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A Wrong Turn... by Blackmagic
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 242]
Summary:

 

West Virginia Hills

 

Wallflower Abby Kensington is ready to start living her best life!  This road trip is the first of many exciting steps she is taking.  However, on her journey she meets a man who has a different plan in store for her...

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Psychological, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Kink, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 23
Completed:No
Word count: 153219
Read Count: 50206
Published: March 24 2020
Updated: March 18 2024

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Title: Chapter 10: Abby gets punished...

Still reading, still hate the daddy bit it just throws me out of the story, but I can't wait for the next update.

I'm still not sure if I can root for this relationship. It's looking like some stockholm syndrome to me at this point. I would like to see more character development. We are getting it from Abby, but I'm not so sure I could say the same of Elias. 

I'm enjoying the introduction of new characters. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  I don't plan for the story to be too long but I wanted to be realistic-ish in the development of Elias.  I don't think he would be so quick to change just yet.  While I do think part of what Abby is experiencing is some Stockholm Syndrome, she also is afraid to admit latent feelings for him that she had for him before.  I believe he represents an order and structure she has never had before.

 

Thanks again for the review!

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: May 12 2020
Title: Chapter 13: Abby meets the ladies and has dinner...

Absolutely enjoyed the addtional chapters. We are really getting to see what Eli and the other townspeople are about! I can't wait for this tea date with what seems to be a the most notorious female elder. LOL!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I HAVE to give you credit for helping me out with your great suggestions.  I won't be able to incorporate them all but you have helped make my weird vision a little more clear!

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: July 14 2020
Title: Chapter 16: Abby takes a walk...(pt.1)

Hmmmmm..what is going on with this dream? Also, the Governor and his family are a hot mess! I wonder if Abby and Eli will have any more run ins with them? Ohhh...I can see them being potential villans for the upcoming stories about the men of this mountain, mainly being Eli's posse. I have sooo many ideas! I wish I was a writer! I can't wait to read more. Great job! 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for you review!  The Governor is definitely a villian just not in the most obvious way outside of him being a creep.  

I'm debating whether or not to create more stories.  If I do they will be a fraction of the size.  This writing stuff is difficult...lol

Thanks again and stay tuned!

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: November 07 2020
Title: Chapter 17: Abby takes a walk...(pt.2)

I am beyond ecstatic that this story has been updated! I can't wait to continue unfolding what awaits these characters and this mountain town. Please don't keep us waiting! 



Author's Response:

Hey! Thank you so much for your continued support! I am trying to knock out the next chapter soon...

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Date: April 24 2021
Title: Chapter 18: Abby attends a birthday dinner...

I'm so glad this story has been updated! I missed you and it! I loved the birthday party and color me surpised about Elias family history! Get it Marybeth and letting your feelings eek out. I wonder what Vivian has been trying to tell our girl? I can't wait for another update! 



Author's Response:

I missed you too!  So much!  Thank you so much, sis, for your continued support!  I am going to be more regular about posting and I am DETERMINED to finish this story.  Hold on to your butts because we're about to hit the top of the roller coaster!

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 17 2022
Title: Chapter 22: Abby goes to the spa…

So, glad I'm caught up. This world is so intriguing! I love it! I believe that Seraphine is my favorite character! I love her! I can just picture Lynn Whitfield everytime she makes a face! LOL! I believe she will be crucial for when/if Abby decides to make a break for it. I'm invested in these characters, especially the ones that haven't found their 'one' yet. I wonder if in the future you'll create a story about Seraphine? I would be deilghted to read it.  I can't wait to see where this goes! Keep up the amazing work. 



Author's Response:

I don't know how to put emoji's in this text but if I could I would type a paragraph of hearts.  Thank you SOOOO much!  I love reading and responding to these reviews and knowing that you and few other ladies are enjoying this weird-ass story of mine.  Seriously, you made my week with this comment. 

Seraphine is one of my favorites as well and you already know that she will be an influence on Abby.  Unfortunately, I don't have an idea for Seraphine yet as I have a few other things in the works, but you mentioning it has wheels turning in my head...he he he...

Brown_Mocha, thank you so much for your continued reading!  I have been busy with work and school but I'm cranking away at the next chapter.

Stay safe out there, my dear! 

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Date: September 05 2022
Set It Free by yhh
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 8]
Summary:

A woman makes a choice that alters her life and the lives of those around her forever.



Table of Contents
Categories: Primetime Television
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 4247
Read Count: 486
Published: June 08 2020
Updated: June 08 2020

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Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wooooow....this was a great beginning! It has the potential to be extremely messy and I'm here for it!!!!!! I know that it says this story is complete, but I would love for it to continue. 



Author's Response:

Glad to see you enjoyed the story so much you would like it to continue.  I hadn't thought of that.  We'll see.  I have lots of stories I haven't gotten to yet, so I might get to those first.  Thanks for reading and commenting.

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: June 12 2020
Of Tales and Sorrow: The Curse by DarkandLovely
Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 9]
Summary:

All he had to do was keep the agreement. Enduring life without her was hell enough but one more lifetime and she'd finally be his for good. 

 

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Mystery, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 15
Completed:Yes
Word count: 31744
Read Count: 11795
Published: July 16 2020
Updated: August 07 2021

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Title: Chapter 1: foreward

Giiiiiiirl! Where is part 2 of this lovely story?

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed starstarstarstar
Date: January 20 2023
Forget Me Not by K Carr
Rated: Members ONLY: 17 and Older
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[Reviews - 77]
Summary:

New story



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 50846
Read Count: 3786
Published: October 17 2020
Updated: November 21 2020

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Title: Forget Me Not

Holy hell this story is good!! I can't wait to read about what happens next!!!! Shoot and I guess Jared won't even have to grovel for forgiveness since he has amnesia. Dang...Willow is going to see what she's truly made of during this season of her life. I too am curious about what's up with the dynamics between the parents. Also, I found it quite funny that Jared does not find her attractive...just some dark humor that I love. Please keep going. 

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: October 28 2020
Title: Forget Me Not

Man....this woman's journey is painful. I'm cringing the whole way with her. My anxiety! She needs to see a professional as well. All those bottled up emotions can't be good for the baby or her psyche. 

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: November 11 2020
Title: Forget Me Not

Giiiiiiiirrrrllll! Who in the world did you marry!?!? I love this story! Dang when he gets his memory back, where are they going to go from there? Or if he never gets his memory back, I wonder if they'll have to fall in love all over again. That option doesn't look possible at this point. Some serious bridges will have to be mended either way. I cannot wait for another update! 

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed
Date: November 30 2020

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