This story is so intriguing and well written. Please don't take too long to update.
Reviewer: Antalye Signed [Report This]Date: February 03 2015 04:53 pm
I actually like the fact that you are featuring something in your story that I haven't seen in other stories on this site (although, admittedly, I haven't read many): Intraracism (especially regarding black men towards black women).
It is a fact that some black guys, especially "successful"/wealthy/famous black guys, feel/think/act this way towards black females as a whole. And, most of the time, they are unapologetic when it comes to that way of thinking.
And don't even get me started on the double-standards regarding interracial dating in the Black community...
As far as I'm concerned, if something is as true as this is, there is nothing wrong with it being featued in a story (you are NOT making the black guy a "villian" by making your story different yet just as realistic as stories that feature non-ignorant black guys).
I also find it interesting that the same people complaining to you about how you portray black guys probably don't find a problem with these stories that portray dark-skinned black women as victims of low self-esteem/self-worth because of their looks (Smh, yet ANOTHER double-standard).
I applaud you!
I have enjoyed the first few chapters of your story and I will definitely continue reading.
Author's Response:
Omg thank you so much! Your comment literally brought tears to my eyes. I'm so happy that people can see the realness that I'm trying to portray in this story. That's what the other reviewer didn't understand, and I don't feel bad that I gave her realness. So thank you and everyone else who supports and love this story!
Reviewer: Guest Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 16 2015 01:20 am
I am Mixed race woman who identifies as black. I don't need to educate myself as you put it, I know what's up. I disagree with you about MOST black men treating black women like crap. It is your story as you say. I was just making the point that one does not have to step on the BLACK MAN to make the White man look good in stories that are interracial. You seem upset' and that was not my intention.
Author's Response:
I'm not upset nor am I stepping on black men to make white men look good. I don't think white men are better than black men cause at the end of the day white men are still gonna be attracted to eurocentric beauty standards, and black men can be that way as well. My female character does not have eurocentric beauty, and the male character is not a saint nor am I implying that he's a saint because he's white. I just want this to be cleared up.
Reviewer: madison Signed [Report This]Date: January 12 2015 04:08 am
Awww. Why Idris? Robert needs a stick up his butt. I love how you're using a dark skinned black woman as you're female protagonist. And I love Matt Bomer.
Author's Response:
;)
Reviewer: Dreamingofalifetime Signed
[Report This]Date: January 12 2015 01:37 am
Robert is a jerk! It burns me up when ppl self-discriminate! 😡
Author's Response:
Yep it's disgusting.
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: January 11 2015 08:25 pm
Robert is a piece of shit character... How classless of a so called man to talk to another woman, hell a human being like that. Disgusting. I love Andrew, he is a real gentleman with honor. I can't wait for the next chapter, I hope their date is much better than what happend at the resturant.
Great job, please post again soon :D
Author's Response:
Thank you!!!
Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed [Report This]Date: January 11 2015 06:57 am
Why do a lot of writers of interracial stories make the BLACK MAN THE VILLIAN!?? I like the story except for that part. The stuff the character spews out of his mouth. YUCK. Is Travis black or white?
Author's Response:
Well in my story, I made Robert like that to portray him as a successful but self-hating black man. Now let me just inform you that black people can discriminate their own people. For example, Team Lightskin vs. Team Darkskin. In this country, hell even in the damn world, black women are treated like shit, and most black men are the ones treating us like shit. If we aren't lightskin or white passing, then we're ugly. It's those Eurocentric beauty standards. I'm a lightskinned woman, but I believe that lightskin (or white) doesn't always mean beautiful and darkskin doesn't always mean ugly. I'm not being rude or mean when I say this, but please educate yourself on this subject because we as black women need to know this type of stuff. I know it's a work of fiction, being that it's my work of fiction, I just wanted to clarify some things with you whether you care or not.
Reviewer: madison Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 05:34 pm
Wow, Robert is a butt wad! I love Felicia being bilingual. Andrew is a sweetheart and a gentleman. It is so sad that many of our wealthy and successful African American males date and marry exclusively white women. As well as the double standard when African American women date or marry outside of their race is still rare among the wealthy. The exceptions being Robert Deniro, George Lucas and Bill Mohr. Your story is really wonderful and I can't wait to read more. Ciao.
Author's Response:
Yeah, it's a harsh reality that some black women don't realize, and when it's brought up out in the open they want to dismiss it. Most black men are like that about black women, it's so sad.
Reviewer: Charly43 Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 05:30 pm
Robert got just what he deserved, arrogant jackass, Andrew should Fire is ignorant ass.
Liking Andrew and Felica, can't wait to see their date.
Reviewer: liberty lady Signed
[Report This]Date: January 10 2015 04:46 pm
Dun lost his mind!!! Bye (why does her name have to be Felicia lol) boy! What's wrong with you surrounded by air clouds that you don't realize both women are the same!!!! Watch his new chick gonna trap him ans ink him dry! (It would be good to see) and someone is going to help yah its your story I'm rooting for the Felecia side so peace!!
Author's Response:
Felicia just popped up in my head, and then I thought about Bye Felicia and laughed my ass off!
Reviewer: Keyajackson Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 04:41 pm
Sadly I think some black men are like that
Reviewer: PetitteBelle Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 03:45 pm
Robert is an asshole who needs his @$$ kick!!! Rude much! Andrew please fire Robert as he will be a problem in your pursuit of Felicia. So her parents kicked her to the curb for being stupid, how cruel. He showed her his true self but she didn't believe him and had unprotected sex with him. Really? In the words of one of my favorite Teddy Riley songs, "Dumb, dumb ditty!" Now she is working as waitress and a virtual ho to support herself and her son because she couldn't finish school when she lost her parents support. I wonder does she have any regrets? I wonder about her thoughts of the future? Here's to hoping that she recognizes the real man in Andrew and gives him a chance?! Me likey!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 03:35 pm
Love how the story is unfolding....just like to point out inconsistency of sitter's name, it was the Franklins in Chapter 1 and became the Smiths in Chapter 2. Uppity Robert deserves be immersed with water for putting Fe down, kudos to Knight Andy.
Reviewer: Agape Realms Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 03:28 pm
Really you just had to pick my Idris Elba to be the asshole friend. Love me some Idris.
Author's Response:
I love Idris too, but he popped up in my head when I wanted someone sexy. Hehe!
Reviewer: kiavicmcp Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 03:23 pm
Nooooo, not Idris!
Reviewer: linalin Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 02:10 pm
Omg I adooooore this story!!! Andrew is so adorable as well as Fe!!!! I work in a restaurant part time and I'm glad she said that to robert... Some of these people are just too out of order! Will this be update weekly or just whenever you've got the time? I really don't mind, as long as you continue!! This story is amazing!
Reviewer: chatty504 Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 01:35 pm
Wow, did the fine sexy brother have to be a racist ass against his own people? I am glad Robert saw him for what he is. Who knew Felicia could speak Italian? Good background info on Felicia.
Giving you a 10 just because of the water toss, I would have done the same thing!
Great beginning, bring on chapter 3, and the drama!
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 01:28 pm
Loved the fact her boss supported her, cute.
Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 01:18 pm
OK everything in me is revolting against Idris being Robert. I saw his picture and was like NOOOOOOOO!!! So in my mind that's a no go. Robert is a complete asshole. And should be happy Felicia didn't punch his ass.
Reviewer: shellyme Signed [Report This]Date: January 10 2015 11:23 am
I like it! I like it! I hope you write many more chapters, I can see this being a full length story.
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]Date: January 03 2015 02:54 pm
Great start, can't wait for more.
Reviewer: Liason4220 Signed [Report This]Date: January 02 2015 05:08 pm
I just finished reading this first chapter, and i'd like to say that i found it very enjoyedable. Please give us an update!
Reviewer: sandra Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 30 2014 11:10 pm
Awesome start. Didn't like the girl Andrew was on the date with. Great beginning. Can't wait to read more.
Reviewer: laughterandlife Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 30 2014 01:14 am
Hmmm. A bit eerie that he didn't wanna show his face. Great start.
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: December 22 2014 01:11 pm