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[Reviews - 315]
Summary:

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Taylor Mooreland has more than her share of problems. Her mother's an irresponsible dreamer who's more interested in floating from audition to audition than she is in paying her bills. So, Taylor's got to keep the ship afloat, taking care of her little brother and working to help pay the bills while she's going to school. And if life wasn't difficult enough, now she's gotten herself into quite the mess with a guy who thinks she's a man.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction, Miscellaneous
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:Yes
Word count: 48727
Read Count: 129520
Published: January 15 2009
Updated: June 09 2013


Title: Chapter 1: One

please update. i keep reading the last chapter over and over again because i want more! its so good, dont leave us hangin for long. please and thank you :)

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 20 2011

Title: Chapter 1: One

i think its really interesting how Chris is catching feelings for Taylor when he thinks shes a guy. to me, that just shows that he is falling for her on a deeper level than just looks (considering she supposedly has a penis and all). its everything about her thats got him geeked. i know its messed up because hes all confused and questioning his sexuality, but i think its so cute that they have such a connection that he just cant help but be drawn to her. the suspense between them is great, you cant rush these things, it only adds to the dynamics of the story line.

awesome work, even if you are being slightly jerky for taking so long. ch 11 is such a horrible cliff hanger, im dyin here man -__-

but im still a fan, so no worries 

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 21 2011

Title: Chapter 12: Twelve

FINALLY!! so glad you updated, cant wait for the next chapter. im curious as to how chris will react if something happens btwn them while he still thinks taylor is a guy...

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: July 29 2012

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 359]
Summary:

  

 

Lila James knows that her friendship with seventeen year old Chase Almeida is extremely inappropriate, but she still isn't prepared when his older brother Jack decides to tell her just how inappropriate it actually is-- inadvertently igniting a fire that had been burning quietly inside of them for years.

*****Lila's Thunder has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 670
Read Count: 65028
Published: October 07 2011
Updated: September 09 2014


Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

this story is just...so...good......

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 18 2012

Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

"No, I get it. That's fine. Chase will be there to whisper sweet nothings in your ear and I'll be there to fuck them all away when they turn you on. Everybody knows their place now.".........

That one line sums up the entire concept of twitsed emotions in this story. I LOVE IT!!!! I know Chase is young and all, but his boyish charm mixed with his filthy mouth is extremeeeeely sexy. Jack's manly, dominant character is sexy as well, but I feel like since Chase is young, he may just be more passionate and sensual in his acts, while Jack is more forceful and hard. The caveman thing was a turn on though, haha. My heart goes out to Chase, his feelings must be shreaded to scraps now.  I hope Lia finds a way to still have a deep connection with him, and in the event they dont end up together, be able to help Chase get closure with his feelings so he can move forward in his life, and still be close.

Lila is in a tough spot, people may not realize that. Having a deep realtionship with someone for an exteded amout of time doesnt just evaporate in the blink of an eye. She is not trying to lead Jack and Chase on. She is not purposefuly playing with emotions, but she does love them both (if supposedly not the same way. Personally, I think she does have feelings for Chase, even if they are slight). So how is she suppose to apease them both, without hurting either's feelings, andddd guide them into brotherly love? Like I said, a TOUGH spot

Now, Voices, I would just like to comend you on your exsquisite writing. You are truly gifted, please continue this story. Kodoes to the smexy scenes and the strong, electric diologue. Smoothe transitions and proper grammar really can make or break a story, and you have done an excelant job. Thank you for sharing your talent with all us readers out there. Im a HUGE fan :D

i may have spelled some stuff wrong...so...my bad...but, Happy Writing!!

 

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: March 18 2012

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay.I dont like this Ashley chick. fck her. Chase hates Jack because he blaims Jack for their parents' death, beacuse he knowingly gave them keys to drive while they were extremly drunk, andddd because he is with Lila. 

Yes, Chase may be acting immature, but you have to look at it from his perspective. I am by no means saying that he is not over reacting, beacuse yes, he could be handling this differently. But, Chase has been close with Lila for a long time, in love with her, and to watch her with his brother all of a sudden is going to sting. Anddd being accused of spying on them when he clearly didnt do it, seeing pictures of them in the throes of passion is going to hurt. Ashley is a slutty, easy, distraction, so leaving for 3 days is exterme, but being naive results in rashness. 

Lila has good intentions for stepping out of both lives, but unfortunatly, that does not guarantee that Jack and Chase will mend their relationship. Not after getting into a physical scuffle, and Ashley putting poision in Chase ear. Fck her for threating Lila. smh

Alot of emotions and rash behavior in this chapter. They all need to take a deep breath, step back, and talk without screaming and causing bodily harm

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Date: March 24 2012

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OMG if you dont write another chapter like....now....im gonna seriously cry. its such a awesome story, and i am in Jack and Lila's corner for them to be together. they are so good for each other(from what i can tell from 5 chapters) and the chemistry between them is electric. in the office, Jack was trying not to sucumb to his yearning for Lila, but she did provoke him. i just want the people who may think that Jack is an inconsiderate, selfish, jerk face see that he does have some good in him

but back to you. lets be cute and add more chapters, yes? that is an awful cliff hanger after the sexy time in Jack's car (which was sizzling bee tee dubbs). so please, for the fans, help us out :D

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Date: December 22 2011

Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

First -  Voices,  thank you so very much for this update (loved it), and cant wait for the next chapter :) Also, please dont leave us hangin too long with Stereo...

Next -  Just a few points : If Jack really is an obsessive stalker like that, how in the world does he do his job if hes following Lila and Chase around? And, shouldnt he have known where Lila was headed if he was supposedly watching her every move, not surprised that she booked a flight to Cambridge? So what, he has hidden cameras in his and Lila's separate apartments that tapes them when they are together? But what about the pics from when they are on outings, its impossible for him to take pics of both of them and have her completely unaware while shes right there -__- Unless I am missing something, logically at least, it CANT be him, but I guess we shall find out.

Last - In my opinion, Chase is still sexier than Jack. I think its his boyish charm topped with the random bouts of extereme dominance/passion 

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Date: August 07 2012

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 265]
Summary:

Welcome to the city of Baltimore, MD and into the life of Devyn McKnight. Jewelry designer and entrepreneur, Devyn McKnight, thought she was secure in the shell she built around her life, made of family, friends and her jewelry business but an unexpected encounter challenges all that she is and all that she believes she wants to be.  

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content
Series: Journey
Chapters: 32
Completed:Yes
Word count: 91963
Read Count: 104070
Published: December 11 2011
Updated: January 07 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Cast Pics

im going to need you to update this. like today. its so good, im dying here. awesome writing style, i love it :)

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: December 20 2011

Title: Chapter 1: Cast Pics

im going to need you to update this. like today. its so good, im dying here. awesome writing style, i love it :)

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: December 20 2011

Title: Chapter 1: Cast Pics

im going to need you to update this. like today. its so good, im dying here. awesome writing style, i love it :)

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Date: December 20 2011

Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 12

YES! Now those two can finally try to clear up this mess of miscommunication! At least, I hope they can. I feel like Devyn is going to ignore all of Jason's attempmts to explain, or somthing is going to happen where neither can get their point across and Devyn still wont know that Erin is Chris' fiance, not Jason's.

Great chapter, i Love this story, you are an excellent writer. 

Thanks for sharing, cant wait for the next one :)

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Date: May 01 2012

Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 16

now, why would you do that to us!? ending the chapter like that smh

i love this story and im so excited that Devyn has FINALLY come to terms with her attraction to Jason. now they can take this thing to the next level (as long as Dev doesnt freak out and get cold feet as usual). 

i really enjoy the way you capture the intense chemistry they have without making it overly dramatic and cliche. KWA, thank you for sharing your talent :)

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: August 06 2012

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 66]
Summary:

All is fair in love and war?

That's the way the story goes until Nita Floyd's promotion is handed to the son of her firm's managing partner. Fifteen years on the job, two failed marriages, and a son and daughter who hate her more than life itself, what's Nita's next move. How far will she go to right the wrong especially when her rival re-acquaints her with a little thing called fun.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 11731
Read Count: 47970
Published: December 12 2011
Updated: March 05 2012


Title: Chapter 1: Your Cast...

Nita is such a meany.....i like Russ, poor thing :/ and i wonder why his car was still there at 5am...

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: January 19 2012

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 615]
Summary:

 

When rockstar Adam Brand makes a racist remark during a drunken magazine interview, it becomes an international headline.  Within hours his PR Agent concocts the perfect plan to revive his rapidly sinking career before it’s too late, but will Adam be able to pull it off?

 

**** STEREO has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 922
Read Count: 90694
Published: March 24 2012
Updated: August 30 2014


Title: Chapter 3: "Remember that this isn’t real. It’s just business, Adam.”

I really love how this story is going to be more than the 'lusty instant atttraction' bit. From what I see, I think that their feelings are going to get deeper over time and I cant wait!

Meanwhile, even if Janelle is only trying to look out for her client, the hours in the darkness deal is way creepy.

Thank you for being such a wonderful writer with a nice developmnt plot. Anxiously waiting your next update, I LOVED it, as always :D

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 29 2012

Title: Chapter 1: "My dick is sort of like a white supremacist."

I really like this, seems like there is going to be alot of humor. I cant wait to read the next chapter! Thanks for sharing :)

Btw.... I dont get some of these comments either.  I am an all black woman myself, and im a size 5. I know that black women have a tendency to be a lil thick, but criticizing that Adam's love intrest wont be a "real" black women beacuse she will be skinny is very biased. Take a look around. All women of all ethnicities come in different shapes and sizes -_-

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: March 27 2012

Title: Chapter 2: “I need to know how the hell you manage to make it down any fashion runway alive."

Haha, Shaun and Adam are so funny! Their whole interactions with each other are so adoreable. And Shaun is just the cutest thing :) I love her personality, its just like mine (death to ALL heels and dresseally though?

Ew... come on son -__-

Great chapter, as always, and I cannot wait for the next one. Thanks.

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 30 2012

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 9]
Summary:

 

Kyra Lawson is a twenty-five year old famous novelist – but nobody knows it. At least, nobody but her best friend, her publicist, and her parents. And that’s the way she wants to keep it. But when her best friend, Nami, wins a pair of backstage tickets to meet one of the hottest singers of today’s current generation and invites her to come along, everything in her life is going to change. Not only will her secret be put in jeopardy, her love life is going to become very, very complicated.

Will she be able to handle mingling with some of the country’s top celebrities? Or will she down spiral like so many before her, unable to move beyond the surface?  



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 7232
Read Count: 5658
Published: April 20 2012
Updated: May 08 2012


Title: Chapter 1: Character Pics

Im so excited to read this story. I really enjoy your writing style, and it looks like us readers are going to get alot of laughs out of these characters. They are so funny! Nicely done :)

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: April 20 2012

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Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 257]
Summary:

make it nasty

 

Emery Johnson has been crushing on her older brothers best friend for years, too bad in his eyes, she will only ever be recognized as 'Darrell's sister'. Ready to change that, Emery enlists the help of a single book to snare her dream man, but along the way someone else steps into the picture, shaking up the feelings that Emery thought were tightly secured and forever stable.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 116446
Read Count: 147902
Published: June 08 2012
Updated: September 08 2013


Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I LOVE this story. I commend you on makeing a romance between a bunch of high schoolers so hot but still innocent in a way. I hate those stories/shows where the characters are screwing around like 25yr olds when they're only like 16 -__- they are so annoying and unrealistic (in my opinion), but this story is awesomeee.

I LOVE Logan and his sexy coy playboy self. Hes so cute.

The background thing (if im correct, in the beginning of the story Emery says how her phone has a flower background) and Darrell saying Logan broke his phone a month ago, the fact that they have the same numbers in each phone and 'Jimmy' saying they go to the same school, all makes me think 'Jimmy" is Logan. The intereactions between Logan/Emery and Jimmy/Emery are similar as well. My only thing is if it is, how in the world has she not recognized his voice when they talk on the phone lol? 

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: September 11 2012

Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

Definitely option B. You are too good of a writer to rush through this story. Character and plot development are the core to an interesting story, and so far you have both. Part 1 mostly focused on Emery, so its only natural that part 2 will give us readers some insight on exactly who Logan Isley is (proving or disproving his worth). Personally, I like Logan. I also think some readers forgot that these are high school students with family problems we're dealing with here. Of course there's going to be some naivety, confusion and angst involved (not saying all teens are like that lol)

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed
Date: December 05 2012

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.