Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4
uhm, so yeah. i needs me an update ASAP. that was . . . woo! at first, i honestly did not know how to feel about Dove - wait, no, that's a lie, could barely stand her. loved her in the first chapter, adored her really, but when she got around her husband it was like her brain was gone. then again, she was very aware that she'd settled. still didn't appreciate the way her husband and her brothers talked to her and she allowed it. (btw, you have Shon down as William a couple times in chapter 3, i believe.)
but i am too glad i came back to this.
there's a fire in Dove that is not just sexual, obviously. she's much stronger than she allows to be, a part of her that she willingly suppressed for her settled life. her willingness to help works against her in some ways, but she is just like most women with a heart so damn big . . . it almost hurt to read about the sacrifices she'd made and how ungrateful, bratty, and unsupportive the males in her family are.
her first encounter with Xavier, in lesser hands, would have been implausible, considering the differences in the characters. but, you, lady, have done a wonderful, seamless job. i love what they seem to bring out in one another, no matter how soon it may seem. very well done. and i like Dove, i really do. that real part of her is wonderful and i can't wait to see more.
*high five*
Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed
Date: August 18 2011