This whole situation is fucked! I like Davis but the situation doesn't give me much room to like him outside of the fact that he's more normal than the doctor. Nevertheless the ending was comforting. It's funny because as I read on I constantly wondered what would Tess/Jay and the crew do in this situation. Lol
Author's Response:
Crumble to the ground screaming and crying....lol
Reviewer: Nita Roberts Signed
[Report This]Date: February 10 2014 01:41 am
I'm braver than I thought. I have to go back and read I'm slightly unsure of what's going on in reference to the family who took her in. Are they dead? I'll re-read...I want the scientist to play in high speed traffic for the way he and the "government" are treating Jill.
Reviewer: Nita Roberts Signed [Report This]Date: February 10 2014 01:28 am
Wow! That was extremely powerful and strangely realistic. This is a scarcely reality that child soldiers face on a global level. My heart raced with every paragraph because I kept thinking I would rebel and it wouldn't be me. When you mentioned the medical experiment facilities my heart literally dropped into my stomach. The scariest thought about Jill's story is that there is no safe haven or a hopeful notion that things can change. I want nothing more for her to be captured by the resistance and try to heal from the horrific crimes she was made to commit. The fact that you titled your story "when they came for me" sent chills down my spine, that speech is on the wall of the Holocast museum. I had tears in my eyes as soon as I saw the title. I'm gonna try my hardest to continue to read and support you because you are an amazing artist but these things always scare me. Weird but cool side note as I read this all I could think about "Time" by Hans Zimmer and "This Bitter Earth" sung by Dinah Washington. Like I said I will try to read but my heart is heavy. Boy oh boy, you have grown so much as a writer I am proud of you. I do like the story it's just things like this give me nightmares. You still rock!
Reviewer: Nita Roberts Signed [Report This]Date: February 10 2014 01:11 am
Update.
Reviewer: Paper Airplanes Anonymous [Report This]Date: February 04 2014 12:25 am
Godd start!
Reviewer: Paper Airplanes Anonymous [Report This]Date: February 04 2014 12:08 am
Well he's cray cray!! How will they control these new and improved human beings? I can't wait for her to kill that scientist!! I can't wait to see who she meets that will help her fight the enemy. This is good!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: January 29 2014 01:17 pm
First gorgeous pick for Jill. This is the type of the story that I see myself reading as a book. I would actually purchase this. Science fiction is right up my alley I love reading about futuristic and other worldly things. I would really like to see where you are going with the story. I am looking forward to more
Reviewer: shellyme Signed [Report This]Date: January 23 2014 03:55 am
I am ready to read more. Please continue.
Reviewer: Qsmommy05 Signed [Report This]Date: January 20 2014 07:30 pm
I like it, can't wait to see where you take this story!
Reviewer: cdy1216 Signed [Report This]Date: January 20 2014 04:15 pm
Please, please, please slow down. The plot is nice, I want to savour it ;)
I think less is more, so I don't mind it when authors keep me waiting a bit.
Author's Response:
Duly noted! :)
Reviewer: Sleek Signed [Report This]Date: January 20 2014 06:51 am
Damn she had to shoot her parents in order to save them for torture at a medical facility. The things that she has been ordered have her go coo coo for cocoa puffs. I am intrigued so please continue as I am sci-fi fan this has got my interest!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: January 20 2014 04:52 am