Penname: Flicker and Sparkle [Contact]

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Member Since: 31/12/09

Membership status: Member

Bio:

I'm not really sure how long I've been writing. I write poetry, songs, fan fiction, and I'm trying to write fiction itself. If someone would be willing to give me help with my writing, I'd appreciate it. I'm still trying to learn.  I'm also trying to get new themes into my writing besides just romance.


I listen to many differnt music artists. I think I might be inspired by the music I listen to in a way.   


 




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Reviews by Flicker and Sparkle


Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 14]
Summary:

 

 

Bryan Zheng runs into a girl, twice in his early life. After years of not thinking about her, he suddenly can't get her out of his mind. One day he saves a woman from two guys. He sees the similarities between the woman and the girl he remembers and decides to take her in when he discovers that she doesn't have a place to live. There's just one catch...they can't understand a word of what the other is saying.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 2746
Read Count: 799
Published: 05/11/08
Updated: 05/11/08


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This seems quite interesting. I like it.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstar
Date: 01/04/10

Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 55]
Summary:

 

 

Monique Harrington loves her family. She and her husband Mark's relationship is founded on the basis of love, honesty, and respect. Everything was supposed to go off smoothly during this year's Christmas Week get together. But when she begins to suspect Mark of cheating, secrets are revealed, demons are unleashed, pasts are unraveled and hearts are broken. Can she and Mark remember that they still have a promise to keep? This is a response to BlackMamba's Holiday challenge.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Work in Progress
Challenges: Tis The Season Holiday Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 6727
Read Count: 11263
Published: 09/12/08
Updated: 31/12/08


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Two: Darcy

This is really good and I like the plot of it. I just have this to say. Your pictures aren't showing up anymore. Also sometimes you kind of switch between first point-of-view and third point-of-view. I don't know if you were trying to make these thoughts and they just weren't highlighted or anything. I just wanted to bring it to your attention, and that's all. I really enjoy the charaacterization you have. I think it's really great.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed
Date: 03/01/10

Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 30]
Summary:

Melanie's life was finally coming together. Her business was thriving and she is engaged to be married in two weeks on Christmas Eve. Everything is wonderful,easy and uncomplicated until her past walks through the door.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters
Challenges: Tis The Season Holiday Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 8649
Read Count: 9079
Published: 15/12/08
Updated: 18/12/08


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

This is really well written. I like this story so far and it's interesting.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 31/12/09


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

This seems really interesting. I like the idea. I would like to read more of it.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 20/11/10

Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 32]
Summary:

Born to an African-American mother, Kendra’s sandy hair and fair skin suggested that the black man listed on her birth certificate may not be her real father. If so, then who was? Read on to find out…



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2033
Read Count: 42538
Published: 20/06/09
Updated: 20/06/09


Title: Chapter 1: Short Story

This is really good. It is written well.

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Flicker and Sparkle. :)

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed
Date: 31/12/09

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 43]
Summary:

                                                       

It's not interracial, and I wasn't sure if I could post it or not. But I really like it. It's a Michael Jackson Tribute/Story. I highly suggest you give it a chance. But if you don't, your missing out.

For all of his child hood, he felt different. He was different from other boys, he didn't have a chance to be normal.

He didn’t get to have normal child hood experiences. He didn’t really have a significant other to tell him how beautiful he was, and how loved he was.


I wondered what if he had some one special during his childhood? Some one who was able to give him some normalcy in his life?

 Some one who could tell him how beautiful he was when he couldn’t possibly believe so? What if he had a shoulder to fall back on when times get hard.

What if he had some one who loved him with their whole being? Some one who he would spend his life with?


 How differently would things be, or would they be the same? Would they be able to stay together? Or would temptation ruin what they worked so hard for?

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Music, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 23
Completed:No
Word count: 102749
Read Count: 5377
Published: 10/08/09
Updated: 01/02/10


Title: Chapter 1: Got To Be There

I just have this to say. Make sure you capitilize everything properly. Also when doing dialogue make sure to start a new paragraph when another person starts speaking.

Also when you use speaking, saying verbs use commas.

Ex: "That was fun," she commented, looking at him.

 

"Yeah, it was," he replied, smiling.

 

When you are just doing actions, you use periods.

Ex: "That was fun." She looked at him and smiled.

 

"Yeah, it was." He returned her smile.

I would suggest searching dialogue punctuation or dialogue writing for further information.  

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed
Date: 13/03/10

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 59]
Summary:

 

Banner

Tristan Danes is young, good-looking, and unemployed without a reasonably useable degree.His life gets turned upside down with the death of his grandmother and the inheritance of her small New York based coffee shop along with the mountains of debt that came with it.

Kira Moore just graduated from Boston University with a Biology degree. Her life looked good so far with the exceptions of a troubled law breaking sister and the inability to find a job. So what do these two have in common, besides 11 years of friendship they're technically married, well only technically. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 10
Completed:No
Word count: 26320
Read Count: 10113
Published: 21/08/09
Updated: 22/07/11


Title: Chapter 3: The Build Up

This seems like it could be really interesting. It's fairly well written too. Good job.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 08/05/10

Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 8]
Summary:

Pat

A one-shot addition to the series Love Bears All

***

 September Chamber Challenge

Somewhere in Time...

She was made perfectly, his queen.

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, and story etc. are the property of their respective entities. This plot is the property of SparkApCider (SPAC), and is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

Graphics by SPAC



Table of Contents
Categories: Movies, Books, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Drama, Fantasy
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Racism
Challenges: Somewhere In Time
Series: Love Bears All: A Journey to Love
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 3368
Read Count: 7393
Published: 21/09/09
Updated: 21/09/09


Title: Chapter 1: Cleopatra...Remember the Timeİ

You have a really grat writing style.



Author's Response: Thanks.  I love your name.  Glad you liked the story.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed
Date: 07/01/10

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 208]
Summary:

After the hostile takeover of the world by fairytale (and nightmare?) creatures, Roxanne doesn't have much of a choice but to go with the flow. She does have one major problem, though. There's this guy, see...And he thinks that she is destined to be his mate. What's the problem, you ask? Well, for one thing, he can't touch her without doing her bodily harm...



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Fantasy, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 47491
Read Count: 24035
Published: 18/01/10
Updated: 09/07/11


Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

It was good. I think you "to" instead of "of" in one sentence. It was one near the end about conflicting emotions. Other than that. It was good.

I'm guessing it's Mod.



Author's Response: Thanks for that! By the way, if you ever want to beta for anyone, I could really use it. I try to do the editing myself, but obviously I miss some things. Thank you for reading, reviewing and proofreading! Lol

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 29/05/10

Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

This was really good. I'm really looking forward to seeing where this is going. I wonder what Mod menat by "We'll see about that.".

Anyway, good update.

Truthfully, I was never really "Team Mod" or "Team Leo" no offense. I don't really mind who she ends up with right now. At first, I did think it was a love story between Roxanne and Leonardo, now I have no clue.

Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

As always, I'm glad you liked the update! Mod has a few tricks up his sleeves, just so you know. It's okay that you haven't chosen a favorite. It's good to keep an open mind. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 15/06/10

Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

This chapter wasn't bad at all. I think it gives a better view of the world around the character. It gives more insight, if anything. I'm curious as to what happened at the end. Did he bite her?

Also just checking my "vampire myths", but I thought that they didn't have reflections. Or did you kind of change it a bit. If you did, it's fine.

Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked this chapter. About the reflection thing: I got lazy but it's not very important to the story. LOL

Thanks for reading and reviewing! Stay tuned!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 25/05/10

Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I think this is a very good update. I didn't find it boring.

So far, everything seems okay. I think you are going at a good pace.

All the chracters seems pretty good. I'm not really picking up on any perfection. They have their flaws seemingly. I can't name them all right now most likely. :D

I don't see Roxanne as a Mary-Sue, but that's just me. She seemed timind toward everyone at first, and it seems mostly against Mod. She has her flaws. She won't just automatically understand a character, for example, Mod or Leonardo. Right? I'm just guessing. This POV is fine for me.



Author's Response: Well, thank goodness you didn't find the last update boring.

I'm glad none of the characters seem perfect. I usually find the 'too-good-to-be-true' types to be just that... or unbelievably annoying.

I'm relieved you don't find Roxi's POV frustrating. Yeah, she doesn't understand all of the characters immediately so her perspective is pretty limited. I mean, she is not aware of a lot of the things that go on between the other characters (esp. Mod and Leo). But we'll see more of that later.

Thanks a lot for reviewing! It really means a lot!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 10/07/10

Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I think this did give more insight into the characters besides Roxanne. It didn't seemed that rushed to me. It was pretty good.

Author's Response: I'm glad the chapter didn't seem too rushed to you. I was kind of nervous about it but I didn't want to stick it with the next chapter because it's about something entirely different. Thank you for reading and reviewing! It means a lot to me!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 21/05/10

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

That was very interesting. You write very well.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I try. Please keep reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 19/01/10

Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I thought it was nice really. It was a good update. I liked it. Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 28/08/10

Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I thought it was nice really. It was a good update. I liked it. Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 28/08/10

Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

This wasn't that short to me. It seemed like a really good update. I liked it. It was interesting. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: That's good. I didn't want it to seem too short or disconnected. The rest of it seems like a whopper to me. After I went over it again, it was about as long as it was when I cut it the first time. Hope you like the next update just as much. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 21/08/10

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

This was really good. Your dialogue seemed great. Also you got your emotions across excellently. This chapter seems like one of your best. I think you also went deeper into the character (Roxanne). I was a little confused with her first emotion, but other than that, it was good. The fear she had was depicted well. Good job.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing. I'm glad you liked this chapter. I really was nervous about it.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 27/04/10

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

This is really good. I enjoyed reading it. It kept me interested.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reviewing! I'm very glad that your're still interested considering how long it's been taking me to update. It really means a lot to me that you reviewed. Thank you very much!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17/03/10

Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

This seems really interesting.



Author's Response: Why thank you! I hope I keep you hooked and you enjoy it!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed
Date: 06/02/10

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 118]
Summary:

 

Grace Bullock takes nothing from no one. A woman in her mid-thirties, Grace faces many battles. She must deal with being a single woman in an traditionally-based small town in Alabama. Living in a place that is behind the times, she is the co-owner of a flower shop along with her friend and mother figure Dorothy-Mae. She constantly deals with the town’s known racist sheriff, Holland. Her life seem to go nowhere until she received a phone call from her longtime friend Miriam, a foreign exchange student from France. This phone call leads Grace to visit Miriam in Paris, France which changes everything in her life.

Now with corrected French and translations!



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Racism, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 30
Completed:Yes
Word count: 46755
Read Count: 41650
Published: 06/02/10
Updated: 26/02/11


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

That was well written I liked it. This seems as though it could be very interesting.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstar
Date: 08/05/10

Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 41]
Summary:

I'll never talk again

Oh boy you've left me speechless

You've left me speechless, so speechless 

And I'll never love again

Oh boy you've left me speechless

You've left me speechless, so speechless 

-Lady Gaga

"Speechless" 

 

Cassandra Mitchell never could fight the spell that pushed her and Christian Norris together. Their love was sometimes up and sometimes down but always there. And now that he's gone, she has nothing left to say.

 

Disclaimer:  All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended. 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Music, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed:Yes
Word count: 9846
Read Count: 28922
Published: 11/02/10
Updated: 21/10/10


Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4- Bubble Dreams

This is really good. You write very well. I'm not really sure if you're doing the dialogue correctly.

I've seen it like:

Commas for said, talking verbs.

Ex: "I can't believe you said that," she said while looked at him.

Periods for action verbs:

Ex: "Alright, fine. Go." He opened the door for her to leave.

You still do use exclamation points (!), question marks (?), and the other forms of punctuation.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: 26/02/10

Rated: Most Ages
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[Reviews - 6]
Summary:

                 Finding Confidence

A journey for something you can only find yourself.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction, Miscellaneous
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Drama, Mystery, Science Fiction
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Un-betaed
Series: The Winding Road
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2157
Read Count: 2999
Published: 23/02/10
Updated: 23/02/10


Title: Chapter 1: Finding Confidence

This was written really well. I was surprised by the ending. I think you are supposed to double space when another person is talking. Other than that, that was really good. It was very interesting too.



Author's Response: Thank you for reading Flicker and Sparkle, as soon as I saw the odd commercial I had to write a story based on it.

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 23/02/10

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 57]
Summary: Adena Capricorn is a successful and highly organized 23 year old. Shes an art dealer at one of the most prestigious art galleries in Manhattan. This Capricornian has it all- a great job, great girlfriends and a loving husband. Until her world crashes down when she finds lipstick on her husbands shirt and finds help and solace in the most unexpected of places.How would a Capricorn handle this situation?

Table of Contents
Categories: Music, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: ~*The Zodiac*~
Chapters: 21
Completed:Yes
Word count: 55413
Read Count: 76506
Published: 02/04/10
Updated: 09/05/10


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

The good points: The characters and plot seem well wroked on. I think it's interesting.

Would you like to know what I thought wasn't that great in my opinion?



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!

Um sure constructive criticism only please! ;)

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: 14/04/10

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, you don't really punctuate your dialgoue. You also leave off a few periods here and there in the actual story. I also think that your spacing is off between commas and after quotation marks. I think that might've been all that I saw. Other than that, it was good.

Here's how I learned to punctuate dialogue.

You use commas for speaking/saying verbs. 

"I did that," she said.

"Okay,' he replied.

You use periods wtih action verbs.

"I did that." She pointed to the mess around them.

"Okay." He shrugged.

You still use question marks, exclamation points, and etc.



Author's Response: Oh ok lol yea sometimes i write my sentences like poetry and i always forget to put periods at the end, thats just how i write i guess, but thanks for the heads up!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: 15/04/10