Reviews For Breathe (revised)
Title: Out With the Old, In With the New

Eric Winter...muy caliente!!! Lucky Lynne...



Author's Response:

Ain't he delicious?

Reviewer: kuriouskale Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2015 02:37 am

Title: Out With the Old, In With the New

Ssul is disgusting and clearly learned nothing from his "mistakes" with Alicia. The dumb man should take responsibility for his marriage failing and do better. Sexing the mistress even in anger isn't doing better. But Malcolm likes Lynne. Cute!

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2015 02:36 am

Title: The Sit Down

This is awesome!! I love that Lynne has a little fire. I recalling reading it the first time and enjoying it just as much.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading!

Reviewer: kuriouskale Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2015 12:53 am

Title: The Sit Down

Wauw. He wanted something different? How low is that. So he is basically saying that he got tired of her and that she wasn't satisfying him anymore? What an ass.  Lynne did the right thing. Divorce is the right solution. He continued his affair for months. And with a psycho girl at that. If it wasn't because Alicia had called and told Lynne, I don't think he would have told Lynne about the affair. He is selfish. Saul does not deserve a second chance.  And counseling will not help if you already made up your mind. To forgive your husband of having an affair is very difficult. It will never be the same no matter what. And you will never be able to trust him 100% anymore. It will always be at the back of your mind. Don't get me wrong. It is possible to forgave, because at some point you will have to move on. But that doesn't mean that you should continue with your marriage or relationship. its better to be apart then. Yes Saul may regret it for the rest of his life. But that is his own fault. He should have kept it in his pants. Now he would have to deal with the consequences of his actions. His tears are too a little to late.

I hope for Saul that he would be able to restore his relationship with his son. I can imagine what Malachi is feeling because my father to cheated on my mom and in the worst way. But I'm also proud of my mom, for leaving and not putting up with his cheating ways. While she loved my dad very much. She also loved herself more and knew that staying with him will never be the same again. She just couldn't get past it. So it was better to let go.Till this day I was never able to see him or respect my dad like I used too. He is my dad, and I will always love him. And while we have a relationship now. He still knows that I will always resent him a little for what he had done to our family. 

Reviewer: Too late Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 31 2015 12:22 am

Title: The Sit Down

Yes Just do it girl

Reviewer: Charming2i Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 11:28 pm

Title: The Sit Down

Saul, Lynne is giving you what you deserve!  But counseling would be preferable first, get out all of the anger so that they can both move on.  Family counseling so that Cammie and Make can jack his ass up as well. There should be a family tag team!



Author's Response:

Lynne's already made up her mind and there's no going back for her.  His admission was a slap in the face.  No reason would have been okay, but the fact that he continued because Alicia was "different", made her feel like in some way the dam had broken for him and he'd always be looking for something "different".  There's no going back for her.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 11:23 pm

Title: The Sit Down

More more more please!

Reviewer: L Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 11:12 pm

Title: Don't Poke the Bear

This is so good do not let them get back together let her go on with her life and bump the husband

Reviewer: Charming2i Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 02:08 pm

Title: Don't Poke the Bear

Alicia is just too bold and she is the one crazy.  Well, can't say Lynne didn't warn her--poke the bear and next time she is going to get swatted hard.  

Lynne really should get tested for any STDs and HIV--I think this will make it easier for her to move on.

I wish this had been longer.

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 04:35 am

Title: Don't Poke the Bear

YASSSSSSSSSSS. Lynne - still waters run deep - with a right hook. YASSSSSSSSSSSS!

You do know that Lynne could shoot yo ass, drag you across the threshold and call 911, having just shot an intruder. Stoopid, stoopid git. Alicia is a twit.

Reviewer: BellaChica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 03:44 am

Title: Don't Poke the Bear

Alicia needs a beat down!!!   Lynne hit her with a left hook, damn! So Alicia will still try to play games, I want her tarred and feathered!



Author's Response:

Done!  LOL, just kidding, a tarring and feathering would be an interesting plot twist, though.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 30 2015 03:43 am

Title: His Betrayal

This is REAL!

i didn't read the original, but this is taking life. A lot of men cheat because they give in to temptation, but moreso because they don't think they will get caught! This wasn't a one-off. This was a month. He weighed the risks and kept on going. Never factoring in, that Alicia was not all there upstairs.

Alicia thinks it's her vs the wife. She doesn't realize it's her vs wife+Mal+Cam+grandma+Aunt Ernie. Will Lynn decide to fight for her man?

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 29 2015 06:58 pm

Title: The kids are NOT alright

Wow, that was some heartfelt, strong, emotional daggers his kids threw at him?  Cam asked some tough questions?  What was so special about Alicia that you threw away 25yrs of marriage, your family away for?  I'm interested in that answer myself.  A true, honest internal reflection from Saul on really, why did he continue to do it after the conference.  Loved Mal's words to him.  He basically called his dad selfish and that he never considered how anyone else would be impacted by this until now because stuff went to hell in a hand basket.  Part of me want Lynne to divorce Saul because I think for him to truly get it, he has to really lose her,  I feel like Saul is banking on the woman that Lynne was before this and the love she has for him to pave his way to forgiveness vs putting in work, true honest to goodness we down on the railroad tracks for 14 hr days work.  Working to get her back when she isn't tethered to you and others recognize her worth is different than attempting to get her to forgive when you know as long as she is "married" to you, she won't actively be with someone else.  Did Saul not think, what would I feel like if the shoe was on the other foot?

Oh and Saul the crying right now feels like a little to late to make a difference in any of your families lives.  Matter of fact where is Saul's family?  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2015 09:34 am

Title: The kids are NOT alright

Pretty good so far. We're always quick to say what we won't do or take; however, until you're in the situation you don't know what you'll do.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2015 09:29 am

Title: The kids are NOT alright

See what you did Saul. And Mal's right, NOW you think about the effect of your actions. YOU FOOL. Cry me a frickin' river, why doncha?

Reviewer: BellaChica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2015 03:55 am

Title: The kids are NOT alright

Damn Mal let loose with both barrels! Saul you are a punk.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2015 03:54 am

Title: Author's Note

Love the cast!



Author's Response:

Me too!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 08:16 pm

Title: Mama Say

aaaaaaaaaaaaaw, nuthin like havin your mama my girl needed me like that.

Reviewer: dounome Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 06:34 pm

Title: Author's Note

See I was thinking a younger Phylicia Rashad

http://i.huffpost.com/gen/1676816/images/o-PHYLICIA-RASHAD-COSBY-facebook.jpg



Author's Response:

Initially I was too, but then I saw a picture of Gina Torres and remembered her from "Serenity" and she had a strength and vunerability that just screamed "Lynne" to me.

Reviewer: SunnySideDown Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 05:12 pm

Title: Mama Say

i think losing the story was a great event. I like where this is heading much more. Great job. 

Reviewer: Iliketoread Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 01:11 pm

Title: Mama Say

Lawwwdddd, Mom and Auntie had me ke-keeing!! Looking forward to reading more....there are many dynamics in infidelity. Jaye Sims, honty yaaaassssss (said w/my pointer finger wagging)



Author's Response:

LOL!  Thank ya kindly.

Reviewer: Cyn Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 12:12 pm

Title: Mama Say

I would give my left eye if Aunt Ernie ran into the trick. Ernie is a mess. But she really gave Mal what he needed. Ernie made me choke talking about the little crumb snatchers.

I really like the relationship between the women and Mal. That's a real family unit. Oh Saul, what have you done, you FOOL. I loved how Lynne became the child who needed the comfort of her mama. Put a smile on my face.



Author's Response:

You might get your wish, Bella.  Musey is telling me that there WILL be a confrontation.  Shoes will be kicked off, earrings will be pulled off, and someone WILL get them paws.

Reviewer: BellaChica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 07:40 am

Title: Where Do We Go From Here?

Saul best make sure that bitch is in check. And she may be bad, but there's always someone badder. She don't know Lynne. She best be careful if she tries to step to her. That little mousy school teacher might just dust the floor with her crazy ass. Lynne's a lady, but I suspicion that if pushed, she will kick a mudhole in that ass.

Reviewer: BellaChica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 07:32 am

Title: The Purge

Singing. The last sentence was EVERYTHING.

Reviewer: BellaChica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 06:48 am

Title: Mama Say

"Homeless dumpster divers"...that had me cracking up.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2015 06:15 am



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