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Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Nice short!

Reviewer: Jujubee50 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/10/11 08:49 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

I'm conflicted. On one hand I think he's really into Simone, which I'm totally happy about. But then this other girl is intriguing to him. WRITE A FULL STORY PLEEEEAAAASSEEE, I implore you :)

**fingers crossed for him and Simone** :)

Reviewer: Alphabet_Girl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 19/02/11 03:00 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Great tantalizing writing, nicely done, not vile.

I really enjoyed it and I liked the realism.  For a short story the characters of Benjamin and Alisa were well drawn, a capsule view of completeness.  

Benjamin made me really smile, he got an unexpected turn on; seems his brother correctly knew what he needed.  That sex with Alisa was really HOT! 

This could be extended I think into a nice story about Benjamin, but not including Alisa as a major character. 

Alisa, is racially a Black Russian, that's interesting, I was not aware of such existed. 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/02/11 09:36 am

Title: Cast

Good looking cast

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/02/11 08:40 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Woah, deep and hot! Great job :)

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31/01/11 08:20 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Too short!! Very good!

Reviewer: DirtyDiva Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/01/11 12:26 pm

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Loved the story and the banner  - thank you for the one-shot! really enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19/01/11 02:06 pm

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

I like. Will Simone play a part in this, he has feelings for her and now the girl with the tattoo? Will they be connected somehow?

Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 07:19 pm

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Wow! What a rush! Anonymous, wild, savage sex. Please write more. I am dying to know what happens next. Please develope this story more.

Reviewer: Buddha Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 05:33 pm

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Thanks for a great read.  Thanks

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 01:57 pm

Title: Cast

Great cast.  Thanks

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 01:57 pm

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

I like it but I feel there is more to this story.  I would like to see him get over himself and acknowledge his feelings for Simone.  Please continue.

Reviewer: Romance Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 11:10 am

Title: Cast

Great story! Great one-shot!

I'm intrigued... and feeling a bit greedy. 

From the feedback thus far, I wonder if you'd re-consider not making this into a full story. You have an interesting plot. The beginnings of some good characters, even Edward's stupid childish self. Why was Ben a little put off by Simone mentioning a boyfriend? Alisa and the life she must have led since the age of nine.

Human trafficking is a horrendous practise. I believe that Ben would pursue Alisa... right after he hunts down Edward and puts an ass whopping on him.

Also, the song is interesting. But what really caught my eye was the banner and the background art on the cast page. Very nice.

Either way, thank you for sharing!!!

Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 07:21 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Wow, interesting start so far. Love it!! But his brother shouldn't have drugged him!!! Wonder what'll happen next??? More please.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 07:03 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Why is this just a one shot!? I would love for this to be a full story. Maybe a darker version of pretty woman.

Reviewer: luv_an_alpha Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 06:43 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

NIce wish there was more...I'm kinda in love with Alex Skarsgard

Reviewer: IzzyLove Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 06:31 am

Title: Oh yeah i knew...

Wish there was more. It was a great story love mo some Alexander Skarsgard to hott

Reviewer: ellenangel69 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 17/01/11 06:09 am

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