This story is my addiction!!! Every time I see this story update I be in class and my teacher always think I'm having a seizure. Lol.
But Chris is an asshole!! Ugh!! Then he gon txt her 'no hard feelings ' .......Really?????? After he made her cry!! Really!!! I can't... I can't Chris!!!
Now Eshan!!!! Is so cute!! I love him even more now just because of that note. That's so Eshan!!! Awesome update!!
Author's Response:
I agree. Chris is an asshole. The fact that his "no hard feelings" text ended in a period and not a questions mark is proof positive. I really like Eshan. We'll see if that changes next chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Treale! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story enough to send you into pseudo-convulsions. : ) Now that's a compliment.
Reviewer: Treale Signed
[Report This]Date: September 24 2013 10:39 pm
What a weird question?
Author's Response:
It'll make more sense next chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Melani!
Reviewer: M3l4n1_C4rt3r Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 10:21 pm
Just stumbled upon this story; amazing as usual. Very interesting plot and the characters are something else...lol.
Chris is a pushy, overbearing chump, isn't he...does he not understand what the word "no" means? Guess not, huh..
Eshan needs to put up or shut up...he needs to decide whether he wants Joss or not; well we know now he wants Joss, but he needs to make up his mind what he is going to do about it and stop pussyfooting around...
Hirah is another issue entirely; undercover ho much? Lol
Author's Response:
So glad you found my little tale. I agree with your assessment of Chris. Unfortunately for Joss, she hasn't seen the last of him. We'll see if Eshan's pussyfooting comes to an end and which direction he heads in next chapter. Hirah is...well, you'll see. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Amiefuzzy! So happy to have you along for the ride.
Reviewer: Amiefuzzy Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 09:42 pm
Glad for the update, but this was a "tease chapter". I'll take though!
I feel so badly for Joss. She has all of these emotions and no one to talk about them.
I'm worried about Hirah. She seems a little unstable. What will she do if she finds out Chris is still pursuing her roomie?
Looking forward to seeing what happens with Josh and E.
Please post soon. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Joss has a support system she's yet to tap into. You'll meet them later. You're right to worry about Hirah. She's not done surprising Joss. More on that and Joss and Eshan to come.
The chapters in this story are shorter than the ones I normally post. Writing a novellette/novella length story is new for me, so this is a bit of an experiment. I kind of like the shorter chapters, so I don't plan on making them a lot longer. I can post a couple chapters at a time though. I have a lot going on, so that'll mean longer intervals between updates. But I'm open to that option if that's what readers prefer.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Flgurleygrl!
Reviewer: flgurleygrl Signed
[Report This]Date: September 24 2013 09:07 pm
Great update! I would ignore the note--she is heading toward a nervous breakdown--dealing with a near rape, E. note writing azz, a sneaky roommate, and being overworked in a hostile environment.
I wish she would tell her roomate what her bfriend did (bet her roomie wouldn't believe her) , but maybe the note passer will overhear and tcb.
Author's Response:
Lol! I think you're probably right about Sahirah. But we'll see for sure--and what Eshan's next move is, if Joss gives him a chance to make one--next chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Penelope!
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 06:44 pm
Chris is crazy and why is harrassing Joss if Hirah is putting out? Eshan has ignored since he told about his feelings and said that they could never be so why ask Joss why she moved her bed? If I were Joss I would tell him nunya bizness! What an asshole!!! Thanks for this amazing chapter! !!
Author's Response:
Chris is getting it from a lot more people than just Hirah. He wants Joss because he can't have her. Eshan asking about the bed will make sense (I hope) next chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Pam!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 03:21 pm
wow, what an update - i knew Chris was something else but he took it too far...! for a second i thought Eshan was going to show up and beat Chris up but no...! instead we're back to step one - leaving notes *roll eyes* i agree with RedMoon - dude has two choices. either stick to what he said and stay away(!!) or go for it!!
other than that - thanks for the update!!
Author's Response:
Decision, decision...Poor Eshan has one to make. We'll see what it is and why next chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Cassius!
Reviewer: Yuukiyanagi Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 03:08 pm
I knew Chris was a creep, I hope Eshan steps up. I think it's great that she did not tell her roommate he understands English wonderful update.
Author's Response:
Thanks LilSunseeker! The secret of Eshan's English-speaking abilities is safe for now. We'll see how long that lasts. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 10:22 am
I love this story ...I was so scared Chris was going to hurt her. I think he was playing around and took it too far .Hes a dick for that. Eshan ... Eshan I dont know what to say either stick to what you said or tell it to kick rocks
Author's Response:
Thanks, Redmoon! I agree that Chris took things way too far. We'll see if Eshan stops his fence straddling or if Joss will care one way or the other. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: RedMoon Signed [Report This]Date: September 24 2013 10:13 am
I love this so far but I definitely would like to see a love triangle with both chris and eshan vying for Joss' attention and since Sahirah has been kind of a jerk friend she should get pushed to the side by Chris in favor of pursuing Joss. Just some ideas throwing them out there love the fic
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading, reviewing, and the ideas, Siren! Chris hasn't done a good job of endearing himself to Joss. But you never know...
Reviewer: Siren of the Darknessflame Signed [Report This]Date: September 14 2013 08:36 am
You have an amazing voice- through which your characters, their dialogue and the narrative speak. The pace is nice; its cadence has an onward purpose and I love that about your writing.
Joss is off da chain. Chick is wild for stalking a stalker in the wee hours of the morning, alone, in the backseat of her car; I mean...who does that!? When she noticed his 'massive hand' I knew to whom it belonged but certainly didn't surmise the reasons for his covert actions.
Eshan and English-speaking, huh? Betray / beguile...too funny! Your play of words is awesome!
Chris is a cad and Sahirah is a fool but hey, stranger things have happened but in this case...I'm not quite sure.
Very nice story, looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response:
Your review made my entire day. Updates forthcoming. Thanks for reading and reviewing, JV4ME!
Reviewer: JV4ME Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 11:08 pm
Didn't expect that, LOVED IT! great job.
Author's Response:
Thanks Lil Sunseeker!
Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 11:04 pm
That's a dumb plan..
Author's Response:
I don't know of which plan you speak. But thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 09:23 pm
I like her but he's a turn off..
Author's Response:
Thanks Lil Sunseeker!
Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 09:09 pm
I don't trust the other female roommate and I would be leery of him, too. He should explain why being a Muslem and Iranian makes a relationship impossible for them and what he would expect from her---then she may decide that he's right.
Author's Response:
Joss will later discover Eshan's reasoning. It's not about his expectations for her. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Penelope!
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 07:30 pm
i knew it was him! But that wasnt the scene i thought it was going to be. Very good story!
Author's Response:
Thanks Melanie!
Reviewer: M3l4n1_C4rt3r Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 07:29 am
It's always interesting to see how long two people living in the same house can deny themselves...I'll give it a week, maybe two since he's trying to be hard.
Author's Response:
Lol! We'll see if you're right. Updates forthcoming. Thanks for reading and commenting, VeMo.
Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 03:20 am
I enjoyed this latest update as well as the rest of the story. I'm not totally surprised Eshan was the culprit. Although I understand his culture, his behavior was still suspect.
Author's Response:
So glad you like the story. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Liason!
Reviewer: Liason4220 Signed [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 12:35 am
Joelle, you write beautifully. I can't wait for the fancy new words,Lol. I Love Joss btw and Eshan's situation is a difficult one.
Author's Response:
Thank you, Lindy! *heart smiles* Updates forthcoming, along with whatever fancy words I don't sleep through. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Lindy Anonymous [Report This]Date: September 13 2013 12:13 am
I KNEW IT!!! I KNEW IT!! I KNEW IT!!!!!!! Lol awesome update!!!!!
Author's Response:
Lol! Yes you did. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Treale!
Reviewer: Treale Signed [Report This]Date: September 12 2013 10:06 pm
this part ->
For an unnervingly long moment, he sat in silent contemplation, refusing to give his thoughts a voice.
“Why are you accusing me of somehow wronging you? How have I betrayed you?”
“It was not meant as an accusation. ‘You betrayed me’ means you have beguiled me...you have seduced me.”
“According to whom?”
“Thesaurus.com.”
made me laugh loudly on the damn train - yup, i turned heads, and got funny looks but it was worth it because that was frickin brilliant and clever done :D
official i'm crushing on Eshan (no surprise. i'm always crushing on your male leads, lol!) and sure dude pretend like nothiiing has happened because that thought is going last...not!! 1000x thanks for the update and laughter! 1
Author's Response:
You are very welcome. So glad you got a new crush and a good laugh out of it and didn't let the funny looks steal your joy. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Cassius! I truly appreciate your readership.
Reviewer: Yuukiyanagi Signed [Report This]Date: September 12 2013 08:36 pm
I love this story. The dialogue is so natural and Eshan is downright adorable.
I can't wait for next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks Briella! So glad you're enjoying the story. As soon as I get my CEUs done (ugh!), I'll update. Thanks for reading and commenting!
Reviewer: Briella Signed [Report This]Date: September 12 2013 06:43 pm
Wow! That was unexpected. I didn't see any of that coming. I can't wait to read the next chapter to see where this goes. I don't trust the cousin. There's something very sneaky and desperate about her.
Please update SOON!
Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Sahirah does deserve the side-eye. We'll see if she can redeem herself or fully earn pariah status. Updates forthcoming. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Flygurleygrl!
Reviewer: flgurleygrl Signed [Report This]Date: September 12 2013 06:33 pm
Eshan is tricky! However he has lived in America long enough to know that leaving messages using words like betrayl would be seen as a threat. Again Imam not liking this Sahaira chick she is not a true friend. I would put both of them out! Good stuff!!
Author's Response:
Thanks Pam! I would agree with you about him being in America long enough to know the negative connotations of that word dominates in American minds if his family was into interacting with Americans. But they are not. We'll see if that earns him and Sahirah the boot. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: September 12 2013 05:30 pm
i am really intrigued by eshan...good look with your CEUs!
Author's Response:
Thanks LiLi!
Reviewer: LiLi Signed [Report This]Date: September 12 2013 12:42 pm