Title: Chapter 3

nice kitchen. though not exactly what I thought a cabin in the woods would look like. lol

Reviewer: bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 05 2013 10:50 am

Title: Chapter 3

Everybody got their secrets. I love but can't stand Haynes. Lol. 

Casey is so sweet I just want to pinch his cheeks! Lol 

But why Haynes won't tell Casey that they a freaking millionaires??

OMG Loving it!!! 

Reviewer: Treale Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 05 2013 09:02 am

Title: Chapter 2

Love this story so far! Can't wait to see what happens when they let her loose.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 05 2013 05:09 am

Title: Chapter 1

Interesting start!

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 05 2013 04:56 am

Title: Chapter 2

I'm really enjoying this story. I can't wait to see what unfolds as the story moves along.

Reviewer: hazelbazel92 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 04 2013 05:00 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Good... more please

Reviewer: VAL1 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 11:41 pm

Title: Chapter 2

What has she got to "come around" from?

Reviewer: Bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 10:29 pm

Title: Chapter 2

I like it. I haven't read any other good threesome stories except for the ones written by KatherineMadison.
I hope that you stay true to how you want to write this, too many people will give you their opinion of what they like, don't like etc. and you may unknowingly change some things around to please them even when you planned something different.
So my advise is to write this the way that you want after all we are reading this for free and you are writing this for fun.

Update Soon!!!

Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 10:03 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Hot damn...that is all.

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 07:23 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Good start. The story sounds interesting and original. Yeah for threesome!!! I like good threesome stories, but more often than not they are quite disapointing with the woman being totally powerless and the men described as supposedly "hot alpha males" are just being complete jerks. I noticed the title is about the brother but that doesn't mean Sally can't be the heroine. I would like to know more about her. I am not sure about her reaction. I think it is too soon to say what her state of mind is, that is why her character/personality needs to be fleshen out more. I didn't read it as her being all manipulative, and playing calm to deceive Casey. Nothing indicated she wahs scheming. The first chapter was focused on her, but not on her inner thoughts, and everything that she noticed was just how big the brothers were. I don't think I buy her being all badass and shit. After all, she ended up god knows where in the countryside with relatives that are said to have been about to try and kill her. But I also hope she is not some clueless and helpless "damsell in distress" kind of heroine. What about having just a "regular" girl : she may well be in a state of shock, which can explain a delayed reaction to what happened to her. After all, she was inconscious, so she needs time to process.

Reviewer: Yeah Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:49 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Great chapter

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 03:20 pm

Title: Chapter 2

What do I think?  I think this is a really fun story!   I would like to get more of a feel for the heroine, but, on the other hand, the story is entitled "The McRyan Brothers."  The focus is more on them than Sallie.  

Also, I'd like to know how remoteness of their location.  In the first chapter, Casey tells Sallie he hasn't seen a woman in five years.  Obviously, since the brothers are able-bodied and mobile this separation from normal society is somewhat voluntary.  Or is it?

Are they out there on their own in the remote woods because they're on the run?  Are they landowning billionaires trying to shed societal pressure and have a normal life?  Are they werewolves?  It's obvious Sallie was that far out in the wilderness with her family because they wanted to murder her in a hard to find place. 

Will she be stuck with the brothers because of inclimate weather?  Will they convince her that the safest place to be is in their strong arms..?  Hot.  I can't wait to find out all this stuff!  

Also, I didn't have a problem with Sallie being calm and collected and relating to her supposed captor with her sister anecdote.  I just assumed she was being clever and cunning, trying to soften Casey up.  That way, she'd gain his trust and escape as soon as she had a chance.  

I mean, think about it; that plan kind of worked.  After making nice with her, Casey goes upstairs to plead Sallie's case to Hayes, the paranoid and domineering older brother.  It's doubtful Casey would have done that if Sallie had been freaking out uncontrollably.  It's called manipulation, people.  Come on!  If Sallie wants to get out of there - which she still would at this point - she's going to have to use every trick up her sleeve. 

Reviewer: tens Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:57 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Great job!

Reviewer: writinglass Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:47 pm

Title: Chapter 2

You hear people talking about killing the girl for insurance money and you don't call the police once you get her someplace safe? Of course not you tie the girl up and you put her in the basement!  What the hell is Haynes problem you kidnapped Sallie!  Casey knocked his brother on his ass and it was good!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:39 pm

Title: The Cast

Nice but Casey is fine! Yummilicious!!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:30 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Good start, I love me some good threesome story!! Although this one is a bit limited with the 2 boys being brothers which means one way relationship, them "sharing" her...Anyway, I like that Sally is NOT some tiny tiny petite woman, especially as the guys are described as being so so big and the fact that she is being held captive (In some stories it turns quite ridiculous as the men are big giant and the woman are smlaller than small petite women...). If they indeed end up "sharing" her, there should be some power shift in order for her not to be in complete dominated state, at least for me: I like strong men as any other girl, but that doesn't mean the woman has to be completely dependant and submissive and all that "50 shades" shit). Casey sounds like the "gentler" brother, which is sweet. But I agree that Sally should be a little bit more disoriented/shocked/frighthened by both. And they should tell her everything and not keep her in the dark for supposedly "protecting" her. Hate that kind of shit...Can't wait to learn more about her background. Thanks for sharing your inspiration with us. Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:25 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Wow.  I don't know why Hayes is so mean.  I bet he wants to do all those things he said to her.  I'm glad they're going to get her out of the basement.  Great update!

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 11:04 am

Title: Chapter 2

Nice start! I'm invested. Pls can the chapters be longer though?

Reviewer: londongirl Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 09:28 am

Title: Chapter 1

I think it's an awesome case of "good cop, bad cop!"  They need a woman and she's playing right into their hands, what with makin' nice with the younger brother and all. 



Author's Response:

Yea, the younger brother was nice. The oldest brother though thats were the mystery lies. :D 

Reviewer: tens Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 07:09 am

Title: Chapter 1

Well I definitely want to know who the two brothers are!!!



Author's Response:

You will be getting a deeper look into the McRyan brothers and why they have Sallie in their basement. 

Reviewer: PearlsofWisdom Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 06:58 am

Title: Chapter 1

CAN"T WAIT TO READ MORE

Reviewer: BABYT Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:59 am

Title: Chapter 1

I think you should continue.



Author's Response:

I will. I honestly didn't think that people would like the story so now i have three stories to write weekly. :D

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:15 am

Title: Chapter 1

Good start.Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:00 am

Title: Chapter 1

I think you should continue please and now, LOL!!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 03:51 am

Title: Chapter 1

More, please!!!! I have to know what happens next. Great job :D

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 03:39 am



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