Title: Chapter 1

Awesome start!! This was a very long chapter and I very much appreciate it. Looks like things are going to be very interesting. I cant wait for the next update 😄. I have a few suggestions. You tend to leave out a letter in a word or a whole word. It confused me at times, and i think it's something to keep in mind for the future. Also I would really love to see the people you have in mind for your characters. Is it possible for you to add pictures in the future?

 

I'm excited to see where this goes and learn more about all the characters. Thanks for sharing your work.

Reviewer: MissCO Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2014 04:11 pm

Title: Chapter 1

Haha at the end not and I truely feel curious about the story!!! :D

Reviewer: Keyajackson Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 01 2014 02:05 am

Title: Chapter 1

I LOVE IT!! I can't wait to read about their first meeting and see what they think of one another. I really like the fact that your first chaper was long, I was able to really get into the story and I can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Faith Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 30 2014 03:43 pm

Title: Chapter 1

The characters didn't have much descriptive imagery. Only bits and pieces about Trey and Julie so I can't really picture anyone. Will you please give a more detail description of the mains.

Author's Response:

Yeah, that's comig up next. I did that on purpose. I wanted the main character's to do the describing when they met, since there point of view is the one that mattered.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: shellyme Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2014 01:56 pm

Title: Chapter 1

I love it



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing 

Reviewer: kier101 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2014 08:37 am

Title: Chapter 1

I love it



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you like it. It was inside of me and just wanted to come out, I just couldn't stop writing. That's why the first chapter is so long, lol.

Reviewer: kier101 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2014 08:37 am



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