I like it...good story so far. Update soon
Reviewer: Gothic-Innocence16 Signed [Report This]Date: August 09 2014 04:40 am
UPDATE THIS!!!
Reviewer: Storyteller247 Signed [Report This]Date: August 27 2013 06:55 pm
My first story was a Crackfic, so I'm kinda partial to this type of thing. It has its place. I would not recommend you turn this into another O.J. Excellent story, but truly painful in parts - waiting for the character to develop and get over her very complicated issues.
I like your story coz it's a fun romp of a read - silly and insanely funny - a little bit soap-operaish, but it's all good. I only wish you had taken the time to describe the look on Drew's face when Alex showed up behind our girl!You have a good feel for comedy, so go for it.
I don't mind that the chapters are so short, if you update frequently. If you take longer, then I would appreciate a bit more length and care with the grammar. Specifically, you might need a beta reader, to catch the common errors that your spell-check won't catch (eg. they're, there, their). Hope that doesn't down your vibe. Keep being creative and I'll keep reading.
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2013 05:38 pm
You're killing me with the cut-offs! But I love your sense of humour and I can wait for the corrections. Just keep it coming! :-D
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]Date: July 22 2013 05:21 pm
This is sooo whackadoo, I love it. It's like eating the cookie dough instead of making cookies. Can't wait to get to the next chapter.
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]Date: July 22 2013 05:14 pm
Laughed my arse off, that was so funny. Watch out for your grammar though.
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]Date: July 22 2013 05:10 pm
This is my favorite chapter so far, as my sexy men told those two how's off! It was priceless, Anatol and Alexander call them sluts and how's and they still didn't get the hint. There is only one thing worse than being a ho, being a dumb ho! Fabulous!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed
[Report This]Date: July 22 2013 04:17 pm
I don't know....they is just something about this story. What kind of relationships develope that fast and what girl with real values would be comfortable with the situation she is in. I don't know maybe its just me i like when its real and you really get to see each character develop. Like the younger brother how quick he went from not liking her to liking her. I think if you took the time to really write about the characters it would be a nice story. I don't know if you understand what I mean. Try read a story called O.J on this website you might see what I mean about taking your time and not rushing the relationships :)
Reviewer: xReaderloverx Signed [Report This]Date: July 22 2013 12:47 pm
Oh snap! :D damn good update
Reviewer: LexiCupCake Signed [Report This]Date: July 22 2013 05:42 am
haha great updates! thank you! i'm truely enjoying this story :D
Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 02:32 pm
Your cliff hangers are going to be a killer
Reviewer: keikei2 Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 12:40 pm
Really you leave it like that and I have to wait to Friday!! Get update.
Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 06:19 am
Me likey! More please!!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 05:56 am
Them two hoes are about to get their feelings hurt and I can't wait!! Anatoloy and Alwexander to the rescue!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 05:21 am
Friday hurry up! :D
Reviewer: LexiCupCake Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 05:00 am
Drew needs to keep away...and those girls are a hot mess.
Great update.
Reviewer: Mocomath Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 04:59 am
Hey, I love the storyline, and where the story is going, but I have to say the writing has alot of mistakes, the grammer and the use of some words is wrong, I think it would be beneficial if you got a beta reader to correct your mistakes. Don't be discouraged from this reveiw because I do think that you have a good storyline
Reviewer: rockyro Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 01:41 am
Hilarious. Sometimes college is like an extended version of high school (with no curfew), then again I was in a sorority where things were a lot like high school but other people's experience may vary lol...
Love these fast updates.
Date: July 20 2013 04:39 pm
Who did Natalie turn around and saw? Is it an ex-boyfriend? Those two ho's will be in for a rude awakening as Anatoly and Alexander have already staked their claim on Natalie. This is getting more intriquing with each chapter and it's only chapter three You have me fiend inf like crack head for this story!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 20 2013 03:27 pm
Damn, they may not liking but it looks like they will he! Thanks for answering the question an lb out them being twins or not. They are smoking hot! that RA was rude as hell and shouldn't have that position anymore. Loving this story and it will be heating up soon.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 20 2013 03:19 pm
More please !!!!
Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]Date: July 20 2013 02:03 pm
I have a gut feeling that this story is and will be added to my favorites, can't wait to read more of Nat, Alex, and Toly
Reviewer: keikei2 Signed [Report This]Date: July 20 2013 01:09 pm
should college be really that cliuqe? just seems so junior high to me, not even highschool girls act in such a way.
Reviewer: nikkilovylife Signed [Report This]Date: July 20 2013 11:10 am
Great story do your own thing :D
Reviewer: LexiCupCake Signed [Report This]Date: July 20 2013 10:24 am