This is a good beginning. What does Maddox think about Lena? Who are the other possible contenders? Does her father favor any of the competing wolves? Looking forward to reading more.
Nyeesha
Author's Response:
Well chapter 3 should answer your many questions. And i thin you might actually be surprised by the turn out.
Reviewer: Nyeesha Signed
[Report This]Date: May 31 2014 06:50 pm
Can't wait.
Author's Response:
Me neither! thank you for the review
Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous
[Report This]Date: May 31 2014 05:24 pm
Yay a good were story!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Reviewer: vulgarviper Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 26 2014 08:41 pm
So original this story is exactly why I fell in love with this site years ago.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: kier101 Signed [Report This]Date: May 26 2014 12:15 am
She acts, thinks and talks like a 13 year old. Sorry but can you make her more mature. I'm around her age and that's deffiantly not how we talk. But so far I like the storyline!
Author's Response:
Okay well im going to try to change to seem more mature but she is on the sheltered side so she is going to seemed a little immature
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 25 2014 09:31 am
Me likey! More please.
Author's Response:
Thank you
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: May 25 2014 08:17 am
A good start. Idea is good and shows potential. A few things made it a chore to read such as too many run on sentences that repeated the same things too many times. Needs to be edited.
Author's Response:
Okay I am goijng to try and work on it
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 25 2014 07:07 am
A few errors but otherwise a good job!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review and I'm going to try and fix the errors.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 24 2014 10:35 pm