You have done a fantastic job. The writing is very tight with well-formed character strokes. Excellent!
Reviewer: Pinklemonade Signed [Report This]Date: November 14 2013 05:22 am
This story has definitely caught my attention. I love your writing style.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: xbelivex Signed [Report This]Date: November 14 2013 12:40 am
Please please I needs a visual is Goza The Pale Orc? Agoz? Cause girl he is played by Manu "FINE ASS" Bennet ...so even in his Orc make up girl that body is everything! But whomever the frick he is ..as YOU have written him girl, He can get it! ....yes I said
and Ms. Emoladla is FIRE!! Her strength and honesty is perfection. She sounds like my auntie. You may get a swing in but trust, she is looking to take you out if its an "her or you situation". And I stan for her already.
Author's Response:
I hope you still like where I'm going with him
Reviewer: Aleta Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 09:24 pm
firstly, you are all kinds of wrong for introducing me to this story with these 4 glorious chapters today. girl i have a job! i am trying to gather these coins and i cannot due to my mind focusing on your story!!
secondly, i loved it. i am here for it! please please update soon. do you need a beta?
Author's Response:
This story is an exercise in how good I'm getting at editing myself but I really appreciate the offer! :]
Reviewer: Aleta Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 08:42 pm
Thoughts? I like it. I'm interested. I'd like more as soon as possible please.
Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 08:15 pm
I love it soo much cant wait for the next chapter!
Reviewer: bannakiwi Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 08:04 pm
This is shaping up to be a really good story. Its descriptive makes my imagination move. Keep going.
Reviewer: schism724 Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 07:41 pm
I agree with everyone else especially CaramelGal. MORE MORE MORE plz!!!
Reviewer: kimyso Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 07:11 pm
Love the story so far.More please.
Reviewer: zoe zoey Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 06:54 pm
Explosive!
Reviewer: Bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 06:28 pm
Interesting start! Looking forward to more, (and yes, wld love longer chapters 😉)
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 05:22 pm
Emoladla is a fighter & I love that! She refuses to be some man's play toy & I respect that. Although I'm curious as to how long this will last because Goza seems like he's ready to devour her. I can't wait until the next chapter. Please update soon!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much :]
Reviewer: CaramelGal Signed [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 05:04 pm
This is a really interesting story, unfortunately I'm not that familiar with Tolkien's work and have no clue who Goza is. But I'm definitely interested in where you're taking this little adventure.
Author's Response:
He wasn't really featured in the books so much as the new Hobbit movie. Glad you like it though!
Reviewer: Mags Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 13 2013 08:58 am