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Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Okay, so far so good. Dislike the parents, what kind of father would hit is child (don't care if he is a grown man) while he is having an attack.  Knew that Mallory would go back to Rory, yes she loves Declan, not how she loves and is in love with Rory. Poor Declan...Imogene was stoking his flame, they should hook up. IJS  I do hope you will update this one and soon. 

Reviewer: d3stin2l0v3 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23 2014 02:02 am

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

It is plain to.see that Rory is no longer in the mood to.be the puppet anylonger, not by anyone. Without much doubt he is prepared on taking his life back.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21 2014 05:07 am

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Please update soon

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 08:02 am

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Everytime Imogene appears, I see her slithering around (sorta of like Medusa). Not sure why that is my vision of her. ;)

I hope Rory becomes stronger. His bio-units are horrible individuals. Just horrible. I want someone to beat the crap out of male bio-unit. He is a demon.

Does Declan understand how f'in lucky he is? If but for Rory, that would be his little ass counting, trying to remain in control and getting knocked the hell around.

Yeah, Mallory is going to stun Imogene. At least, that is my wish.

I've really missed this story. Thanks for the updates. Don't stay away too long. Well done, Chica.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 12:41 am

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Welcome back!!! I am looking forward to seeing how Rory puts Imogene in her place, and hopefully Mallory gets to slap her one good time. I love the fact that Rory is taking steps to make sure that he doesn't fail Mallory or himself again. I just hope that Declan can move forward and find the love he is so busy looking for within Mallory even if her feelings for him aren't as deeply as his for her. Or so he thinks, he has been all about Mallory for so long that I don't think he knows what in love looks like hopefully he will be able to find that. looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 12:15 am

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Stay strong Rory! Don't let him sleep with Imogene again. Loved the update. Thanks!

Reviewer: shadow Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 19 2014 10:05 pm

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Glad to see this story is Back.  I'm glad that Mal and Rory are trying to get back on track again, I believe that they are what the other needs.

I feel that Rory is going to get stronger, and the first thing is getting rid of Imogene she is a WART that needs to be REMOVED, why does his father like her so much is beyond me... next is confonting his so-called parents.

Looking forward to more.

Reviewer: liberty lady Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 19 2014 03:47 pm

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

IN all this I feel sorry for Declan.  He needs to move on and pick up his heart.  I don't think he'll ever see her as a friend really because he wants more than she is willing to give.  He needs a vacation somewhere to lick his wounds and get himself together.  

 

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 19 2014 01:30 pm

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

Imogene is about to go down in flames! Rory please get rid of the garbage and finish with parents! I have missed this story!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 19 2014 01:15 pm

Title: Chapter 10 Pull Me Down

I hope Dylan gets a better and larger story than mallory and rory because rory is sooooooooo undeserving and mallory is too. 



Author's Response:

Everyone deserves love :) Declan story will unspool as the journey continues.

 

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

 

Anni

Reviewer: dounome Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 19 2014 07:26 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

Okay, Declan is seriously obsessed with her. Although cute, this can become really dangerous...I hopr Rory will get his strength back with Mallory. Great job!!!

Reviewer: Peanut Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 13 2013 01:17 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

 It seems that things are only going to become worse before things are going to get any better.  There is no easy choice and thinking so only hinders ones judgement.  They are only human that have human needs.  Declan, Rory, and Mallory are in pain and they continue to walk through life.  



Author's Response:

I agree fully. It's why I enjoy writing this story; the complex feelings and decisions that these characters have to work through is just fascinating to me.  My only hope is that it continues to be an enjoyable- and insightful- read.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 09 2013 07:42 pm

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

-_- the bitch err Imogene is back....BOOOO!!! HISSS!!! Can I say I hate that heifer with as much passion as I abhor their father? 

Everytime, I read a new chapter in this story my heart bleeds for my baby Rory. Never felt more like giving a fictional character a hug as I do Rory. As to Mallory I think she got this. Yes she's still fragile, yes her disability is a disadvantage but I think she's gonna serve Imogene her ass on a platter. #TeamMAL

On a happier note yay!!!!! Mallory and Rory are definately back hehe!

Declan...hmmm! Don't do it!!!!

Looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing. 

 



Author's Response:

All sorts of interesting things are happening here. I'm excited about where this is going. And  yes, Mallory and Rory are back- it remains to be seen how strong they really are for each other.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

And it's good to be back ;)

Reviewer: siennagray Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 05 2013 03:46 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

I used to like Declan' don't anymore. I hope that Colin gets stronger how much beating can one person take. Welcome back great update



Author's Response:

Declan's drifting.  There might be some redemption yet.  And  Rory ( I think that is who you were referring to ;) )  he's just given everyone a glimpse as to just how strong he really is.  It will be interseting to see where this goes, that's for sure.

 

Thanks for the welcome back and thank you for reading and  reviewing!

Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 05 2013 02:25 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

For some reason I don't think Imogene nor Declan give Mallory enough credit nor do they understand that she has an inner strengthen that they both might want to take notice of. She loves Rory he is are hearts desires and no matter how one tries to hurt her and the other tries to coddle her, she is what Rory needs to start fighting for himself. Sometimes it takes something drastic to show them the way. Mallory sensing that Rory would rather take a beating then stand up to the man who made him this way, will stand by Rory more so then let her hatred deterr her from being with Rory. Rory and Mallory are two broken souls that see each other for who they are and I think they both need that. Looking forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Yes, everyone  has this misconception that Mallory's weak solely because she's blind but the reality is she sees far more than anyone else. She's strong for Rory and in turn, Rory's strong for her. They need each other and once they recognize that and stand tall, no one will see them coming.

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I enjoy your insight into  these complex characters :)

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 11:07 pm

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

I'm so glad you're back! I've missed this story. Mallory and Rory are great together. I still feel sorry for Declan but he needs to find someone else. Why can't Imogene leave Rory alone. She is not good for him.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  Yes, poor Declan has got to find his way. Imogene...well, she's not done unfortunately. The path is about to get that much trickier.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 07:35 pm

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

Poor Declan.  I wish he'd find someone and get over Mallory or at least move on.  Imogene is nothing but trouble.



Author's Response:

Declan is having a hard time letting go and getting twisted up with Imogene won't help matters in the least bit. I still have  all hopes that he'll see the light :)

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 12:31 pm

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

mallory pisses me off, why does she have to be another friggin weak woman, and as for declan let him be free of her.



Author's Response:

We all have our weak moments, this is one of them for Mallory. Don't let it deceive you, however. All is not what it seems.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 

 

Reviewer: dounome Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 11:21 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

I love the update



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 08:22 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

I hope Mallory comes out and says, 'What's that god awful stench?' Please make her stronger this time around.  I hope both Rorya nd Mal are willing to fight for their love. 



Author's Response:

LOL! Mallory  is a different creature now - she still loves Rory but won't be taken for a fool. We all have to go through to get through ;)

It's safe to say that Rory and Mallory are going to come to terms really quickly.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 07:30 am

Title: Chapter 9 Broken

That crazy ho cares nothing for Rory and his father is an asshole extradinaire!!  I want Rory and Mallory to have a lasting love without the interference of the donors and Imogene!!   Declan, Mallory and Rory love each please recognize that you will never truly have Mallory' heart. You would just be the stand-in.  I feel so bad for Rory.  I hope that Mallory surprises us all by smacking the snot out Imogene when she smells her!!



Author's Response:

Imogene is one of those chicks who is around solely for benefits - her own. She will use any and everyone to get what she wants. Poor Declan, he's got a road ahead of him, that's for sure.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 07:03 am

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

I need to read an updated of this fabulous story!  

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 17 2013 11:25 am

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

Just read all 8 chapters and I'm in need of more Rory and Mal! I have quickly fallen in love with this story...

Reviewer: Kenyakemya Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 14 2013 03:21 pm

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

Thank you, thank you for stopping Mal and D. from having sex--thank you!   Now, maybe the mom can have limited time with Rory when and if he gets better, but dear old crazy father should not be allowed near him. 

I feel for D., but I am glad he showed how much he cared about M. by not taking advantage of her. Hopefully, you casn send D. a good woman to love.    I love this story and thanks for the excellent update.   Also liked how R can see, but recognized her by her scent  Go save your man Mal!

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 07 2013 05:04 am

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

His father needs to be beaten until the white meat shows!  At least their mother realized the damage that they did to Rory.  Mallory give Rory the chance to make up for hurting her bother physically and emotionally. Maybe they can heal each other. So good!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 07 2013 04:15 am



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