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Title: Chapter 1

She wakes up, tied, in a basement and some large guy comes downstairs and after untying her hands, she feels comfortable enough to chat like they met at a cafe or something??? 

"Sallie nodded in understanding. “I have an older sister and I know that pain.”

Really...?

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:53 am
Title: Chapter 1

Great. Waiting for more. 

 Reviewer: Karmal Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:01 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very good so far let there be more

 Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:59 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very good so far let there be more

 Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:59 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very good so far let there be more

 Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:58 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very good so far let there be more

 Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:58 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very good so far let there be more

 Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:58 am
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I'm wondering too! So many questions. Please continue :-)

 Reviewer: writinglass Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:47 am
Title: Chapter 1

I'm wondering if the brother saved her from something or did he kidnap her? i hope that neither ofthem will take advantage of her.  More please.

 Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:29 am
Title: Chapter 1

I love it!!

 Reviewer: Ayoo_Joi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 12:31 am
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Interesting.

 Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 12:21 am
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I am liking it.  I really wonder what happened to Sallie? and How is it that the brothers wanted to take her and where was the brother at for 5 years......was it prison cos that's the only place i know where you don't see a woman......but hey aren't there women officers too?

OH well please just just keep the updates plentiful and frequently.

 Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 12:10 am
Title: Chapter 1

I like the younger brother but the older is a asshole.  Something telks me that he kidnapped Sallie.  More please!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:39 pm
Title: Chapter 1

It's gonna be sexy!!  You have yet to disappoint me so I'll wait for the next update!!  

 Reviewer: idriveavitz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:36 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I just had to peep in before going to bed. I know what I'll be dreaming about tonight!

You've got a lot of possibilities here! Very good start! Plus, you have a great sense of humor.

I hope you put in more character descriptions... Yes, that and update soon. Really soon.



Author's Response:

Thank you! 

I will be going into full detail next chapter. 

 

 Reviewer: bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:34 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Good so far ...more please!!

 Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:15 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Well you've got me hooked. I also want to know what happened the night before and just who those two brothers were. Good start.

 Reviewer: Jojo65 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:14 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I think we need another chapter, post haste. :)

Bigguns, I like that. Older brother is kinda naughty.

 Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:05 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Well, I'm not exactly sure what to think, yet. This is enough to intrigue me, but not enough for me to make an informed decision. A meatier followup chapter should tell the tale.

 Reviewer: Noelle Vonham Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:01 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I love the younger brother and I really want to find out why she was taken. More please! :)

 Reviewer: BreBre Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 10:53 pm
Title: Chapter 1

good start

 Reviewer: kayla Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 10:51 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Im intrigued, more please!

 Reviewer: buddha Anonymous starstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 10:37 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I like this one!! I'm already in love with the little brother. Lol. More please!! 

 Reviewer: Treale Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 10:21 pm


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