This story has such great potential, you're a good writer. I hope you continue 😀Reviewer: guest Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 26 2015 05:07 am
I like D/s stories and this one has potential, but you might want to consider a beta reader or editor. There were a lot of spelling and usage errors that interrupted the natural flow of the story. I'd be happy to help if you're agreeable to that.Reviewer: Jaye Sims Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2015 07:50 pm
who's the girl that is supposed to be Lydia? She's gorgeousReviewer: Alexis Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 04 2015 05:23 pm
I love your story so far. Glad it is a Dom/sub story with characters being Asian/black, there are not many of those. I just hope you update soon and I don't have to wait months for just one update. I really really like the story it is different and unique. Thanks, update soon,very soon a86;a039; PS very nice picturesReviewer: Shanee Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2015 01:42 pm
Sorry for the long wait for chapt 3, I too hate strung out stories, but to be honest, writers' block is a bitch. I wanted to give you guys a good story. It's been playing around in my head for a while. I hope you like where I'm taking the story. And yeah, please forgive the typos.Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2014 02:19 am
I really like you're story! Only thing I would watch out for are typos. Just wondering are you going to incorporate kinbaku into their future relationship?
I was thinking along those lines.Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 09 2014 05:00 am
I'd prefer not to review the story at this time. However, as someone in the BDSM lifestyle for several years, just a question and one pointer. Is Yuan simply upset that Emi did not use his assigned title for the scene, or that she ordered him not to stop, and cursed as well?
Also, there are no such thing as Jabari knots. They are called "Shibari Knots". Here is a link that gives a bit of history on them. http://www.hikarikesho.com/eng/shibari.php
You are right, my only excuse (which is kind of sad in my own opinion), I was writing this late at night and was too lazy or sleepy to stop my flow to click over to google it for the correct spelling. Sorry.
Yuan was pissed because Emi likes to disrupt his control during their scenes. He likes complete control and the fact that she defies him annoys him. He wants to control his sub's pain and pleasure, not for them to inject their own form of control as Emi does. And yes 'forgetting' to call him Sir was yet another instance of her defying him.Reviewer: Miki Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2014 06:37 am
Ok... You got me.
This is a response to a review that was deleted (not by me) concerning the un-Japanese lingo. Both guys met in California attending UCLA, my nephew stayed 2 yrs in Japan, and one of the things that blew his mind, was how hip (thuggish hip; girls and guys had cornrows, timberlands and whatnot) the guys and girls were where he was stationed. So if they can use slang in Japan then I'm quite confident they could pick up the swag in Cali, especially coming from wealthy families and are most likely world travelers... my story, so you can bet they are at least both.Reviewer: Khamalani Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2014 02:55 pm