I couldn't leave her in a nursing home. Now, I go to work and come home to care for her along with my siblings. Right now I have no life, so I was glad to find out about 'The Chamber'. Okay, this is a long drawn out way of saying you can definitely mark this off your bucket list and call yourself a writer. This is a very good story.
I am all teary eyed now. That is like the biggest compliment ever. THANK YOU so much for reading this story. One my days of feeling down it is my escape as well. Your mother must know that she is truly lucky to have you as a daughter. Stay blessed and in good spirits.
~MV~Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/18/13 09:56 am
Seldom do I read a story that makes me laugh out loud--a lot, but this one did. I couldn't wait to finish it and I tip my hat off to Ms. Vesta. Shawnie was too nice, but Sean was a true gangster when it came to insulting those he cared about. Mr. Price's character was hilarious and Jenny deserved a serious beat down. Thank you for sharing your work and I enjoyed reading Over the Hedge.
Thank so much Penelope!!! I've been asked by close friends which genre my story best fits in. And I always answer romantic comedy. So I am loving the fact that I did my due diligence and got you to laugh. Thanks again for taking the time to read this little tale and thanks for leaving a review!!Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/14/13 10:59 pm
This was FANTASTIC! It made me laugh out loud till I sweat! It made me feel warm and runny. You did a fantastic job with the displaying the feelings of Phil about his daughters and the men they should have.
Well Done!Reviewer: HarperSinclaire Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/28/12 04:14 pm
So I read this whole thing in like 2 days and I loved it :D
Your writing is ah-mazing and I hope to read more from you soon :)
Thank you so very much!!! This was a fun story to write and I'm glad you liked it. I really appreciate you taking the time to write a review., They keep me motivated!!Reviewer: ConverseObsessed Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/03/12 02:08 pm
I absolutely enjoyed this story, your writing really drew mw in, I was right up there with Lashawnda when she had to ut a girl in her place for trying it on with her man, and with Sean when he was protecting his family.
Is there going to be a Brent and Chrystal story, as I would love to know how Mr Price got on with Brent inhaling his food on a weekly basis lol.
Thank you for such a wonderful read
I am so happy that you enjoyed this story. This couple is my favorite to write about. There will be more from the other members of the gang and some one shots with Sean and Lashawnda. Brent and Crystal are going to be a challenge for me to write because I don't want there relationship or personality to mirror Sean and Lashawnda's. But I guess we'll see what my overactive imagination comes up with. I'm sure Mr. Price will do all in his power to get rid of old "hungry eyes"...lol
I really appreciate you taking the time to write a review it means so much to me.
~Minerva~Reviewer: Jules Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/13/12 06:37 am
I did enjoy this awesome story I am so glad that you wrote it and that I was able to read it
Thank you so much for taking the time to read it. So glad you liked it.Reviewer: Felicia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/28/12 06:56 am
Thank you so much for this great story. It took me a while, but i am glad I stayed with it. It was definitely worth it. I hope this isn't the last we see of these great characters. Thanks again.
Thanks sooo much for taking the time to read and write a review. It means a lot to me. It won't be the last you see of these two. I've got a whole lot in store for them.Reviewer: SuperStar2577 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/26/12 09:07 pm
I absolutely LOVED reading this. It took me a minute to read the whole thing, but i'm glad that I put my foot down and decided finish reading this today. I love your writing style. It's just something about your writing style that just pulls me in. It's like I'm actually in the story and can actually feel what these characters are going through. I loved all of the characters except crazy Jenny. I loved every chapter and scene--which are still very vivid because of your details. I look forward to reading many more of your works in the future. Thank you for writing such a beautiful love story.
Thank you so much Vava for reading and takin the time to review. Your words have put a huge smile on my face. Its good to know that you were truly able to be pulled into this tale of love. I loved writing about these two and hope to bring you much more.Reviewer: Vava Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/23/12 09:02 pm
Wait, dont give them a girl just yet, lets keep them trying, maybe shock them with twins or triplets. I just cant shake the feeling that Sean likes to keep her barefoot and pregnant, it seems to suite her. lolReviewer: leah Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/20/12 01:39 pm
I love this story, it literally took ke like two days to read it all, it was great, well more than great, it was just... lovely.
The relationship you built between the two characters is beautiful, you can tell that they love each other soo much, it just makes you wish that you too can find a love like theirs. A love that is pure, sweet and gentle yet filled with passion and last that'll probably never fade. You get the impression that they've created a wonderful home filled with love, joy and children, ALOT of children and i have a feeling just a few more to come.
Basically what i wanted to say is that, I get it. I get the story, and the love you were trying to show and I appreciate it. It was a wonderful story.
Thanks so much leah...your reviews is much appreciated. I'm so glad that you get it. That was my goal with this story. Just writing about two people who are in love, not too much drama between them and lots of love and laughter.
Reviewer: leah Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/20/12 01:30 pm