Reviews For Chocolate
Title: Not Quite Dead

Just wanted to let you know that your fanfic is the highlight of my late-night- early morning college routine that I have going on right now!

 

I can't wait until Noni and Loki get together :)



Author's Response:

Weeee! THANK YOU SO MUCH! That means the world to me, really. I just updated chapter 10 and added a new picture in case you missed it. ^_^

Reviewer: FaithMax Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 19 2013 06:58 am

Title: Flashing Lights

LOKI IS MY FAV.  he need him some chocolate i love this pairing



Author's Response:

Lol! I agree. ;) Thank you.

Reviewer: Siren of the Darknessflame Signed [Report This]
Date: April 19 2013 05:48 am

Title: Flashing Lights

It seems that everyone has secrets.  it was said about want happened to jake and i know that Noni and Danny are pretty torn up.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 18 2013 09:09 pm

Title: Not Quite Dead

Loki is in trouble now. Didn't see Jake death coming. 



Author's Response:

Loki is a mess. I love writing his character.

Jake will be missed.

Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 18 2013 02:25 pm

Title: Flashing Lights

Jake died, and I really hate when children die whether it's in a story or real life it makes me sad.  I am done now I have no more words!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 18 2013 01:54 pm

Title: Flashing Lights

Nooooooooooooooo! Not Jake! I barely knew the kid and I'm tearing up like he was a close cousin. So young and full of life that one ...

I love reading about Loki but it's nice to read about Danny to. Dude's not so bad. I feel bad that he lost his kid though.

And what on earth is Loki gonna do about Grimm?

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18 2013 06:51 am

Title: Just a Taste...

Great story. Keep going, don't let self-doubt in!



Author's Response:

Thank You!! I'll try not to. ^_^

Reviewer: Drea Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18 2013 05:53 am

Title: Not Quite Dead

I'm loving this story!!!! Can't wait until the next chapter!!!!!



Author's Response:

I'm glad! Chapter Ten is up now!

Reviewer: coolness_602 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 18 2013 01:51 am

Title: Just a Taste...

I believe that Loki and Noni will be getting busy soon. I can't wait for Noni to break Loki off a piece.  



Author's Response:

Of that Kit-Kat bar! Lmao! You're too much.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 09:28 pm

Title: Just a Taste...

First time reading this story and must say I didn't want to stop.  I'm excited about reading ur next chapter...



Author's Response:

Yay!!! 

Loki would probably say it's because he's in it and you have no choice but to worship him. Lol.

Thanks a lot, keep reading! ^_^

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 08:41 pm

Title: Just a Taste...

Your so funny... No need to curl up into a fetal position and stare at the wall unless the writing on the wall says your awesome. :)

I know as writers we all have those doubts and we just need a little encouragement to keep going. But you've got the goods girl.

I'm really liking this story and love the fact that you produce chapters quickly, which is an answer to my angst over the short chapters. These two characters are funny. Who would have thought that Loki was shy and a gentleman??! I wouldn't mind seeing his character develop and see how he can be evil when provoked. I also wonder if we're going to meet his hunky jock of a brother Thor.

The only thing that bugs me a little is that Noni seems like a smart woman... but no smart woman would pick up a random stranger and give them full access to their home. And then be so casual when she sees his not human. You mentioned that she "recognized some hurt in his eyes". So I think in the beginning it would have been good if you wrote a little more on that. On how a smart sane person would be compelled to take someone in like that... maybe something in her background? 

But any-who I love the chemistry you created so far and am anxious to see where you take it. I think with a little tighter editing and character development you have a really cool story on your hands.

Keep up the good work.

-p2p-

P.S.- stopping your chapter right when they were about to.. kiss? was just plain evil!! Lol 



Author's Response:

Lol. Thanks a lot for the support. I'm just kind of a perfectionist, so when I notice something off after I present it to people, it drives me absolutelty mad. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and I haven't decided on whether or not to make Thor a part of this. He still thinks Loki is dead at the moment, and my idea was to sort of run it into just before The Avengers movie...though come to think about it, I don't really remember all the details of the movie. It's a good excuse to get some Loki action and watch it again! Lol.

And as for Noni's background. Well, stay tuned! ;)

 

And I REALLY HOPE you guys don't think of her as a Mary-Sue. That would murder me...

Reviewer: partial2passion Signed [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 04:10 pm

Title: Just a Taste...

I hope they kiss...let them kiss lol 

I can't wait for a new up date and don't worry I think you are doing really good with this story. :)



Author's Response:

Lol. Thank you! 

Reviewer: bebe2pink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 03:02 pm

Title: Just a Taste...

The attraction is so painfully obvious that it is becoming annoying just thinking about it.  Noni is persistent when it comes to wanting to find uot more about Loki.  There is still so much she does not know and perhaps there is a reason why.  Loki is a trip when it comes to the chocolate and that makes it enchanting because he has his guard down.  It seems that Loki wants more than just a taste, and so does Noni.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 07:28 am

Title: Not Quite Dead

This first chapter was little short for my taste, but still holds my interest.  Moving on to next chapter. 



Author's Response:

I know. I explained on another site that I cut off the chapters a lot, as a way to build suspense. I think it makes the readers anticipate what's coming and think about it rather than just get all the goods at once. :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing! Just put up chapter 8 two mins ago.

Reviewer: wisedec4u Signed [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 06:44 am

Title: Not Quite Dead

OMFG!!! I haven't even read your story yet, but the fact that you are writing a story about Loki Laufeyson makes me want to say...I LOVE U...I LOVE U...I LOVE U!



Author's Response:

Yaaaaaaay!!!!!! I LOVE YOU BACK!!! ^_^

Reviewer: wisedec4u Signed [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 06:38 am

Title: Granny Smith Apples

I want to smell like chocolate ... and I also would like all of the above chocolate covered treats. Provided I got Loki to shop for some with me lol.



Author's Response:

Lol. ^_^

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: April 17 2013 05:20 am

Title: Granny Smith Apples

keep it coming can't wait for the love scene



Author's Response:

Chiiiiiile. Me either! Lmfao.

Reviewer: jadadominique Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 11:00 pm

Title: Granny Smith Apples

Now we see the strong mouth Loki that can back up his words if he must.   If only he knew that women like Noni do not always have to give in to a man's advances.  This would definetly have to be the most unusual shopping trip Noni has ever had. 



Author's Response:

Loki is a G.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 10:58 pm

Title: Granny Smith Apples

I am starting to really Loki now!   I love it free groceries and my favorite free chocolate!



Author's Response:

Lol! Team Loki!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 09:54 pm

Title: Not Quite Dead

Noni, is going to give my Loki a complex is she don't stop all that backing away from him. Does Noni really believe Loki is a God? I know she doesn't want to rush him to explain but she doesn't seem that curious about him or where he comes from.

Great update.



Author's Response:

Thanks! Who knows what will happen... 

Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 01:35 pm

Title: Granny Smith Apples

I like the story so far, and I find your writing clear and entertaining!! Your depiction of Loki is both endearing and frustrating. Endearing because Loki clearly needs support and comfort and his knowledge of relatioships is so limited. Frustrating because Loki also is super arrogant. I can tell he has a lot of growth to do.

My only complaint is Noni's reaction to Loki. It seems a little strange that she is able to accept him as is. Perhaps, a little too accepting. For instance, she seems only midly shocked that Loki can conjure up magical balls of light. Most people would flip out. And while it is nice that Noni avoids asking Loki about his past, it doesn't seem very realistic. If you discovered the person you saved and let stay in your house was not human, you'd have every right to be curious and cautious--untill you determined they weren't a threat. You'd be curious and cautious about the person anyway, considering they are a stranger, but this reaction is especially expected since there is a lot of evidence that Loki isn't human. It's strange that Noni sleeps with a gun under a pillow, yet, she trusts Loki enough to largely avoid asking questions about his origins. Nor is she very ambition in finding out the answers on her own--not researching Loki's origins because the library was closed also seems like a kind of half-hearted and unbelievable excuse. Like...why didn't she just use the internet?

OMG, this turned into a dissertation. I'm not criticizing your story to be spiteful, nor to offend you! If this is the case, I apologize. I really enjoy your story so far, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.  



Author's Response:

Not at all! I appreciate you looking more deeply into the story. But that's the beauty of only giving the audience one chapter a day; you gat tp sit back and enjoy their suspense while you may or may not have all the answers piled up in a file somewhere. ;)

But don't worry, your questions will indeed be answered, my dear! Thanks a lot for your review. ^_^

Reviewer: Botnic1 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 11:32 am

Title: Granny Smith Apples

LOL Loki getting things for free...He needs to come shopping with me then.

I love the update can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Loki: I do what I want!

Like a Boss. Lol.

More will be comin' your way soooon enough. :D

Reviewer: bebe2pink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 10:03 am

Title: Granny Smith Apples

Does she not have a problem with his trickery/stealing?



Author's Response:

Stay tuned to find out. :P

Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 09:18 am

Title: Trifles!

Now whenever I see Loki I'm gonna call him Puddin' in my head lol. Dang though, I couldn't survive with him in my house. I'm not equipped for such hotness. And that kiss! Just out of nowhere! Made me smile.



Author's Response:

Lmao! I know! I'd be such a creeper, watching him from around corners and stuff. Installing spycams in his room. Glad I got a smile. ^_^

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 06:24 am

Title: Trifles!

What a kiss. I'm glad Noni enjoyed it.



Author's Response:

Loki's one BAMF. 

Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 16 2013 06:11 am



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