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Title: Chapter 4

Loved it! Can't wait to read what blossoms between Joseph and Isabel

 Reviewer: jnonymous Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 12 2013 05:42 am
Title: Chapter 4

omg your anawewome writer. please write some more, i would love you forever.

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Date: November 08 2013 08:43 pm
Title: Chapter 4

Despite the wait, the story is still as great as I remember.  Life is always busy but that is a part of being human.  It seems that his Joseph is treading in deep water, let's hope he can swim.  Isabel has to keep on her toes.

 Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 07 2013 06:20 pm
Title: Chapter 4

i enjoyed what you have written so far. 

 Reviewer: sandradee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 06 2013 04:16 am
Title: Chapter 4

I love this story.  Please update again soon !!

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Date: November 05 2013 02:56 am
Title: Temporary Hiatus

I hope you choose to finish the story because I was really enjoying it.

 Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 05:18 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I like it.

In what era are you in? Will you change the vocabulary and seettings to fit the chosen era?

Who is Simon?

Where does Isabel came from? Why King Henry was so kind in her regards?



Author's Response:

Im responding to this super late sorry lol. I'm studying which era Caesar was in because its during that tim. The setting wot change it will just be better described and the vocabulary will change once I can find it EXACTLY how they spoke. Simon is Joseph best friend and Isabel came from.a village but i have to better explain that in another chapter. King Henry is just nice all around but to a certain point he's not acceptant of everything which you will see later. I guess you can say he has a had a soft spot for Isabel.

 Reviewer: Insomniac Sioj Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 28 2012 07:33 am
Title: Characters

Can't see Joseph right O_o

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Date: June 22 2012 01:58 am
Title: Chapter 2

I love this movie so i am looking forward to this story =)

Author's Response: I love love love the movie too but the story won't have the same plot or anything just same setting and the king in the movie is the prince in this story.

 Reviewer: kell369 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 03 2012 05:12 am
Title: Chapter 2

Lovely story. Always enjoy historical ir stories. Can't wait for the rest of the story.



Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing :-)

 Reviewer: Karen Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2012 08:51 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I would just love to see where are taking this, but i adore how you have developed it thus far..



Author's Response: Thank you and I'll try :-)

 Reviewer: Michelle Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 06 2012 01:29 am
Title: Chapter 1

PLEASE finish this! I'm really into it.



Author's Response: Im happy your into it. Im going to try and update this weekend.

 Reviewer: Allé Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 27 2012 08:41 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Interesting start.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 27 2012 05:49 am
Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this I see a lot of growth to come in your story I think it was a good start and I can see you getting better and better as you write more. Keep it up, I'm eager for more. :)

Author's Response: Thank you meme I appreciate that

 Reviewer: meme Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2012 12:27 pm
Title: Characters

I love those two! Marshal is so pretty, so glad you chose her. They will be beautiful together in my head.... ok off to read ur first chapter :)

Author's Response: I do too it seemed like they fit

 Reviewer: meme Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2012 12:11 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Like it.  Do continue.



Author's Response: Im still thinking about it

 Reviewer: Tia Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2012 06:54 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Okay I will be truthful.  It's a bit flowery...fluffy.  You're a good writer but the style stems from being over the top to being basic and also you are not in line with the time period.  You go from saying 'fair maiden' and 'sire' but then have earlier on her stating mens ogling and unsolicited salacious commentary as 'catcalls'.  I think the catcalls seems a bit weird taking into account context and situation.  I think I was more thrown through by the sort of fluffy aspect of the story.  The girl just gives me the vibe of being too naive and too in love with a man she doesn't know.  It's a bit irritating because I'm the first to discount much stories when there is no interaction between the main couples but one party, in this case the peasant loves a vision and knows nothing about the reality.  The having her cry into her pillow but then be grateful for her state in life.  Why is she crying over a man she doesn't know?  

 

Her status gives screams someone who is pratical and down to earth and probably has little to no real thoughts that linger on a Prince.  It's a bit weird to see one so infatuated and distraught over their different status' when she's most likely not in close contact with the prince.  But you can clear up a lot of things in the second chapter.

 

Mainly define their level of interaction.  And keep on top of terminology that is a bit too modern day.  And third tone down the sort of fluffiness of the piece.  You have a solid plot, I hope you develop it.



Author's Response: I can see what you mean. I tried looking up the terminology for the time period and could really find any help. To clear up why she crying and the length of time they have known each other. They known each other for a number of years and she's crying because she is in love with him but knows she can never be with him because their social class makes it virtually impossible. She is not naive at all she's much deeper than she seems and because of what she's been through she has a realistic view of life. She just so happems to be one of the lucky ones. It seems fluffy at first for a reason but it wont stay tht way. Thank you so much for your honesty its very helpful.

 Reviewer: vaberella Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2012 01:07 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Really good start. I can't wait to see what happens next .

 Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2012 05:03 am
Title: Chapter 1

very good



Author's Response: Thank you

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Date: March 19 2012 04:33 am
Title: Characters

Nice but I was looking for a dark skin woman



Author's Response: I was trying to find one that had on the style of clothing the story is set in and she seemed to fit for me. When I looked at her picture it just seemed like her story to tell and when I thought of this story she kept poping up in my head. I don't know its hard to explain.

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2012 04:25 am
Title: Characters

You have gotten off to a vary good start. Keep Up the good work.



Author's Response: Thank you

 Reviewer: Sandra Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2012 03:09 am
Title: Chapter 1

Me likey, please keep going!!



Author's Response: Thank you I'm kind of still debating it but chances are I will

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2012 03:06 am
Title: Characters

Very good story. I love who you picked for Isabel. I cannot wait to read more. What us the actress name that plays Isabel

Author's Response: Im glad you like it and her name is Marsha Thomason

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Date: March 19 2012 02:14 am


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