I so enjoyed this story and EAGERLY await its return. Hope all is well with you and yours : )Reviewer: Joelle Jax Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 11 2016 09:19 pm
why would she tell him her plans? I'm already annoyed. I really wanted her to get away for a few years and he goes crazy looking for her. That would've been a different take than the usual dominating, overprotective, male and the helpless, submissive female story type that seems to be prevalent :/Reviewer: lonieg Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28 2015 06:44 am
Good chapter! The first show of connection, emotion and intimacy between Nathan and Yani. Nathan can't keep acting like he hates her because now she knows he feels something for her. What's next for them? I'm excited to find out!Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]
Date: May 26 2015 11:13 pm
Great chapter. Sometimes you gotta leave the audience wanting more and I definitely want more.
I understand about posting cast pictures. Unless I have someone in particular in mind when I write a character, real life never measures up to what I have in my head.
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Date: May 26 2015 10:57 pm
Omfg... you're killing me with the 4 paragraph chapters. I use to find this story intriguing... but now it's just irritating my nerves. There's cliffhangers and then there's bullshit. Stop bullshitting your readers with these half assed cliffhangers on every chapter and just write the story. Shit is getting ridiculous. 😒
:( I really liked this chapter. It's actually one of my favourites, but point taken about the short chapters!Reviewer: Rolling eyes while smacking teeth Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 26 2015 07:22 pm
Why won't Nathan just admit that he doesn't hate Yani....he knows he loves her. And she loves him....I don't know how I feel about pictures, it would be nice to see the cast as you see them but then again, i prefer to use imagination as to what the characters look like. But either way you decide, I'm still a fan of the story and I can't wait for another chapter.Reviewer: cottoncandy_kisses Signed [Report This]
Date: May 26 2015 05:40 pm
Nathan has got it bad for Yani and he can't admit it! Pictures depend on the choices for me. Some turn me off and some not. If I'm turned off by a picture, oftentimes I can't finish the story. But for the most part, pictures have been fine with the stories I have read. I am enjoying this book and will try to continue reading. Do what motivates you to keep writing!Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]
Date: May 25 2015 07:41 pm
I like this story, I really do. I love well-written/multi-dimensional-character books that encompasses intrigue, suspense, danger, action-and-adventure...the whole-nine with this genre. Never been a fan of third-party monkey wrenches used as props to envkoe angst however...your technique with Yani, Malcolm, & Nathan totally works here (brava!) I'd love to see more interaction/dialogue/development between Yani & Nathan.
ITA with you in regards to cast photos; sometimes they're a major turnoff or killer enhancements. Usually I purposely avoid looking at the pics b/c I like to or has already envisioned the characters' faces, complexions, body build, etc, in my mind- as I have with Visceral. Idk, I'm on the fence about the imagery; it's your call (haha).
Cant wait to see what happens next!Reviewer: JV4ME Signed [Report This]
Date: May 25 2015 02:56 pm
I agree with you. I have images in my mind, and at this point photos which don't match will cause a stutter in my enjoyment.
I think pictures should be used at the beginning, not later.Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 25 2015 01:53 pm
Maddie sees what Yani refuses to see and that's Nathan's obvious love foe Yani. Why is Yani so resistant? It can't just be about how they first meet. What is going on in Yani's head? She is working my last nerve!! Nathan apologized to Maddie, color me surprised! Awesome sauce!Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: May 25 2015 01:24 pm
Wow, Nathan really has some stong feelings for Yani. He either needs to get them under control or let her know how he feels.Reviewer: annienathanson Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 07:22 pm
Woew Nathan better be careful his feelings are slipping out although I don't see that as a bad thing. So this guy after Yani what does he want to achieve by killing her because Malcolm is dead so what would be the point or is it that the is no point at all. And Nathan shouldn't have pulled her out of the shop like that, now Maddie's going to thing Yani is in the self defense classes because she's in a abusive relationship. Loving this and I can't wait for more.Reviewer: Zoleka Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 03:44 pm
sso where is Yani from?Reviewer: anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 01:58 pm
Thanx for the quick answer girl !! Regarding the use of name, you're right, she is a bait. I asked because the villains having mastered the underground life for so long, could have sensed that something was fishy with the target's widow using her real name and being protected and out of reach for 2,5 years now. Regarding the insights, I'm with whatever you choose, I'm just eager to discover more. So far I'm thrilled with the way you disclosed the background piece by piece, which made me eager to know more. Hey girl, don't mistake my eagerness for demands (well... let's replace this by critics, hihihi!) Oh, by the way, I loved this jealous caveman scene, I wonder what will be his explanation..hehehe!Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 11:49 am
Nathan was jealous, Jeremy didn't know what hit him. Yani, please realize that Nathan is in love with and is doing the things that he does because of that love. Is Yani attracted to Nathan at all! Or has hia treatment of her killed any chance of love developing? Yani hates Nathan right now and thinks that he hates her. I still don't know how I feel about Maddie, she is just too damn pushy! So good!!Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 10:24 am