Reviews For Undone
Title: Chapter 13

I seriously liked this story, with all the complicated politics and money and sex. Well done!

Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: April 16 2017 05:51 pm

Title: Chapter 12.Ch.7 I'm not a victim...

What did he do to here

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 23 2013 08:07 pm

Title: Chapter 12.Ch.7 I'm not a victim...

This story has me all twisted up! I don't know who to believe now! Because of that you deserve a 10! That means the story is nit predictable, good deal!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2013 12:24 am

Title: Chapter 12.Ch.7 I'm not a victim...

This story has me all twisted up! I don't know who to believe now! Because of that you deserve a 10! That means the story is nit predictable, good deal!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2013 12:22 am

Title: Chapter 1. The call

did you base this off the actual account of Strass-Kahn?

Reviewer: Bryleigh Lisette Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 14 2013 01:24 am

Title: Chapter 6. The mating game.

amazing chapter. keep it up



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: cullensjonas Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2013 05:39 am

Title: Chapter 6. The mating game.

I love this story.  It reminds me of scandal characters Olivia and Fitz.  When you meet that special someone that you are instantly attracted to and just know what they mean to you.  In Scandal Fitz says" why was I such a coward to marry her and not wait for you. " That's how I feel about these characters.  I once heard that we pick and choose who to love and how much to love them.  In this case its the same but yet different.  They know going in with eyes open what they are doing but the attraction that pulls them together is a curse and blessing. It's a curse because he's married and unavailable to commit to her unless he is willing to lose everything he has gained.  Its a blessing because they have met each other and know what each other means to each other.  He is having doubts because he knows that he can't give her what she deserves (commitment and not being a mistress) unless he walks away from his current relationship and he is not ready to. He thinks she will leave and that scares him.



Author's Response:

Ypu're spot on!

Reviewer: LovinLo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2013 03:48 am

Title: Chapter 6. The mating game.

This story is WAAAAAAYYYYYYYY!!!!! Deep! Very intense, but damn good!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 10 2013 01:46 am

Title: Chapter 5. What are we doing?

Ok, so now we really understand the hold they have on each other.....SOULMATES!!! That is why he calls her when he is in trouble. A love that is stronger than time.

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 25 2013 04:48 pm

Title: Chapter 5. What are we doing?

That had to be the best chapter ever ! We want more pleeeeease!!!

Reviewer: MiAmourrr Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 25 2013 12:31 am

Title: Chapter 4. I can't bear it

Thank You for clarifying what the nature of the relationship Nick Collier had with Victoria Moore, and why he is so desperate for her to help him and his case. I know he doesn't want that rich wife of his to find out. This story is getting more and more interesting!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 20 2013 12:15 am

Title: Chapter 4. I can't bear it

So Victoria was twenty-three when they meet.  If Nick was the mayor then she knew that he was married, so why decided to be the other woman?  If Nick knew her father, how could he use his friend's child that way?  I would say that she was young and stupid, but she knew that the man was married he was the damn mayor after all!!! Smh!!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 05:26 am

Title: Chapter 4. I can't bear it

I want to know what Vic will do

 

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 03:41 am

Title: Chapter 3. Undone

Ok, all I want to know,  did he really rape the maid? Because I feel he was being setup by someone who doesn't want him to be President of France. When will the strategy start? Good story so far.



Author's Response:

Thank you. That precise answer is in chapter 37, but you will not be satisfied until you read  the last chapter which will describe the actual event. Strategy will start in about 10 chapters. All the players need to be introduced first. And they are a lot of people, including the maid and her back story.

I said it in the notes of chapter 1, this is a very long and complex story, as my 1st one, The One, was. We are looking at 100+ chapters. You will keep asking questions, and answers will be provided that raise further questions...

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 17 2013 03:44 am

Title: Chapter 3. Undone

Did you tell us how old Victoria was?  If he's 59 and they had their things 13 years ago which means that he was 46.  So of course at 46 Nick had to have been married which means that he cheated on Helen.  How long were Victoria and Nick having an affair?  This story is so juicy and I really want Nick to suffer some karmic justice!! Please!!!



Author's Response:

yes, in the previous chapter.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 17 2013 02:08 am

Title: Ch.2 Don't call me...

Nick !

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2013 05:06 pm

Title: Ch.2 Don't call me...

wow!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 07 2013 06:11 am

Title: Part 1. Chapter.1

I really don't like Nick and his wife makes my teeth itch! I love stories where I instantly love or hate characters, the wife is on the hate list!    I am loving Vi although I am concerned about her hiding from love all because of nimrod!



Author's Response:

glad to see you react!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 06 2013 10:43 pm

Title: Ch.2 Don't call me...

What did Nick do to Victoria?   He really broke her but she is allowing him win by not loving a good man.  Will you tell us what happened between Victoria and Nick via flashback?  Was Nick married when he and Victoria had a relationship?  Or did he get married to his wife while sexing up Victoria? I love this story!



Author's Response:

I will tell you, all in good time.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 06 2013 10:35 pm

Title: Part 1. Chapter.1

Ok, now it begins! Fasten your seats, it's gonna be a bumpy ride!



Author's Response:

It is!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 06 2013 12:45 am

Title: Chapter 5. Damn it to hell!

What in the hell...more please...



Author's Response:

Soon!

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 01 2013 07:39 pm

Title: Chapter 5. Damn it to hell!

An interesting turn of events.  I am interested to know more about Helen's angle.  Definitely looking forward to more!  Great update!!



Author's Response:

Thanks! Helen is definitely an interesting woman!

Reviewer: idriveavitz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 09:45 pm

Title: Chapter 5. Damn it to hell!

This is bad and it's going to get worse as she still has feelings for nimrod!  His wife is evil and those two are in for a rude awakening because I don't believe that Victoria is punk.  They just unleashed the beast!  She can't attest to his guilt or innocence as she doesn't know him. It has been thirteen years since they were together and he treated her abismally.  Don't like Nick can't stand his wife or their attorney!  Looking forward to future updates.



Author's Response:

A rude awakening is in the works...

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 05:22 pm

Title: Chapter 5. Damn it to hell!

Rich people don't care who they use, what they use, or who's lives they ruin to get what they want. I am truly intrigued with this story and it's outcome!



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 01:47 pm

Title: Chapter 4. Is this a joke?

Again, I have to say wow! I knew the legal system was shaky, but to hire a lawyer on the basis of skin color, that's crazy! 



Author's Response:

It's been known to happen more than once...

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 01:31 pm



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