Title: Cast Pics

Okay, wow...  I like this story and I think I see where it is going, but for right now, a whole lot is going on. Meaning the werewolf hunters, struggling to finish understanding her developing powers, her new acquaintances (Maggie, Cherise, the Twins, and Dominic), not to forget the ones in the cast page. Please keep in mind, this is constructive criticism.

Explain why her village was attacked and she only was kept alive by werewolves, but then in the beginning it sounds as if someone controls the werewolves, but then that is never devolved once she jumps in the river.

Pleases give a little more details (back history).When characters speak, give each their own paragraph break, it's easier to follow the conversations. 

I hope you will continue this story.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26 2016 07:07 am

Title: Bad Beginnings

Just found this story, now i'm hooked. Can't wait or an update.

Reviewer: jlly16 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2014 11:59 pm

Title: Bad Beginnings

please update. its been months. i really like this story. please continue soon.

Reviewer: chaundi Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 07 2012 10:10 pm

Title: Cast Pics

PAAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEASSSSSSSEEEEEEEE UPDATE!!! I HAVE BEEN WAITING SO LONG FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER! AS A BIG FAN OF ZAC AND THIS STORY PLEASE UPDATE REGULARLY! I HAVE SERIOUSLY BEEN CHECKING EVERYDAY! NO RUDENESS INTENDED! I JUST REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!!!!

Reviewer: chaundi Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 14 2012 03:36 am

Title: Cast Pics

i really love this story and where it is headed!  i check everyday to see if you have put out more chapters or not! i really cant wait these chracters are amaizing! please update regularly!!!!!!PLEASE!!!!!! :)

Reviewer: chaundi Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 16 2012 04:03 am

Title: Escape To A New World

I am really enjoying the story in all honesty.  I don't know the girl doesn't sound as cute as she looks.  But then she's speaking mentally and not to people much.  But it's definitely engaging.  I'll reserve full opinion though until I read more on her.

Reviewer: vaberella Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 13 2012 01:22 am

Title: Cast Pics

I just want to say that I love the girl you chose as the fae.  From the moment I saw her face I screamed CUTENESS!!!  I just think she's adorable beyond belief and I can totally picture her a fae.   And she's hooking up with an Ancient.   Dominic Hunter II is like super older than Cameron Duboise making him super strong and super powerful.  Wow.   This story is cool just on visual stuff.

Another point.  I haven't even started reading the story but I will say this....I am already a shipper for Cameron Duboise and Jennifer Von Claude.  Can I say super power couple?!   Wow.  I would have preferred playing Ryan Gosling's love interest in Drive.   Whatever....I will begin the story now.  Your cast is perfectly chosen and long live Camifer----Ooh that sounds horrid together.  Cameron/Jennifer.

I won't rate this chapter but will do the next.

Reviewer: vaberella Signed [Report This]
Date: February 13 2012 01:08 am

Title: Bad Beginnings

ok, we know vamps are all powerful and whatnot but dude just ruffled the gills of a Fae!  Who does he think he's messing with!  LOL Love that she didn't fall to his feet, even though the mere sight of him took her breath away. Hell, mine too! hehehehe

Update soon!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading! An update will be coming sometime tonight, hopefully!

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 05 2012 12:11 am

Title: Settling In And Starting Over

Maggie is a good friend, a motherly-type that most assuredly will be needed in Jackie's life.  Miss Sabi is intelligent, powerful and kind...a combination that gravitates all types of people toward her, including sexy blue eyes.  Ut oh. LOL



Author's Response:

LOL Thank you! 

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 10:50 pm

Title: Escape To A New World

I like it! I really, really do! The only thing that I was like 'mmm, okay' was her clothes materializing as she did but other than that, it's an interesting tale of fantasy infused with modern time. Love the tone and the leading character. Mrs Duboise is a trip already! lol

Great start! :) 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! Update coming soon! :)

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 10:10 pm

Title: Bad Beginnings

Hi, this is a really cute story. I hope you update it frequently.



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: annette Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 09:18 pm

Title: Bad Beginnings

Wow Dominic is full of himself, but he has a point and I hop Jacqueline see the benefit and take him up on his offer for her own protection. Can't wait to read more.



Author's Response:

Another capter coming soon. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: skriver Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 07:37 pm

Title: Bad Beginnings

Dominic, you really showed your ass and not even Flex and Blair can save you. Jackie will do anything for the babies.! Cherise makes my teeth itch, so pleasr get rid of her. Such a good story, can a Fae be turned to a vamp? 5T



Author's Response:

I'm still iffy if I'll do it, but probably. :) Thanks for reading! I have a plan for Cherise. Don't worry! 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 07:30 pm

Title: Settling In And Starting Over

Update better be coming soon, because that was great! 



Author's Response:

Very soon! Thank You.

Reviewer: nikki Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 05:47 am

Title: Escape To A New World

Interesting start.

Author's Response:

Thank You! :)

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 04:48 am

Title: Settling In And Starting Over

Must be Flex's brother.  He must hot as the air has left the bar!!!  I must add that I don't like that bar tender she's a bitch!!!  I can't wait to read more, you rock!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading! You'll find out very soon. The next chapter will be up before tomorrow. Yea, that girl is a bitch, I couldn't resist. We always have to have on in a story. :)

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 02:12 am

Title: Settling In And Starting Over

Wow!!! I am loving this story so far!

Please update again soon!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you! The next chapter will be up very soon! Working on it right now. :)

Reviewer: juleah Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2012 12:25 am

Title: Cast Pics

please update soon!!! Jackie is a strong young woman. I like the concept of a coco fae, nice!!!!



Author's Response:

I'll try to update by later on today, or tonight! Thank you! :)

Reviewer: brownie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2012 09:16 pm

Title: Escape To A New World

Me likey!

Author's Response:

Thank You!!!!!! :)

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2012 11:10 am

Title: Escape To A New World

oh yeah!  please update soon



Author's Response:

Working on it right now! It will be updated later today! :)

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2012 06:18 am

Title: Escape To A New World

A very good start. Your main character Jacqueline seem smart, I hope she continue to keep be smart and not be push around or have a chip on her shoulder. I like supernatural story that has a female who can hold her own.  So more please.



Author's Response:

Thank You! That's waht 'm trying to do. I love street samrt characters. More is coming.

Reviewer: skriver Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2012 04:21 am

Title: Escape To A New World

 I have one word for you, Awesome!!!



Author's Response:

Thank You! More to come later today! 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2012 03:10 am



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