The Chamber :: 5Danielle

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"If you prick us do we not bleed? If you tickle us do we not laugh? If you poison us do we not die? And if you wrong us shall we not revenge?"- William Shakespeare

She didn’t believe in love at first sight, yet when she met Fabian she believed in anything. Even the belief of her death at the hands of her lover…

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Horror, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:No
Word count: 10873
Read Count: 20775
Published: December 28 2010
Updated: July 17 2013

Comments: My previous comments on this story before the author completely changed the story are no longer valid, as of April 2011 the author has commented that she has changed the plot and deleted all the chapters and changed what she previously wrote in the prologue, except that she leaves Meka still trying to jump out a window that Fabian prevents her from succeeding. Now there are new chapters for the new story and they number to 8....Actually the previous plot/story was much better; whereas, the new present story is very sketchy and very unclear and I now feel nothing for any of these characters; the story is empty, it really seems an outline for a story that has not been filled in with the spirit of the characters and their personality and personal intents. THIS STORY IS NO LONGER MY FAVORITE I MERELY POST IT HERE TO MONITOR ITS UPDATES. On Jan 30, 2012 I have read and critiqued thru the last chapter #8. BELOW ARE MY OLD COMMENTS BEFORE THE AUTHOR's CHANGE: An unfinished story I stopped at chapter 9 on 2/14/2011. I like the story, so far it is cute and romantic and promise of sexy but not jumping right in to sex, which I like. Meka, the female lead is a waitress who also attends school. She's just a regular type person trying to make it, but i do sense she is still a virgin although she is about at least 21 or 22. Story said she's been working so hard at trying to better herself, job and school that she has not really had the time and energy for sex and dates. She like Fabian are not personalities that make friends. She has no friends, she sticks to herself. Fabian's only friend is his brother. Both Fabian and brother are sons's of a Germain Mobster but they are relatively educated when they lived in Germany and here in America, business wise, only participate in the legal parts of their father's business, the management of his clubs and creating and opening new clubs. THIS PROMISES TO BE A VERY INTERESTING STORY because author is slowly evolving story and characters, no rush to sex nor gangsterism. But we have the hints, so excitement sustained while present events are very interesting in their own way.

Comments: This is a Great story, Maxie, the White man, his secret problem is, he has been carrying a deep inferiority all his life is a too small penis which has also kept him from acquiring a woman's love of the women he has dated. At age 45 and very rich he has in deep despair given up but he meets Selma (dark brown heavy set 44year old widow and three adult college sons) at a jazz concert and they both find over next six months they are great companions and friends and he falls in love with her. He has avoided sex because he is sure she will reject him upon discovery of his very small penis, as did all the other women. But, after six months they have sex and he finds she is his perfect sexual fit they also eventually marry and have twin babies but a vicious Racist White woman, a stranger, just as they leave hospital plants the seed that the babies being dark and not light skinned are not his. Maxie has greatly wanted children and specifically of course these babies and with Selma for first time in his life he experiences the happiness and love relationship he's craved, I HOPE THE EVIL SEED THE RACIST INTENTIONALLY PLANTED DOES NOT ACHIEVE ITS NEGATIVE INTENDED IMPACT IN HIS HEART AND MIND. At 1/25/2012 I read this thru the ending at chapter11 and anxiously await update.