Reviews For Proposition
Title: Proposition

Are you going to finish the story? Cannot wait for the next update. :)

Reviewer: Somsom Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 03 2018 04:18 am

Title: Proposition

Great read and I hope you finish the story. 

Reviewer: Comqlicated Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 28 2017 03:09 pm

Title: Proposition

I think this is a greate read, I look forward to more! This is not merly about rape. So many women are in meaningless, emotionless relationsips because they fear being alone. 

Reviewer: Melinda K. Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 29 2017 06:18 am

Title: Contract

This is good, but I feel like I'm reading in the dark with story. I think I like its direction, but it feels so obscure. Will his thoughts appear?

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13 2017 02:30 am

Title: Contract

MORE!!!!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 20 2016 09:02 am

Title: Contract

update?

Reviewer: sparkle Signed [Report This]
Date: September 20 2014 08:27 pm

Title: Contract

You want reviews, we want updates... plural lol. Very good story, you should cut back on hermonologue of her personal reflections, way too wordy. More dialogue between the two. Now give his personal thoughts of how he became aware of her. Just some suggestions.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 09:41 am

Title: Contract

He is brutal with his honesty! He doesn't sugar coat anything....he paid for her services and expect to be compensated. WOW, that's hard! 



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review, Liam is definately, definately, without a doubt the biggest jackass in the world but at least he is honest LOL

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 09 2014 09:17 am

Title: Contract

He has his nerve.  If he had such a dossier on her, he knew how she looked prior to the negotiation/contract.  To sit here and call her unpretty because she is not falling in line lusting after him is ridiculous.  I would love to see his viewpoint sometimes just to have an understanding of what he is looking for and why.  I'm sorry, you got your money's worth, my virginity for $15000, you have been compensated in full especially as I asked you to stop and you didn't.  So how long does she have to sleep with him for this contract to be fulfilled?  Did I miss the specific contract details?



Author's Response:

He is definately a jackness, and not to worry I didn't write the specific contract details, maybe the coming up chapter or the one after.  Thank you for reading and reviewing though, really appreciate it.

FYI, you are kind of funny.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 04 2014 02:35 pm

Title: Contract

Sometimes making a story "mysterious" ends up turning your readers off (they will lose interest).  There was a great story on here with the characters of John and Sienna (I think) but I had to stop reading it...it gave me a headache...trying to figure out who, what, where.  I'm sure the author knew what was going on...I don't know if the reader did.

Rape stories, what can I say?  Both parties have to have a couple of screws loose when the rapist doesn't know or doesn't care that he is a rapist and the "victim" is attracted to her rapist...after the rape.

BTW, what is Liam going to do?   Kill the brother?  She already spent the money he gave her and if the money he gave her wasn't going to pay for ALL of her brother's medical needs why did she ALLOW this man to make her a whore.  Yes, a whore ($ for sex). 

Even if Liam magically falls in love with his mark (that's what she is; this can't be the first time he has done something like this, pick a mark based on the mark's financial needs) she will never have the upper hand.  He paid for her body and he then used it.  Oh my, just had a thought...my apologies for calling him a rapist.  He is a John and he used what he paid for.

Considering Medicaid pays for a whole lot including transplants and even experimental treatment (hubby is a Cardiothoracic Surgeon ), just don't get why she had to pay with her body.



Author's Response:

i understand, I should warn you this story is not for everyone and could get worse, well the interactions between my cars will probably get even worse.  I don't really understand much about medicard, but from what I understand it pays only about 80 percent of the bills but not all. Either way, its a fictional story and its not for everyone.  Thank you for reading it though and commenting, I will try and work on the mysteriousness of the story

Reviewer: Stories Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 04 2014 05:40 am

Title: Contract

I like your storyto read it again and I am sure there is a point you are getting to, but it seem to be taking the long route.  I wish they would talk more...



Author's Response:

Sorry to disappoint, not yet...it will be long but please stay with me on this hopefully not to tedious a journey

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 04 2014 03:01 am

Title: Contract

Wow I don't even know what to say. He says she's not pretty but yet he's pursuing her. Something might be loose in his head.



Author's Response:

Yes, you are right on the money! LOL, he is a little cuckoo

Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 04 2014 02:55 am

Title: Contract

Yeah!! welcome back, I hope the new year brings many chapters for this great story.



Author's Response:

thank you, and I will see what I can do! Hopefully it wil impress.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 04 2014 02:28 am

Title: Contract

What type of man wants a woman against her will?  Why did he want her in the first place if he didn't want a virgin and if her looks leave much to be desired? 

I have a feeling that he's toying with her, using her for some purpose.  I feel sorry for her because she's trapped in this situation and he's using her love for her brother to get what he wants.

I'm trying not to sour on this story and I can't wait to see where it goes.



Author's Response:

Well...to tell you the truth, I hate him too right now but he will get better...I think, I just go where the story takes me.

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03 2014 09:46 pm

Title: Contract

i like the story, but I agree with the reviewer that said its a touch too mysterious. there's a lot of white space that holds my interest. I think more than anything I like your writing style; however, I hate stories involving rape so I can't say if I'll continue if he is going to keep raping her and she is going to keep allowing it. That's a level of creativity I haven't gotten to yet. 

 

I think you should continue because there is so much possibility to have with this tale as with all proposition stories. Also, would it be possible to get a physical description of the characters it makes it easier to visualize...



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading this and reviewing. I just want to say I understand your concerns, I will try to discribe the two main characters... I'm not good with physical descriptions but I'll give it a try.

Reviewer: SleepEasy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03 2014 09:31 pm

Title: Contract

I don't really know what to say. This story is sooo... I'm trying to reserve judgement until I can figure out where you are taking us on this ride.

It is well written. Perhaps a touch too mysterious. There are a lot of issues here: the rape, her inner conflict of wanting Liam physically and prostituting herself. Her lack of self-awareness is not unusual at that age... so there's that. still, I think you cut us off too quickly. Just when I'm getting into it, and doing a bit of unravelling.

What would make this guy think he could buy her like this?



Author's Response:

Is it too mysterious...? Well I will try as I go further not to make everything too complicated.  And to answer your question, he is a douche bag, sort of, kind of...he has his reasons for doing what he did.  Whether his reasons are valid is questionable, he isn't the normal sort is all I can say.

Thank you either way for commenting

Reviewer: Bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 03 2014 08:47 pm

Title: Proposition

Love the story!!! It has me at the edge of my seat waiting to see what happens next.  Apparently it' not everyone's cup of tea but I love how it is unfolding.  Please don't change the characters!!! 

Reviewer: avid reader Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 04 2013 10:45 pm

Title: Proposition

update QUICK because I'm hooked

Reviewer: silentwriter Signed [Report This]
Date: November 02 2013 12:12 am

Title: Memories

don't let her be weak, are you letting her be weak?? lol

 



Author's Response:


Weakness is relative...this is the beginning of her story and it might take some time before she shows a bit of fight and strength. I promise I'll try to make you reading this worth your while so please keep reviewing :)

Reviewer: dounome Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 12:07 pm

Title: Proposition

Oh my how I enjoyed reading this can't wait for the updates I have a feeling that he might not have known that she was still a virgin,but that goes without saying.i really do enjoy it don't take too long we wants more :)



Author's Response:

you are possible, maybe...definately right actually, and I will try and explain in the next chapter when she interacts with Liam. You will get to see a hint of who he really is, don't know if that will change your opinions about him though.  I am glad you are enjoying yourself, that makes me very happy.  Hope I won't disappont!!!

Reviewer: toni174ever Signed [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 01:49 am

Title: Memories

Could she have more backbone please?  Why didn't she just tell him that Hermes told her that the reason she was there was because of her brother and she wanted to know what he meant?



Author's Response:

She wishes she could have more backbone when it comes to him, but please remember there are many different kind of strengths!!!

And please keep reviewing :)

Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 01:32 am

Title: Memories

LOVE where this story is fleshed out. Please keep writing.



Author's Response:

I'm trying to flesh everything out, and I will definately keep writting, thanks for reviewing!!!

Reviewer: kisser Signed [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 01:05 am

Title: Proposition

I can't help but eagerly read your updates.  I just can't get over how he viciously raped her and now she is attracted to him.  How did they meet?  How does Liam make his living?  How is the brother doing and will Liam meet him?



Author's Response:

First of all, thanks for reading and reviewing.

wow, so many questions? Well she was attracted to him from the very first time she saw him.  I will write about the first time she met him as I go along, just remember this is in her POV, the first time she sees him might not be the first time he sees her.  What does Liam do?  How is the brother doing? Will Liam meet him?  Sorry lady, spoilers!!!!

Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: October 27 2013 06:08 pm

Title: Proposition

I'm intrigued and can't wait to read more as this story unfolds.

 

Reviewer: katie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 27 2013 04:29 pm

Title: Hope

Master Liam is a douche who takes advantage of little girls with big problems.  Now he wants to have supper with her like they went on date 12 days ago. What nerve, such audacity, that dude has some big cohonnas!  That child needs, therapy is what is required.  How big is the age difference between Liam and Elyshia?  

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 27 2013 04:05 pm



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