Title: Chapter 2 Let Me Hold You Close by Bow Wow

Finish it please!



Author's Response:

O WOW!!! Thank you. Didn't know if anyone was still interested. I will finish it just working on another story first. Trying to finish these before moving to the next. I do like this story and will continue it. Thank you for your review!

Reviewer: Huneii Wyld Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2014 05:00 pm

Title: Chapter 2 Let Me Hold You Close by Bow Wow

Now this was hot!! I really enjoyed it. Can't wait to read more. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing it. I plan to get back to it soon.

Reviewer: Yevette Linn Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 03 2014 08:02 am

Title: Chapter 2 Let Me Hold You Close by Bow Wow

It was about sexy!  Draken is fine as hell!



Author's Response:

PMGAYLES!!! He is isn't he. Thank you for reading my story and reviewing as always.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 09:57 pm

Title: Chapter 1-First Time Ever I Saw Your Face-Roberta Flack

So her cousins right hand man was an orphan I wander what happened to his parents. Mama J is a very wise accomplished lady who is like Martens second mom. Gwen is fallin hard fast. They have a family get together can't wait to see how that goes sure drama with her aunt & cuzos.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm sure there will be a lot of drama next chapter and possibly find out more about Daken, his parents, and why he was taken in by Gwen's uncle. Thanks again.

Reviewer: KVgurl Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 10:38 am

Title: Chapter 1-First Time Ever I Saw Your Face-Roberta Flack

I'm never excited for immaturity and that's something I can see in Gwen. It always leads to silly mistakes and a lot frustration. Unfortunately, it's a necessary must for character development and I love me some growth in a lead character. I think it's weird how they fell in love/lust so quickly, but you set it up very nicely in the first chapter and it flowed despite the suddenness of the sexual acts. I like this story a lot because you've given it a great foundation at face value. There's no searching to be done between the lines or any confusion as to who acts like what. It's realistically fiction. I love that in a tale. I really hope Gwen stays strong despite coming and present insecurities. I would like to see Daken have a few weaknesses because it's so rare in a story nowadays for the men to be the flawed or emtotionally damaged parties. I feel like with Dags mysterious pass it makes for a great way to show that men also struggle with relationship insecurities and have more feelings than simply "I man...you woman...sex...pretty.....marry" alpha type emotions. Despite the sort of naive, light feel the first two chapters have (which I love) you've set up the story in a way that can have depth, smut, romance, fluff, and some darkness without weighing the plot down. I'm excited to see your creative development!!! 



Author's Response:

I love this type of review. It helps me think of what I have written and how it comes across to readers. It helps with the future development of upcoming chapters so thank you.The love/lust so quickly I did have a little issue with it as I was writing it, but did you see Daken? HOT!! I credit the lust/love so quickly due to her immaturity and maybe not being able to distinguish the two, just knowing that she wants Daken for herself and it's a reasonable justification instead of just wanting to fuck him. I do feel there is a genuine attraction/ puppy love that has potential for growth on both their parts. As for suddeness of sexual acts, I daydream a lot. When I watch people sometimes I'll imagine sexual stuff that would happen. So, what better way to fantasize than putting those unihibited  thoughts and acts you would never do in real life in a story. Thank you soo much for your review idiotendenial.

Reviewer: idiotendenial Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20 2014 07:36 am

Title: Chapter 1-First Time Ever I Saw Your Face-Roberta Flack

I love a story where fhe female lead is tall sister! Daken is fine as hell!  Bianc and Bethany and fheir momma need a neat down of epic proportions.   Them ho's are making my teeth itch!  I am so glad that Gwen is confident in who she is because her Uncle's wife comment would have destroyed her. Ecil women.  I have the feeling that them two bitches have made plays for Daken and he turned them down flat. Daken needs a real woman and Gwen is that girl. At 18 she's not a woman yet, but stll a teenager.  So glad that Marten isn't an asshole. How did he turn out so well?  Spending summers w I th Gwen and her family kept him sane! Loving this story already!!



Author's Response:

Pmgayles!! You are right Gwen is not a woman yet, you will see some of that immaturity in the coming chapters but she will be a woman by the end of this story. As far as Marten, well he spends most of his time with his father and yes I'm sure Gwen's family helped too. We will meet Uncle Victor in the next chapter. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2014 01:32 pm

Title: Chapter 1-First Time Ever I Saw Your Face-Roberta Flack

Great chapter! Can't wait for the next update!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading it. I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: cdy1216 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2014 11:55 am



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