Reviews For Body Party
Title: Chapter 9

Great story. I am loving all the characters. Love how you handled the black characters. Love me some David Gandy



Author's Response:

He is quite dreamy!

Reviewer: Genevieve Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2013 07:11 pm

Title: Chapter 9

I just love these too :-) 

Reviewer: Dallasstar1725 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 24 2013 01:02 am

Title: Chapter 9

Im loving this story 



Author's Response:

thank you hun

Reviewer: Carriekiara Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 23 2013 09:00 am

Title: Chapter 9

If Arianna isn't preggars then why did put her hand on her stomach?  If Tobias is in love and wants to marry to Arianna why isn't it a good time to have baby?  It would be stupid for her to get pregnant now as it would delay her graduation.  How is Tobias going to keep her safe? I really need an David Gandy in my life!!



Author's Response:

we all need a David Gandy LOL though the world population would sky rocket

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 23 2013 05:50 am

Title: Chapter 1

I am confused. In chapter 1 you said ayvianna had a family. Her cousin did her weave and you talked about her being away from her parents. It's a little inconsistent now that you have her bei ng an orphan. The rest of the content is good tho.



Author's Response:

my apologies, just re edited it. Started off the story that way but was led another way. disregard parents

Reviewer: sailormoon89 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2013 06:48 pm

Title: Chapter 8

Great update, can't wait for more .  I'm liking these two together.

Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2013 03:39 am

Title: Chapter 8

Will he be back in family business?  Is the question that Marianna should ask Tobias.  Was his foray into politics when hi is participation in mob activity ended? That man is hot he can cook for me anytime! 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 21 2013 03:40 pm

Title: Chapter 8

Great chapter! I love how Tobias turned Ariana out! lol. You're an outstanding writer. The visuals are great by the way :-) 



Author's Response:

Awe thank you so much!

Reviewer: Dallasstar1725 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 21 2013 06:59 am

Title: Chapter 7

Another great chapter, I think that Ariana will realise that she made a mistake by saying she doesnt love Tobi. 



Author's Response:

did i make up for her blunder? :)

Reviewer: ldawg60 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 06:24 pm

Title: Chapter 7

Damn that man is fine!!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 04:15 pm

Title: Chapter 7

Arianna he will tell just not until after Friday you couldn't wait a few more days? You wait till ask him the question so..,   Tobias she is in love with you but your family is dangerous she is young and afraid. I am trying to understand the logic of an African American having a DNA test done in France.  Is she looking for her complete racial make up?  I am not sure about the European countries but here in the US of A keep an DNA registry of criminals. Good stuff!



Author's Response:

Compleeeeete racial make up.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 04:05 pm

Title: Chapter 7

I love this story. Just read this morning.Please update soon.

Ariana is just upset right now. She loves Tobias... I know he loves her for sure..

Can't wait to see what happens between the two.

Reviewer: keshah321 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 12:21 pm

Title: Chapter 6

I can't wait to see where their relationship goes. Ariana maybe in over her head.  

Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2013 05:27 am

Title: Chapter 6

Ha! I loved it! I think that you're moving at the right pace. It's just enough to keep us on the edge of our seats. So hot! Well done :-) 

Reviewer: Dallasstar1725 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 18 2013 02:44 am

Title: Chapter 6

There is much too much fineness in this story!!  I just keep looking at the cast pictures so that I can drool somemore.  I love how you are moving this story along but damn Arianna could have Tobias earn her loving more.  She gave it up to easily.  I guess that fine ass TJ has gotten over his attraction to Arianna and gave Samantha some goodness!!



Author's Response:

TJ aint over jack! LOL

And as far as Ariana making Tobi work for her love- I understand where you're coming from but Ari is a naive, open, unknowing orphan. She doesn't know her worth- nah mean?

 

shoot i may bust it wide open for david gandy RIGHT NOW if he asked me

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 18 2013 02:36 am

Title: Chapter 6

so far i like the pace between the two and yes ariana will find out about her pass but i'm waiting for her to find out about his or should i say future

Reviewer: kiavicmcp Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 18 2013 01:09 am

Title: Chapter 1

So will Tobi get rid of his crawling sex slaves?  Mom is not going to be too thrilled about her boy bringing home Ari.  I hope Ari completes her dream of finishing school--they both still need to grow up more.



Author's Response:

Lol  I have no clue if Tobias will...mwahaha

Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: July 12 2013 07:47 am

Title: Chapter 5

love your story more soon

Reviewer: faye Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 12 2013 04:03 am

Title: Chapter 5

GIRL, YES!!!! Tobias is a boss. Point, blank, period! I love his character!



Author's Response:

ahhahah yes Tobias is quite the mannnn

Reviewer: Dallasstar1725 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 12 2013 01:20 am

Title: Chapter 5

No Arianna doesn't know what it truly means to chose Tobias after all she's a child playing at being an adult.  The sex was hot and I really don't want her to get pregnant now I want her to finish her education and get a full time job.  That man is fine and just oozes sex appeal.  I want that man FEDEXed to my house right now!!



Author's Response:

pregnancy isn't happening lol and she will graduate dont you worry, don't mean she can't get married in the mean time. *oopslol jkjkjk

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 11:54 pm

Title: Chapter 4

i do understand where TJ is coming from. i mean did ariana thought about what happens when she goes back to the states. she should think about whether this thing with Tobias is a fling or something serious. and is tabias and is family in the mafia.



Author's Response:

well, after the chapter 5. what do you think?

Reviewer: lucky Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 06:57 am

Title: Chapter 4

He may be right about him having ready made fuck partners, but there is still a bunch of haterism going on there. Dude is so Mafioso. "Head of the family" translates to he who kills for the family to ensure the power base of money, made from illegal SHIT is maitained. No one is that powerful under 30 without knowing some dirt about the people you do business with, either inherited from the previous leader or aquired through nefarious means. Just my 12, cause my thoughts are worth lots more than 2 even in this damn economy, cents



Author's Response:

LOL worth gold in this economy!

Reviewer: monique32 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 06:54 am

Title: Chapter 4

I'm distracted by the hot body to comment correctly.  Nice update



Author's Response:

mhm it's nice isn't it :)

Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 05:33 am

Title: Chapter 4

OK. So I am loving this story first off. Loving the Cast as well.

In response to your questions:

1.  Yes I think that TJ's rant does hold some value but she may not know TJ that well either.  At times it is good to get an outside perspective, though one that comes from someone that may want to be with you may not hold much value.  I fell like I am talking in circles.

2.  Toby travels back and forth between Germany and France, and mow he has an emergency trip to Russia...hmmm? Then a group of SWAT-like men coming in to comb through his office and mention of the Family? My first mind tells me to say that he is a mob boss but the creativity in me wants to belive it is just a family run venture that he was left to run by his father/grandfather.  Maybe Johnnes is Toby's father and he is mad that Grandfather left Toby in charge?  Hmmm?

I guess you will ahve to keep giving us lovely updates to find out.

Just so you know, this is by far the longest review that I have ever written for any story. 

I just may be inspired to write a story of my own.

 



Author's Response:

haha awe thank you for the review! and go ahead write a story!! you can do it

Reviewer: Qsmommy05 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 04:56 am

Title: Chapter 4

Yes tj might be right cause they dont really know tobias at all bdcause they just met him

Reviewer: ChristinaElizabeth Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 04:13 am



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