Sorry tried, but the story does not flow. It tends to jump around a bit. The reasoning for some the actions or reactions are weird and unbelievable. Love a good vampire tale but immortal becoming a vampire. Hmm... I always like a good reasonable original spin to a tale but, well, I've read up to chapter 5. Sorry will have tolet this story go. I hope the back ground story is revised. Will check on it much later.
I hate to be a downer, but keep in mind what is the plot? I guess that is what threw me, it isn't clear and the synopsis is confusing too.
Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]Date: September 18 2014 05:01 am
Please finish this story!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: September 14 2014 05:14 pm
I'm gonna need you to come back and update this story. It's so interesting. Thank you random story generator.
Reviewer: azzure1020 Signed [Report This]Date: August 30 2014 05:19 pm
Could you please please please tell me the name of the actor or model used for nikoli
Author's Response:
I used the model Ricki Hall.
I'm sorry that I took forever to reply.
Reviewer: kiavicmcp Signed [Report This]Date: December 15 2013 05:42 am
Wow...Very good update.
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: October 21 2013 05:36 pm
I don't think that Nikoli has thought this thing out clearly. How long is him defeating his enemies going to take and the longer it takes the longer Caroline will have to be in the basement where it is tramatic for her and may even turn her mind. Then what will he do then when his humanity as he calls her has lost her own.
Great update hope to see more soon.
Thank you
Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]Date: October 21 2013 01:59 pm
Wow I can't believe he did that to her
Reviewer: kiavicmcp Signed [Report This]Date: October 19 2013 06:36 pm
Nikoli is coo coo for coca puffs!! Is he trying to break Carolina? Putting her in the basement where it's dark and knowing that she is afraid is torture. He is treating her as a terrorist would and that is evil and morally bankrupt. Yet he claims to love her, I am not convinced of his love. ON top of that he is continuing to lie to Seyurn about his mate Suyun. So stupid!!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: October 19 2013 07:39 am
I miss this story!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: October 13 2013 04:06 pm
I like a lot!
Reviewer: caribbeanisland Signed [Report This]Date: September 19 2013 01:03 am
Ok so this story has caught my attention. Keep going with it.
Reviewer: Margo Betts Signed [Report This]Date: September 01 2013 07:33 am
Somehow I don't think that Nik looked very for someone to break the blood bond between Kendra and Seyun. I really Kendra ho dead! Fabulous! !!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: August 31 2013 07:52 am
Their love match is wonderful thing to witness...Thank You for sharing your book with us
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: August 31 2013 05:39 am
I absolutely love your book...
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: August 31 2013 05:37 am
Kendra ass is cray cray. She can't take no for answer.
I feel sorry for Nikoli he fears that Seyurn will leave after he tells him the truth. I hope Seyurn don't. He's such a wonderful friend to Nikoli. Awesome update!!!
Reviewer: Treale Signed [Report This]Date: August 31 2013 05:29 am
of course kendra can't take no for an answer, what makes her think that he'll have anything to do with her if she kills the mysterious woman. great update!
Author's Response:
Well, Kendra is that rare bred that believes if you take away his option then he will go back to what he already had. She's really twisted.
I'm glad you enjoyed. :D
Reviewer: sandradee Signed [Report This]Date: August 30 2013 06:09 am
Who is Suyun to Seyurn? Thanks for sharing this update!
Author's Response:
A chapter from Seyurn's life will be in the next chapter and will reveal many things.
Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 30 2013 05:42 am
Great chapter! How is Nikoli going to keep Carolina safe and happy at the same time?!
Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 30 2013 05:38 am
The story is coming along beautifully but I don't know why Nikoli is so understanding of Kendra's insanity. He now has a woman he loves and respects, he promised to protect her always. Why is he chatting with the threat, if he can easily end her so what is he waiting for?
Reviewer: Lindy Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 29 2013 11:33 pm
Nikoli needs to kill Kendra that bitch is cray cray! I love the strength that Caroline is displaying. Have said that I hate Kendra!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: August 29 2013 11:16 pm
i know kendra is there for dramatic license but I really need to see Carolina get very dangerous and powerful ..and what is Nikoli's problem?! certuries old yet at times acts like a emotional frat boy! Your best friend/shaman has vision on harm coming to your mate, you get pissy with him instead of formulating plan of attack for mate's protection. Your empath vampire bride gets "headaches" yet that doesnt seem strange to you? Dude sires nutzo vampiress, said vampiress threatens his beloved mate and warns the hoe instead of ripping her undead heart from her chest?!
yeah i'mma need Nick to get his balls back. I want Nickoli from Chapter 1 back please and thank you.
Author's Response:
Yes, I'll admitt that Nikoli is very tame considering the fact that he had just rescued Carolina from three people who he didn't even hesitate killing. But there is a reason as to why he hasn't killed Kendra. Everything that he has been keeping from Carolina will be revealed in the next chapter.
Reviewer: Aleta Signed [Report This]Date: August 29 2013 08:59 pm
He'd do anything to keep her safe but doesn't he no that's with him. He should have b n honest & up front from the beginning about his past & not just bits & pieces. Now this problem we have that should've been delt with a while bk can't wait to see how. Plus her Ancestors are angry @ him for failing to keep her happy even though he had good reason can't wait til she wakes bk up
Reviewer: kvgurl Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2013 09:17 am
maybe nikoli took it to far when he chocked her up maybe he should have went about getting her out of the state another way. looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response:
Yea the whole choking Carolina did get out of hand, however it does show that he will go to extreme measures for her safety....which sounds really twisted.
Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: sandradee Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2013 05:10 am
I think your book is beautiful
Author's Response:
Thanks!
I'm glad that you've been enjoying the story so far.
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2013 04:35 am
OMG how the hell did i miss this chapter?? Lol but I can't believe he choked her cause his ass got caught in a lie. Smh That's men for ya.
Reviewer: Treale Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2013 03:24 am