Penname: Caribbean Fire [Contact]

Real name: Lee

Member Since: October 26 2008

Membership status: Member

Bio:

I am currently re-writing and posting my originaly story, 'Trust'. It is also being posted on Literotica or Lite. Any other place is without permission. I ask you to inform me as soon as possible. 


I am enjoying the re-write. My characters are much more developed and multi-dimensional. The plot is also far more interesting (At least in my opinion...LOL). I hope everyone who reads it enjoys the story and can identify with some facet of the character(s). Good critical feedback is always welcomed. 


Thank you. 



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Summary:

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Taylor Mooreland has more than her share of problems. Her mother's an irresponsible dreamer who's more interested in floating from audition to audition than she is in paying her bills. So, Taylor's got to keep the ship afloat, taking care of her little brother and working to help pay the bills while she's going to school. And if life wasn't difficult enough, now she's gotten herself into quite the mess with a guy who thinks she's a man.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction, Miscellaneous
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:Yes
Word count: 48727
Read Count: 129516
Published: January 15 2009
Updated: June 09 2013


Title: Chapter 1: One

Love the background on both Christian and Taylor.  Very well done and can't wait to see how these two meet. 

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Date: January 24 2009

Title: Chapter 2: Two

Is my Christian turning into an ass?  Love him already and can't wait to see what he'd up to.  Update soon!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews. :)

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 24 2009

Title: Chapter 6: Six

First of all don't every do a chapter and not post it.  That's my reprimand. LOL!!

Good chapter.  My baby Christian to the rescue. I think he really likes Taylor and he did it not only to keep them from being thrown out but also to keep Taylor around more.  He knew deep down he'd miss her/him.  

Taylor needs to get her own place and get away from her mother.  She needs to live on the street so that she'll grow up and become a responsible person.  What she's doing is garbage. 

Carson's mother told him he was cute every day and that's why he has that delusion about himself.  Love him though and I think he's going to be the first in the 'group' to verify his original feelings that Taylor is a girl.  Can't wait to see that happen.  

UPDATE SOON!!! 

 



Author's Response:

I promise not to say anything next time. Kidding. ;)

LOL @ your Carson comment. I think you're on to something. *g*

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 13 2009

Title: Chapter 7: Seven

She was halfway across the front garden of the cafe when an arm slipped around her shoulders. She jerked and looked up to see Carson grinning down at her. Then, after feeling another presence beside her, looked to her right and saw Jeff stepping up beside her.

“What are you guys doing?” she asked warily. 

“We’re coming with you,” Carson said mischievously

Why does this scene remind me of Mutt and Jeff, Carson being Mutt....I so love him.  He's just the adorable trouble maker.  

All I'm saying is Christian felt someone.  He's such a spoilt bad boy.  Oh...how cute?   Update soon.

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstar
Date: April 10 2009

Title: Chapter 8: Eight

Village you are so right....you are wrong for making us wait six months for an update.  (That was my stern talking to you...LOL :).)  Thanks so much for this update.  I love Taylor's character and I can't wait until Carson's suspicions about her sex is proven and Christian's jaw drops to the floor. I can just imagine the war when Christian wakes up before Taylor and she's late for school and she has to go home to probably get her little brother up and dressed for his school.  These two need to break away from their parents....a mother that hasn't grown up and a father that cannot be kind and accepting of his child.  I can see the pow-wow now.  

Thank you so much for this update. Happy to have you back. 

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed
Date: November 21 2009

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Summary:

After a rough Summer Alisha Easterly believes that it can only get better with the beginning of her Junior Year of high school... unfortunately sometimes what you want and what you get don't always coincide...

 

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:No
Word count: 36862
Read Count: 38690
Published: February 03 2010
Updated: January 14 2014


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter One Part Two: Collision Course

Very nice second chapter also. Gina is very firey, ready to come to her friend's defense immediately while Alice is very 'think before you speak' kind of person. It may be difficult by some to wonder how these two are friends but it makes sense. The friendship seems very real instead of contrived due to it being in a story where you just want opposites to attach and be best friends. These girls have a background and you showed that with how you have them knowing each other so well and all they have been through that they know the details of their lives. Your writing gives depth to their relationship.Very good job showing where Alice comes from, her background of getting scolarship to attend this very affluent school and showing how she didn't compromise herself to keep some highschool boyfriend. Her inner strenght is very strong and it gives her character dimensions.

Jemrey it would seem, it like the typical rich kid who just wants to piss everyone off. You did a very good job showing that his relationship with his stepmother isn't all a bed of roses and that she gives as good as he gets. He's not the wanna be 'I'm all bad hear me roar' bad boy. While he does have that chip on his shoulder, he his a teenager and this is how they behave mostly. You made his character very real but showed that while he is rebelling against his stepmother, he's not going to be just outrightly rude to her just to get a rise out of his father. You also mentioned that he and his father has a dividing rift between their relationship that seems to keep growing. His character is very interesting and you want to see what he does.

Very nice second chapter...well done.

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 18 2014

Title: Chapter 2: A Brand New Day Part One...

I glanced at this story and after browsing through the chapters decided to read them thoroughly.

I like your initial chapter/opening. It gives a good feel of who the main female character is and the current status of her life...social, romantic, etc. The dynamic between the friends is also set very nicely and shows not only a togetherness but also a trust and love between two female at such a young age who are so different but extremely accepting and tolerant of each other. They show growing maturity and leave the readers with the feeling that these two women will be best friends for life. Very good opening.

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Date: January 18 2014

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Summary:

 

Esther Hendrickson has loved teaching young children, mainly because she cannot have children of her own. What was once society's trophy wife, her abusive past has led her deep into dementia, but the love of hardened FBI agent A.J. Thomas may be just what she needs to heal her torn heart.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 20
Completed:No
Word count: 46765
Read Count: 75326
Published: June 14 2012
Updated: January 03 2015


Title: Chapter 13: J is for Jinxed

I am wondering something, when AJ pulled Esther's file would it not have shown that she was married and who she was married to? The fact tha the is questioning who William is makes me believe the file was not very through. He has to know he's now sleeing with a married woman. Besides that, I really like the fact that she got to experience an orgasm and I am very  happy he went after her, after seeing how she was in the car. Nice chapter.

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Date: August 14 2012

Title: Chapter 3: Welcome to Class

Ester is running away from a lot; a tormented soul; her demons are just barely below the surface and you can tell her classroom with the kids is the one place she gets any peace. Looking forward to reading how far the abuse is from her family. Good first chapter.

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Date: August 10 2012

Title: Chapter 4: A is for Aprehensive

Love Rosario's decription of Esther's apartment-anorexic (LOL!). Wow her parents are a piece of work and so is her husband. Someone should have told him that while modern science has gotten good in the last few years where they have managed to clone a sheep, that is not creation in the true sense of the word and she can't do it by herself. What an ass! Can't wait to see how AJ gets involved into Esther's life now. Good chapter.

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Date: August 10 2012

Title: Chapter 5: B is for Background Checks

Nice job AJ. Very good investigation and observation between the pictures and the actual person. I also like that Esther is trying to have a life by herself instead of with the so called 'family'. Nice that Rosario is the only one that she trust. I wouldn't trust that Avery also as she seems like a little goodie two shoe who would sell her sister out for the praises of the mother and father. The abuse heaped on Esther was bad if she is on such a storg medication. Good job with this chapter also.

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Date: August 10 2012

Title: Chapter 6: C is for Compromise

'Having a hot flash over a cute guy was not proper behavior for a lady'I agree with this comment, a lady wouldn't do such a thing but a real woman would and that's what Esther needs to become a real woman. The pills were obviously issued by a physc doc which means she was in treatment. I wonder what happened why she stopped the treatment? She doesn't seem to be in a state of mind where she can do without it or is it that she is running away from the family and choose freedom over them controling her treatment? The seems to be getting addicted to the pills and that could become a danger. Great chapter.

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Date: August 12 2012

Title: Chapter 7: D is for Determination

“Y-you, you want to talk about s-sexual intercourse Mr. Thomas?” Esther stammered when she finally caught her breath. A.J. smirked at her choice in wording. Sexual intercourse? Who said that?-wrong in so many ways but funny as hell. Loved this line. And asking Esther what is her favourite position is like asking her what is the chemical formula of glucose...she only knows the act but beyond that, clueless. But that ending where AJ takes her out of the restuarant and kisses her in the alley, that was nice. She really needs to deal and she can't do it by herself. Another great chapter.

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Date: August 12 2012

Title: Chapter 8: E is for Eager

AJ is such a trouble maker and I love him. Hehehehe! I loved how he used her words against her every chance he got but he did it in a fun way. Now he's  goign to dirve her to school in the mornings. What is he trying to accomplish by doing that? Nothing but some more trouble. I like that about him, he's pushing he out of her comfort zone. Nice job again.

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Date: August 12 2012

Title: Chapter 10: G is for Gnashed

How does one comment on such evil and not even the evil of William so much but of parents who know this is what their child does and cover it up. Now that is the real evil. Accomdating this evil are the women who never report it. No comment...good insight.

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Date: August 13 2012

Title: Chapter 11: H is for Hurricane

'Who had conditioned her to be so awfully respectful?' I couldn't agree with this sentence more...conditioned is the right word as if she was a science project or something of the sorts.  I like that she got to enjoy her first pizza and with good company also. AJ is such a gentleman putting her to bed and I what a fantasy about marriage? This woman is really messed up. It is as if she has never had a thought that was hers and now she's having them and that's the strange thing. Nice chapter.

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Date: August 13 2012

Title: Chapter 12: I is for Intimacy Issues

'unless he wanted intercourse, that meant lying still, remaining silent, and waiting for him to finish so that she could breathe again.'Seriouly? What was she a human 4x4? Proper upbringing my ass...the first thing she should have learnt about that kind of proper upbrining is that you have a boytoy on the side. That should have been the first lesson. Yes, I'm being bad. Okay now to real stuff. I have lost 10% of my respect for AJ. Tweety Bird? In that entire box of band-aids, there was no Bugs, Marvin the Martion or Sylvester? Tweety? He should have looked for a different band-aid...and that is my silly comment for the chapter...LOL!!! Loved the kiss...he was down to thirty but he gained some points back...LOL!! Wonderful chapter. He's breaking through that ice. :)

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Date: August 13 2012

Title: Chapter 14: K is for Kisses

It is going to take a while and Esther needs to heal before she can ever trust AJ again. A part of that is that she needs to trust herself and that is something she doesn't know how to do because she was never taught. One barrier down but most of all she admitted to herself that she liked someone, someone she chose not someone her mother or father choose for her. This is a very good step for her. This is growth.

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Date: August 14 2012

Title: Chapter 19: P is for Persitance

Well I'm happy to see you back to finish the story. I'm laughing to myself right now because just last night I was going through my favourites and saw that I still had this story listed and today you updated. I'm so happy to see a new chapter. I wish your chapters were a bit longer but I love how you title each chapter.

I wonder what the mother is up to and how AJ's gonna handle what's about to come. I think Ester is going to go back to her husband and she has to. She has to go back to him again to possibly realize that she doesn't need to rely on the pills but that she deserves not to be abused. I think when she leaves AJ and has to call him to rescue her or possibly when he shows here again that a man doesn't love you if he hits you but that she can be loved without violence then she's be ready to leave her family behind. But for right now I see her going back. She has not fought back enough to appreciate the feedom that she wants and deserve.

I do hope you will keep writing and complete this story. It had been a pleasure to read before and I enjoyed this update. Thank you.

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed
Date: January 30 2014

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Summary:

When recent college grad, Lily Taylor became the personal paralegal to the notorious lawyer of the stars, Aiden Hawkins, she never knew that she would have her hands tied with him...literally.

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 66387
Read Count: 66266
Published: October 03 2012
Updated: July 30 2013


Title: Chapter 3: Crazy For You

So either Alex likes her also or he's doing anything he can to royally piss Aiden off, and it seems to be working. I like that about him.

Lily is intrigued by the world she has just allowed money to push her into. Her experiences are going to be something to read about. Aiden and how he's going to bring about her confidence while controling her is going to be something of an interesting task. Can't wait to read how he goes about it,



Author's Response:

There will be a constant push and pull with those 2, and one of them may push too hard..

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28 2012

Title: Chapter 4: Rumor Has It

Hot! Very nice. Now that is an introduction. At least he fed her properly first...LOL!! I like how he made her feel good and welcome in his home and for someone like him, one can tell Aiden is not someone who allows any and anyone to come to his home much more to his bedroom. He is very private person who has kept himself separated personally and professional.

Alex...happy to see that Lily knows he's Voltemort but its for her to trust what she is feeling. Instinct has told her that there is something not right with him but evil can disguise itself very nicely.She needs to be careful all the time.



Author's Response:

lol every girl could use a fine steak before being eaten out, yeah Aiden is very private but maybe that will change....

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28 2012

Title: Chapter 7: Turning Tables

There is so much to say about this chapter and one word that comes to mind, FANTASTIC!

Right now, my favourite charcter is Owen...yes Owen. I liked owen when he cut off the girl's ponytails for cutting off his sister's hair. I began to fall in love with Owen when she had to sell her soul to him to dress her for the rest of her life. I'm in love with Owen for what he did to Aiden when he showed up at their apartment looking for Lily. He turned Aiden into a stalker...bravo Owen! That's  his sister.

So we meet the father who shines on why Aiden is the way he is and his mother is where he gets his carefree side. Very good character since his mother has been waiting for some grandchildren but in vain...LOL! I like that he told her about Lily; he cares more than he's letting on. And now that he took her virginity it is for him to move on from there. That has a lot of ramifications both for Lily and Aiden. He's never done that before so now he really knows how innocent she is which means his protective nature about her just increased 100%, and for her, its her self-esteem issues that she now has to deal with.

Alex and Blair, a match made in heaven except Alex has taken off the rose colour glasses when it comes that slut. I like Blair's character...she's so pathetic that it's funny. Aiden is going to want to find out more about what Alex meant by what he said to him but that will be on the back burner for now.

Nate...childish, immature and Kennedy, not afraid to do the right thing.

All in all, wonderful job with this chapter. Keep up the excellent work.

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 29 2012

Title: Chapter 8: He Won't Go-Part 1

Very nice, wel done chapter to follow what happened in the previous.

Loved how Aiden handled Blair and how he's going to handle Alex. I don't really thing Aiden hates Alex; he may not like him but he has no reason to hate him. Aiden is a sharper more focused lawyer, while Alex feels he is previleged because he went to Harvard. Alex is jealous but he's also hurt and it's why he wanted to explain to Lily why he did what he did. He needs to understand why he dd what he did also...Alex is going through many differet emotions at the same time and it is a very difficult learning experience for him. I do admire him for wanting to apologize to Lily.

Lily's not so much so angry as she is hurt that Alex betrayed her trust...after all Aiden still does't know she never even had a boyfriend in high school; Alex knows that. Alex figured out that she was a virgin while Aiden just found out. She is now realizing that he kindness shown by Alex was all fake while the sharpness and rudeness shown by Aiden was out of admiration. She's gonna be confused but one thing that Aiden's going to do is keep Lily to himself and in his own way innocent.

Owen, is so wise...my love for him has grown.

I feel sorry but Blair because Bobby likes Aiden more than he likes her and he's not about to cross Aiden for two reasons:- 1) Aiden's the better lawyer and 2) he like him more than her. Blair's money is not going to help her out of this mess.

An excellent job on this chapter...I, like the rest of your readers, can't wait to read the next.

 

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 03 2013

Title: Chapter 10: Right As Rain

I love Apple Taylor-Hawkins. She's so cute. I would love to have another but my selfish, only child cat will not share any of the room, tables, pillow or outside property that we own with another cat. He is so spoilt and there is this really cute, friendly little cat that is always playing and he's mean to her. If he wasn't old, I'd kick him out but then I love him so I'd let him back in.

Anyway, enough of me sharing info about my cat, Lily's reaction was perfect. While her reaction could be seen as childish, the facts are that they are both learning for the first time to be in a relationship. There are so many mistakes to be had. He's so sure of what he wants and that is Lily and she is unsure if she will be all that he needs. I love it, I love it, I love it. Great job!

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Date: August 05 2013

Title: Chapter 11: One and Only

Now that is an introduction. Well done and now the other drama begins. I like that they established the grounds for their relationship and that he's able to slowly bring her into his lifestyle. Also from the other chapter...when he wouldn't tell her what he and Blair did, that was perfect. Very good call, very mature, very seperate. It showed her that he didn't think of her in the same likeness as Blair and that alone should tell Lily how he really feels about her. Well I think when he finally made the confession when he came to her, that was definitely a turning point for him. Very well done. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 05 2013

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