Reviews For Modern Love Story
Title: Chapter 6

Doesn't Zane think it's strange that all these things are happening to him? That last incident should make him run to the cops.

I like this story. It's different. And everytime he says Hoodie Hero, I just crack up.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 03 2014 03:43 am

Title: Chapter 4

Love it....love at first sight!

Reviewer: Cindi47 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 23 2014 01:54 am

Title: Chapter 4

They're so cute, I can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: RAPTUSMIND Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 19 2014 04:41 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Zane has got it bad!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 18 2014 12:30 am

Title: Chapter 3

That was cute.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 18 2014 12:28 am

Title: Chapter 4

I apologize for the previous comment. I did not realize I clicked on the wrong story. Now to my review. It is a tad confusing the way you switched doesn't points of view during the chapters. There were a some grammatical and punctuation errors, but that can easily be rectified if you read your story  aloud. Zane, I don't quite like him just yet. I get that he's a model, but all models aren't vain. I know it is a,part of his job to have a perfect body, but he seems juvenile and shallow for someone that few up with a hard life, but maybe that's how you want him to seem. He reminds me of Zack from "Saved by the Bell" . His Hoodie Hero seems like a cool chick. 

Reviewer: Mavs0515 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 10:18 am

Title: Chapter 1

Please indicate on  your story this is a Member's Only story that way other readers will know. Thanks :)

Reviewer: Mavs0515 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 09:49 am

Title: Chapter 3

Aww, hell nawl.  LOL, he fainted with a hard on.  ROFLMAO.  Whew, that right there brought tears to my eyes.

Thank you for that.  Can't wait for the lessons to start.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 05:07 am

Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoy Zane's Pov, he's hilarious. That first chapter was brutal, but you got me hooked already.I like this story very much!



Author's Response:

Thank you. I was going for funny. YAY!

Reviewer: Nua Signed [Report This]
Date: October 15 2014 10:01 pm

Title: Chapter 1

Paragraphs with spaces would make this much easier to read.  Formatting is an important part of editing.



Author's Response:

I am well aware of that. Sorry for the difficulty in reading. I have attempted to reformat it properly. 

 

Reviewer: Dinndee Signed [Report This]
Date: October 14 2014 08:58 pm

Title: Chapter 1

I really like where you're going with this but it's kinda hard to read. It's like one long paragraph. Maybe break up the structure a bit next time. Good story otherwise.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the compliment. 

I fixed the formatting. 

 

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 14 2014 05:47 pm

Title: Chapter 1

Damn, who set Zane up? Was it his agent? Who was hero with the attack dogs?  More please!



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks.

I have plenty of chapters ready to be typed. 

 

 

 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 14 2014 01:57 pm



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