Reviews For The Ace of Spades
Title: II

Teen romance is typically not my cup of tea. I read this story because of the rating. I thought it was an adult story with teen characters. 

Physical descriptions of the characters are vague. I was kind of excited when Chanel was eyeing Jonah as he stood in line at the food court. I thought, "Finally a description of what he looks like." Jonah's physical appearance can be a bit vague for now because Chanel is in her own world but I was expecting a more detailed description of Chanel since she is the object of Jonah's affection. There were a ton of details about the characters' clothing but next to none about their physical appearance.

The writing is fine.

Keep writing.



Author's Response:

Thanks! Honestly, I wasn't even thinking about describing their skin color and whatnot while I was writing until someone pointed it out in an earlier desciption and I was like 'Oh... oops.' Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: JFJD Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 04:24 pm

Title: II

I don't know why but I can't stand Chanel. I hope her attitude changes. Jonah seems like a love sick puppy chasing Chanel at her heels.

Author's Response:

He really is; honestly I kind of hate that. And there'll be some self discovery coming from Chanel later in the book, so I hope you stick around to see her stop acting like she runs the world. Thank you for reading and commenting 8)

Reviewer: Dreamingofalifetime Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 04:43 am

Title: II

Oooo, I'm interested.



Author's Response:

:) fun to come. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05 2014 03:05 am

Title: II

That was a sweet little encounter tha they ahd.. Wonder who this Michael Sands is??



Author's Response:

He'll be introduced next chapter. Yay! And that at the cafe was cute between them now. Thanks for reading and reviewing. 

Reviewer: Jesslove3205 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 05 2014 02:51 am

Title: II

I can't stand Chanel and this chapter sealed that fact even more. Jonah is sweetheart but his taste in girls needs some work.



Author's Response:

Wow I'm actually really surprised that no one likes Chanel. I didn't think I really wrote her to be so bitchy but I guess when she was insulting him so much right before they made the deal in the library, that might be when I wrote her meanness in. I feel like she's pretty normal in chapter one, but in chapter two, I actually started writing her attitude in when she was talking with the teacher. But I didn't really see anything she said prior to the library scene as unlikeable. But this is actually good that no one likes her; I can actually run with this. I'd rather you not like her because she's a bitch than dislike her because she's stupid and 'typical'. Thanks for sharing your opinion it really opened a new door for me. 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 05 2014 01:13 am

Title: II

Any physical description of the characters??



Author's Response:

In chapter one, I described Chanel's burgundy color hair when she was getting ready for her party, I also described her friends looks, too. In chapter two, I mentioned what colour hair Jonah has when he was trying a new style before they met at the mall. Now I know that hair colour blah blah blah isn't everything, so I also described his broad shoulders when Chanel was checking him out when he was getting their food at the cafe. At the beginning of chapter one, when Jonah was ogling Chanel, I also said that she had big boobs, that's something worth mentioning [in my opinion]. We know Chanel has brown eyes. The moral of the story: I've put physical description of the characters in the book. Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 04 2014 11:25 pm



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