Reviews For The Pale One
Title: Chapter 1


Reviewer: Presh Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2016 10:46 am

Title: Chapter 7

I hope you come back soon to this storu, I enjoy it and I hope to see cast pics, I know it[s tough to do :)

Reviewer: missj Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 13 2015 03:10 am

Title: Chapter 7

Please finish😞

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 25 2015 06:39 pm

Title: Chapter 1

This is so good please come back a finish !

Reviewer: Indigo_bluee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 03 2015 05:09 pm

Title: Chapter 1

please please please pretty please continue, the story has just begun and i cant stop reading. like really. its great. 

id love to see goza show a vulnerable side. he seems to need emoladla more than she him. maybe she will be sucessful in her attempts of running away and we will see this side.

the sexual domination between them is hot as hell but what about the fam she left? why was she sacrificed? seems like a great warrior, would she not be an asset? or is this a trait of all her people?

also the wolf (who is she/him?, some sort of spirit guardian?) im unfamiliar with the story/tolkien you are referring to so its all brand new to me. 

this is all so interesting and good, thank you for sharing it with us!

good luck on your exams! come back to us when you pass lol

Reviewer: business Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 03 2014 06:41 am

Title: Chapter 7

This is so good. I wish I could help in making the banner, but i'm no good either. LOL. Who do you have in mind for your characters? And please update soon, your story is good, I can't wait to see their conversations and how they grow in development. PLEASE UPDATE!!! 

Reviewer: miss j Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 27 2014 03:32 pm

Title: Chapter 6

Characters are tough, but the story is good. I particularly like when E tried to knock Goza out from her viewpoint. It was hilarious.

Reviewer: readwonderfully Signed [Report This]
Date: September 25 2014 06:44 am

Title: Chapter 7

That was hot!! 😋

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 25 2014 01:58 am

Title: Chapter 7

I'm really enjoying this. A relationship of trust needs to build in order for love to flourish. Build that and everything else will fall into place. Also I would love for her to be pregnant.

Reviewer: p Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 11:44 pm

Title: Chapter 7

It's definitely interesting. I'm curious where you'll take it. 

Reviewer: PetitteBelle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 06:56 pm

Title: Chapter 7

please tell me that they will talk soon... like a full on conversation. i would be reacting the same way. I think she is 100% right with how she keeps trying to escape. BUT you can see how the two are really good for each other. I reallyyyyy want them to fall deep for each other pleaseeeeee!! I want to see him all caring and protective of her!! i can fully see them arguing hahaha maybe if someone else dares to hit her or something? i dunno im just wanting the two of them to talk and then do the naughty naughty hahahah loved it

Reviewer: Gordana Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 05:10 pm

Title: Chapter 7

My only wish is that you give us further insight into the characters>

How did she become the prize?

Why is Goza so calculated?

What is the point of their union?


The story is strong and intrigues me to no end. Thank you for posting!


Reviewer: Antalye Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 02:54 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Woah this just took a un I did not see coming lol. 

Reviewer: Jesslove3205 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 07:20 am

Title: Chapter 3

I am loving this story so far. What year are they suppose to be in? He is a savage. She is a savage right back ! & I love it.. 

Reviewer: Jesslove3205 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 07:12 am

Title: Chapter 7

Sexy!!! I love how dominating he is

Reviewer: Futz Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 04:56 am

Title: Chapter 7

I love her defiant nature. It is hard to find a good story like this. Especially with a black woman. As for suggestions, I think that E should keep plotting her escape while maybe falling in love at the same time??? Maybe a bit too cliche.... That's  why you are the author and I am not

Reviewer: J Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 04:54 am

Title: Chapter 7

Thank you for the update! I enjoy this story!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. You're awesome. :] 

Reviewer: keluboo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 02:24 am

Title: Chapter 7

Great update. Could it be that she's preggers and don't realize it yet I'm sure with this last go that maybe she is.

Author's Response:

Perhaps? We'll see  ;]

Reviewer: kvgurl Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 12:08 am

Title: Chapter 6

more please

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 24 2014 09:20 am

Title: Chapter 6

I love this so much. When I first Saw the pale orc

I knew that I lived him. Especially when he begins

too talk. The villains need some living to. He also

reminds me of Prince Nuada from Hellboy.

Reviewer: onyxfaerie57 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 25 2013 07:32 pm

Title: Chapter 6

I just finished all 6 chapters and I'm loving it! I can't wait to read more!

What problems were you having with posting pics? Is it just not uploading at all?

Author's Response:

They'll upload but they don't show in the preview or when I actually post. I followed the sizing guidelines and I have the photos I want to use for the banner and my two main characters so far.

Reviewer: kitten84 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 05 2013 02:51 am

Title: Chapter 6

Love this story and even more LOVE THE ALPHA MALE!

Reviewer: sjrucker Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 05 2013 12:56 am

Title: Chapter 6

Awww sweet. Maybe he's not all brute?

Reviewer: bhvana Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 05 2013 12:29 am

Title: Chapter 6

If you tweak the spacing a bit, it'll look longer.

apart from that, very intense...

Reviewer: Bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 04 2013 12:05 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Interesting start! More please.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 16 2013 04:09 am

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