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Title: Voyeur

Beautifully written!

Reviewer: HarperSinclaire Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/10/12 06:33 am

Title: Two Man Stool

WOW!  So Hanna is a little bi-sexual but, I strongly believe her major leaning is toward men and that's good!    

Baal is a dirty disgusting lesbian and I wasn't surprised at her agressiveness to dominate Hanna.  I'm so glad Hanna let her know she would beat the skin off her funky ass if she didn't leave her alone.  But, I'm sure Baal has no intentions of giving up.  

Unfortunately, dangerous violent consequences could result because Baal has the character of the sewer.

I think Boon will be the real help to Hanna if Baal ever returns; Aster is too self-absorped and never really around.

Seems Hanna may have a slight mental problem, that hatred she screamed at Baal included association with her mother in that she used the word mama, one time.

I'm starting to feel worry for Hanna!

Thank you Puertaobierta for the great Updates and looking forward to more installments!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/02/12 02:08 pm

Title: Two Man Stool

I'm glad Boon and Hanna are together, he's finally won a place in her heart, along with others of course, especially Aster.  But, somethings better than nothing, LOL;

Their lovemaking was really HOT!

I love the flow of this story (both Parts one and two); it is smooth and actions, thoughts, reactions are quick like life, but still filled with meaning important to the character.

Dialogue is also good, and natural.


Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/02/12 01:43 pm

Title: Voyeur

I enjoyed their love making and I think Boon appears a good lover, possible a true competition for Aster.

Nice ending to this story; Boon finally getting real sex from Hanna for himself!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/01/12 01:38 am

Title: Voyeur

good update.

possibly Baal is really a man or a lesbo. Hanna pays Baal with sex??

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 21/01/12 12:59 am

Title: Voyeur

POWERFULLY EROTIC!

Also, I think both Aster and Hanna know that Boon watches them fucking on the patio.

I felt so sorry for Boon when Astor came to the gallery and took Hanna's attention immediately; Boon became non-existent to Hanna!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/01/12 12:35 am

Title: Voyeur

I want to add this comment to my previous review:  I loved the description of creating a wood sculpture synonymous to how you mold your hearts desire into the type of lady you want her to be and that she also loves only you.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 20/01/12 11:40 pm

Title: Voyeur

It does appear that hanna is doing a little seducing but, i'm also beginning to wonder is she a little over sexed because she's been after him initially.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 20/01/12 11:27 pm

Title: Voyeur

I think possibly Hanna is an exhibitionist, she has to know Boon's been watching her having sex on her patio.  Anyway, she is truly very Beautiful; whatever her activities are on the patio she deserves to be watched.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 20/01/12 06:47 pm

Title: Voyeur

I wouldn't be surprised if the next door neighbor, Hanna, that boon has been peeping on may be an exhibitionist.  it's likely she knows Boon is watching her have sex on her patio.

 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 20/01/12 06:28 pm

Title: Voyeur

I loved how his watching the couple was told, I joined in voyeuring with him and it was intriguing.  Also, it was highly erotic the voyeur's reaction to his watching!  So i wonder all sorts of questions about why he peeps, does he have a problem with the ladies and what is the problem?  I'm not condemning is voyeurism, just curious about him!

I am just dying to know who each of these three characters are!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/01/12 02:00 pm

Title: Two Man Stool

when i can gather my thoughts, i shall review all i have read.

just know this: you. are. amazing.

damn, this is so unbelievably good.

whew!

Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/12/11 04:08 am

Title: Two Man Stool

Great start. Hanna an Aster are still way creepy to me, but gosh I love Boon.

Reviewer: Peach Martini Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 29/04/11 01:45 am

Title: Two Man Stool

Uh Oh she's scrubbing....

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LOL

YEA!! for the squeal...Great Chapter Tank YOU!!!!!!!!!

 

 

Reviewer: NiaZ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/04/11 06:08 pm

Title: Two Man Stool

Glad the story is continuing!  Definitely don't trust Aster.

Reviewer: qualidee3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/04/11 06:33 am

Title: Two Man Stool

YAY part dos!!! [still side eyes Aster] Great start! [waits patiently for more]

Reviewer: Music Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24/04/11 08:26 am

Title: Two Man Stool

Glad to see the continuation of Hanna, Boon and company. More please!!

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/04/11 02:58 am

Title: Two Man Stool

Good start to the story.  Thanks

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/04/11 01:18 am

Title: Two Man Stool

Liking this story alot.

Reviewer: XxSKYxLARKxX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24/04/11 12:20 am

Title: Voyeur

ended too soon - look more than forward to the continuation! there's more to this story. a mystery that needs to be solved, thanks for sharing - hope you update soon!



Author's Response:

Well then, its time to start it back up! The new part is waiting for you. Thank you!

Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16/04/11 12:45 pm

Title: Voyeur

Great cast pics! And that Aster is...mmhmm. Anyhoo I really can't wait for the next installment to this series cause there's still so many more questions I have but won't ask cause I know they wil be answered soon.

YAY!!! Boon's no longer a voyeur. I was cheering for him.



Author's Response:

Thanks! Well the second part has arrived. Hope to get to those questions soon. Lastly, Boon may need your cheers.

:)

Reviewer: Music Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16/04/11 06:58 am

Title: Voyeur

Funny I had a whole different imagnation for Hanna yett Boon and Aster were very on point. Great selection pic!



Author's Response:

Yeah, I had a different picture of Hanna in my head too, but she was hard to find. Thanks!

Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/04/11 06:52 am

Title: Voyeur

OUtstanding!



Author's Response:

I don't know how to reply without sound hideously redundant. :)

Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/04/11 06:51 am

Title: Voyeur

Loved the ending. I'm still afraid he's going to wish he was only still watching from that window. This is beautifully written. Thanks.



Author's Response:

Thank you! We will see, we will see. :)

(2nd part has arrived)

Reviewer: peach martini Signed [Report This]
Date: 15/04/11 06:46 pm

Title: Voyeur

like the cast.

Author's Response:

Thank you kindly. :)

Reviewer: yummy954 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 15/04/11 05:32 pm

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