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Crossing the Finish Line by wisedec4u
Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 415]
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When the lines are drawn, will you risk your life to cross them for love?

In the Summer of 1988, tragedy hits home for Charlene Jacobson and her father when her little brother is killed playing a game of basketball in their Detroit housing projects.  She soon finds herself living in the small rural town of Millersville, Georgia, with her estranged grandmother. Millersville is a place where time stands still and the racial divide is as prevalent as the 1950s.  Secrets, lies, and betrayal lurk in every corner. Yet, through it all she finds solace in the arms of Ryan Quinn, a white senior track star and the son of the town Sherriff.  

Will their love cross the finish line?  

EDIT:  Crossing the Finish line has been removed from this site and a revised version with added new content has been published on Amazon Kindle Vella (as of November 2022) under the penname, Shelly B Williams. To those of you who have left reviews, added me to your Favorite Authors and Story Alerts, and helped to make CTFL one of the Top Ten Most Favorited Stories on Valent Chamber, I trully appreciate all the support you have shown me over the years. I hope you will continue to support me as I begin the next phase of my journey as a published author. I couldn't  have done this without you. 

Much Love!

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Challenges: Deep, dark, and mysterious
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 5758
Read Count: 214443
Published: November 07 2010
Updated: January 09 2014

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Title: Crossing the Finish Line

Before Sheriff Quinn even entered the scene, I knew he was the father. Sheriff Quinn never stuck me as racist. Now, hopefully I am wrong, but I'm thinking that Quinn was involved with Vivian and possibly her father. I don't think he is, but perhaps Junior does and moved them away because Quinn didn't want to be open about his Vivian's relationship thus hurting Vivian--same as with Mia. So, Junior made Vivian and Charlene his responsibility. Quinn has a thing for black women, but married his wife because it was safer. He probably loves her in his own way, but he is not in love with her. Quinn probably asked Charlene all of those questions because he suspected that he could be the father. I don't know--just speculation, but I really believed that he was involved with Vivian, which is why her parents lied about what happened.

 Reviewer: 2shy Signed
Date: December 04 2011
Title: Crossing the Finish Line

Is Chad going to get Aids from Alex?



Author's Response:

SMH @ 2shy.  LOL - No he won't get Aids from Alex.

 Reviewer: 2shy Signed
Date: November 01 2012
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Make It Nasty by awardedemmy
Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 257]
Summary:

make it nasty

 

Emery Johnson has been crushing on her older brothers best friend for years, too bad in his eyes, she will only ever be recognized as 'Darrell's sister'. Ready to change that, Emery enlists the help of a single book to snare her dream man, but along the way someone else steps into the picture, shaking up the feelings that Emery thought were tightly secured and forever stable.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 116446
Read Count: 148573
Published: June 08 2012
Updated: September 08 2013

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Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Well, beyond this reviewer's insults, did they give you any constructive criticism? What's the point of telling someone their story is this or that without telling them how they can imporve. Perhaps this story does have it's unbelievable moments, but they are far and few and, personally, I have no problems with them. I really enjoy and look forward to your story. Honestly speaking, I can be a "harsh" critic for online stories, but I don't have a problem with yours. Actually, there are plenty of stories out there that is way more deserving of that criticism than you are.

Also, Emery and Logan is where it's at. ;-)



Author's Response:

No, I got absolutely nothing to indicate what exactly the reader thought was wrong, and it was anonymous so I couldn't ask. Thank you for reviewing. :) 

 Reviewer: 2shy Signed
Date: July 11 2012

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.