This is a nice rough draft. But I need more character development and more than 9 pages. Does this man with no name have abilities....is she feeling a mating pull? Thank you so much for sharing. I hope you continue writing and growing.Reviewer: MissCO Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02 2018 04:08 pm
Okay alot of uh weirdness going on. A vicious brown wolf that comes out of nowhere turns into a naked horny man in the middle of the night...and she flirts with him and agrees to go with him to his cabin with the intentions of sleeping with him. Uh I don't know many people (or women) that will do something like this. I understand in some sense a fictional story must have some...points or events that's not considered normal or even real but common sense isn't really what one has in mind. It just seems so out of place and even stupid for her to do something like this and not just normal stupid but just mind blowing that shes this stupid and has such a low sense of self preservation or even the common sense to go to a cabin in the middle of the woods with a wolf that just transformed into a man...a naked and horny man. Then flirts with him omg this is just too out there for me with no character development, personality, or even sense of realism that allows one to delve into the plot. I'm not flaming but trying to contruct my opinion in a way that doesn't insult you as an author but conveys my distaste for this story in a respectful manner. I know that alot of people are sensitive about flaming and tearing a person down. However this story is just not good (for me that is) and needs a lot of work and more thought put into it. I mean just ask yourself: If I was taking a shortcut home from a party and a wolf appeared from no where snarling before then turning into a naked man (sexy or not) what would I do? I'd be shocked if more than two people (who were serious) say that they'd flirt and agree to follow said man to the cabin with the implication of sexual activities. I just can't get over that fact I'm sorry but good luck to you with future chapters of this story.Reviewer: DangerouslyReckless Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 04 2017 09:35 pm
I just checked. Is the book really nine pages?
It's a short story, yes, but it's a part of a series "Lusty Fairy Tales". Book 2 is also available for purchase. Trust me there will be more.Reviewer: Elie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 02 2017 12:32 am