Reviews For The Entitled Girl
Title: -- 11 --

I get that Luciana is very close to your heart, maybe she's based on yourself or someone you know. However, my problem with her is as I said previously- no personal growth. I don't just mean how she views herself, I'm speaking behaviour wise as well.  Before you say that it's only been three months. I know from personal experience living in a foreign country changes your out look on life no matter what you think. I left home at sixteen to attend school in Europe and I can say this with clarity after just two weeks, I realised "I'm not in Kansas anymore"...so I realised that I had to grow up. Again I do understand that although she is what, eighteen/nineteen? Her emotional age is probably that of eight or nine years old, around the time her father left. Her mother did no favors to her already battered esteem; which is why I stated that most of her negativity is because of her parents, they still continue to foster to those feelings. To be blunt if she does not recognize and confront the  source of her problems, she'll never be able to fix it and will always be in limbo, same problem- just different day, different place.

The story is still ongoing so who knows where it will lead, therefore I'll reserve further judgement until it's completed.

Reviewer: Carmen Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 18 2017 02:12 pm

Title: -- 11 --

First I would like to say to to the author congratuations on your story. Writing and posting is quite a challenge and I do commend and admire you for it.

However, Luciana, Luciana, Luciana. This chica does not evoke any sympathy. She has shown no personal growth from the first story to now, in fact she seems to have gotten worst. The very thing she complains and whines about is the very thing she goes about doing (her parents never took her feelings into consideration, when they said and did the things they did. She in turn never took Angelo's into consideration either when she said and did the things she did). The excuse of youth is given as if that should explain and right all the wrongs. (I am young and have low self esteem she should have that printed on a t-shirt).

One cannot generalize youth to equal stupidity, nor elderly to wisdom. Not every young person is immature and behaves selfish and reckless, nor can one say that every older person is wise, mature and cautious.

Her low self esteem is also used as an excuse. Do something about it, chica. She takes out her anger and frustrations on the wrong people. Confront your parents about about what they did to you, work on yourself and grow the heck up! You are getting older not younger. If you want Angelo work on your relationship; if you don't let him go to find someone who does.

I see where the name of the story fits in "Entitled" she really does think being young "entitles" you to behave the way she behaves ( that the world revolves around her). Not so Luciana, not true.

 



Author's Response:

I understand your frustrations about Luciana. I write real life. I'm sure many of the readers know of someone in their life who despite the help that can be rendered to them, or the potentials others see in them, their negative mental state likes to keep them stuck. Or are still on the journey of loving themselves.

Yes, it seems that from the first book up until now, there doesn't seem to be any major change in Luciana dealing with her insecurities but I would disagree. There's a three month time lapse between the end of the book (when Angelo gifts her with his sports car at the barbecue party) and the start of the second book (she's working as an au-pair in Spain). Maybe in an utopian world, it takes less than ninety days for someone who's had a negative outlook of themselves their whole life to love themselves so easily but that's not the experience I'm familiar with.

The fact that Luciana was brave enough to live in another country by herself, that's progress in itself. For some people it takes nearly their whole life to love and be comfortable with who they are.

But please remember, everyone's pacing is different in learning to love themselves. And of course, the journey can be frustrating.

The first book really was all about Luciana making the active DECISION to learn to love who she is. And this second book is a further exploration of the ACTIVE part of her decision.

Either way Carmen, I appreciate you taking your time to leave your honest thoughts.

Reviewer: Carmen Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 11 2017 08:30 pm

Title: -- 11 --

Angelo most of the time had to walk on egg shells to not hurt Luciana because of her insecurities issues. Luciana has always been insecure and had low self esteem. Its difficult to be in a relationship with these type of people because a lots of time they are actually the ones who ends up screwing you over and Luciana did not disappoint. Being young is not an excuse. And knowing that when you are involved in a relationship with someone you shouldn't cheat, doesn't count as a "mistake".  Hopefully Angelo won't just forgive her easily and maybe even move on. I feel like she just doesn't deserve him.



Author's Response:

I don't think there's been a time Angelo has had to walk on egg shells for Luciana. Though he cares about her feelings and has helped Luciana deal with her insecurities, Angelo is pretty straight to the point even when he knows it could cause an argument.

Reviewer: Msroos Signed [Report This]
Date: February 09 2017 09:29 pm



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