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[Reviews - 173]
Summary:

As Joss and Eshan prepare to wed, will the relationship survive long enough to see "for better" when their families become their "for worse"?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 10
Completed:Yes
Word count: 45613
Read Count: 29760
Published: December 20 2013
Updated: July 09 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I understand the mother's desire for the best for her son, but to judge before knowing is not acceptable.  She has blinders on regarding faith.  I would question how much she is aware of Christianity because no one is allowed to judge someone, only God has that right.  God is also forgiving when one recognizing one's sins, so she is being honest and truth to her faith.  She was raised appropriately as  her son has bucked against "tradition", can he be tarnished with the same breath.  Let's be real, she had no intentions of accepting her.  That was evidenced by her demeanor and lack of looking at her.  Please let Eshan and Josie show her the power of LOVE despite differences and religious beliefs.  As I once heard someone say " culture gets in the way of relationships"



Author's Response:

You are right.  Mr. Kourosh has a poor understanding of Joss and her faith.  But unfortunately, she's not open to getting to know her.  I think cultural diversity in a relationship is a beautiful, enriching thing.  It's when dogma and notions of cultural superiority rear their ugly head that the problems come in.  We'll see if that's Joss and Eshan's downfall.  Thanks for reading and commenting, Lajack! 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: December 20 2013

Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Aww, I had tears in my eyes.  That is the kind of love I want in my life.  Are you sure we can't order an Eshan at all?  Just the way you write of their love for one another is beautiful.  Even as I type this and reflect on their journey so far, I can't help but feel emotional just like Pearl.  Is it bad to feel Happy that Mr. Kuroush is giving the Mrs. the silent treatment.  Pretty much he did not honor his word and decision regarding Eshan's choice in a bride.  She for the most part made her personal hatred a public affront to his choice for his son and I know that cannot be accepted based upon everything Eshan and Joss has gone thru.  If I could be a fly on the wall of their home tonight *smiles evilly*.  So by those chapter end notes, do we have another story ahead of us with Eshan and Joss staring.  I swear I could read about their whole life without any reservations.  Please, please, please, begging here if you didn't notice, another story.    I must admit, I swear I read better stories on this site than what I pay for.  God given talent, only wish I had.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for the awesome review, Lajack!  You're absolutely right about Mr. & Mrs. Kourosh.  Not only did she publicly embarrass him and Eshan and threaten to divorce him, she made a spectacle of herself at the reception of a wedding she couldn't even be bothered to attend and doesn't seem at all that sincere in her acceptance of the marriage.  It seems she found herself the odd man out and only did what was necessary to get back in her husband's good graces.  We'll see how well that works out for them all.

I'm not sure when and in what form, but I have every intention of continuing to write about Eshan and Joss.  I'm so glad you've enjoyed their story, and thanks for reading and reviewing.

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Date: July 10 2014

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Okay, Eshan has some explaining to do because no matter how innocent you do not leave your fiancée for quiet time with the would be spouse at your engagement party.  Now when Joss mentioned earlier about praying to God while he performed his prayers so they could kind of sync their religious backgrounds together he was all smiles and appreciation.  Now because of one conversation from a mother in law and you walk off away from her see this other woman.  What would you do if she was with another man in seclusion having an intimate conversation.  She has respected all of his traditions, has had her mother respect his traditions and we know hoe Pearl can be.  She is surrounded on all fronts by his people.  And this is the thanks that I get.  You wait until we leave this party and get in the car.  I would see if he says anything first then I would let him have it.  I was prepared to let you go and YOU came back into my life, proposing to me.  I have not performed any Christian wedding or engagement rituals, tying myself into knots to please you and your family.  At this point bish please, you will have to acknowledge my efforts and appease me.  I am second guessing marrying you for under appreciation.  Unless I missed it, I don't recall him ever saying, Joss I appreciate so much what you have done for me and my family.  Heck she is learning 2 different languages so she is able to communicate with his family.  I am so ticked off that he left her with walking thru these landmines.  She need her momma to set them straight including Esha because seeming like he is taking her efforts for granted.  Sorry for the rant but had to get that out.  Want to see how the rest of this evening plays out.



Author's Response:

Don't apologize for the rant.  It was thoroughly entertaining and brought up a lot of good points.  I wish that I could respond to them all, but I don't want to risk dropping spoilers that might ruin the chapter five reading experience.  I will say that with this being written in Joss's first person perspective, there are things going on that she doesn't have knowledge of yet, and others she might never know.  I look forward to reading your comments after next chapter to see how and if your feelings change once some things are revealed.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, Lajack!

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Date: June 18 2014

Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Okay, I am not as heated as I was last chapter and more so because of the ending.  I still don't think meeting with her at the engagement party was appropriate.  He could have explained to Joss the situation and spoke with the young lady at her parents home with her mom or close friend present.  You CAN follow the rules and absolve your guilt at the same time.  In that specific scenario this is a very rare incidence of Eshan thinking about himself and the fact she confronted him on it I think really made him go home and re-evaluate those actions.  I love her mom and how she was unable to put anything past her.  She was ready to whoop everybody's behind until she found who hurt her child.  Love momma bear.  It was nice to see them communicating about their difference with religion and building a foundation of how to proceed in the future.  This will be what makes their marriage strong.  Don't trust his mother or shady brother at all and if I was Joss I would keep well away from them or never go anywhere without my handy, dandy mace or pepper spray.  I wonder if Nafeesa and these other women truly going to leave Eshan alone or will his mother continue to fan the flames.  

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Date: June 20 2014

Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Oooohhhhh I am at work but had to take a time out and respond or write or you know what I mean about this chapter.  Right now you can call me Florida from good times because I want to scream "damn, damn, damn!!!" At the top of my lungs in dealing with mama Kourosh.  She just took a wonderful day from papa Kourosh and all and turned it into this circus on the eve of her son's wedding.  Little does she know she has lost her children in pursuing this witch hunt or persecution of Joss.  The rest of her family despite the ant of a brother is aware of everything Joss had to endure for her love of Eshan and has proven during all of this that she truly loves Eshan.  His mother cannot get past her religious and ethnic background to provide an unbiased opinion and truly see if she is a benefit or hindrance to Eshan's future.  Now your husband is disappointed in the woman he married.  Not only did you haunt her during the planning of the wedding, you STILL plan to haunt her during her marriage, not giving your son or his wife any peace.  There has to be something in the Quran that will chastise her for this behavior because the only one acting they have lost all sense of right and wrong, religious beliefs is mama Kourosh.  I sooo want to hear what papa Kourosh is going to say.  Plus I want Joss to comfort her mom and PJ's ass needs to grow the hell up.  Part of me believes she said that crap on purpose so it could cause drama in the family.  She is coming off very jealous to me and I am watching her with a side eye.  Just because you throwing your life away doesn't mean you get to crap on my parade.  Can't wait for the next chapter.  Joss also needs to stand up and get a backbone with Mama Kourosh because I don't care how much I love you, someone disrespecting my momma needs her behind handed to them.  "Hold my earring and purse". Kiss on the cheek, " I love you, but I'm about to whoop your Mom's ass for disrespecting my momma and calling me out my name more than once.  Be right back"

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Date: July 02 2014

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

For her hate of Joss to be this entrenched that she will willingly sacrifice her whole family's happiness, there is something else going on.  This is a vendetta against Joss because she has just realized her beloved son loves his (hopefully) soon to be wife more than her.  She forced his hand and knowing how much his family and faith means to him, this is heartbreaking for them both.  She has placed them literally between a rock and hard place.  You would stoop so low to involve innocent children to me is the final straw.  Adults have the right to make their choices and live with the consequences and in all honesty her consequences to these series of actions can't come soon enough to me.  I understand Joss wanting to end this never ending battle or little shop of horros on replay everyday.  I could understand if she wasn't attempting to learn and respect his heritage and culture and faith etc but mama Kourosh is just too much for me.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Lajack!  You've touched on something of real significance in this story.  Eshan is the baby and most favored member of his family who, in the past, has obeyed his parent's wishes at every turn (e.g. abandoning his life for months to look out for a cousin he'd never even met).  Now, he has shown himself a man with desires of his own he seeks to advance, and who has made Joss the one he most favors.  So not only is Mrs. Kourosh "losing" the last of her children and being dethroned as the most important woman, if not person, in Eshan's life, but she's also losing all influence over him.  A better woman would have accepted this as an expected and necessary consequence of her son maturing.  But Mrs. Kourosh has proven time and time again she is not a better woman.  

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Date: July 05 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 52]
Summary:

The death of the Crane patriarch changes the town of Harmony.



Table of Contents
Categories: Daytime Television, Passions
Characters: Eve Russell
Classification: General
Genre: Drama
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 26
Completed:Yes
Word count: 50511
Read Count: 7279
Published: December 20 2013
Updated: April 17 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

well, damn

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: December 20 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 192]
Summary:

Welcome to the city of Baltimore, Maryland and into the life of Elise Roberts. Elise lives the life of a pampered princess. Designer clothes, expensive cars and fancy parties are the center of her world. She is a woman who has everything she ever wanted until she meets Lukas Weiss. Faced for the first time in her life with rejection, Elise hatches a plan designed to heal her wounded pride. A game of seduction and the ultimate rejection. Funny thing, though, about the game of love....it is always unpredictable.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: Journey
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 55134
Read Count: 40858
Published: January 08 2014
Updated: October 16 2016


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

I like that this is uncharted territory for Elise and she doesn't know how to proceed herself.  They keep each other off balance.  I can't wait til his daughter shows up because I think then she will begin to see him as more than a conquest especially as  she is a daddy's girl.  I hope she isn't in any danger though.  May need to hire security for overnight or push the crew to work longer shifts or something to complete this project.  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: February 18 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 11]
Summary:

Niya DeLuca, a jobless twenty-six year old woman is convinced that her dreams of becoming the wife to a wealthy, handsome, powerful man are finally going to coming true.

Sebastian Costa, a wealthy bachelor loves to play games with women, and he always wins. He’s instantly attracted to Niya's beauty and she quickly becomes his new play toy.

But what happens when Sebastian meets the woman identically beautiful but impossible to corrupt?

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 2723
Read Count: 1982
Published: January 11 2014
Updated: January 11 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 The Meeting

Wow, loved it.  I can't wait to read more.  I was concerned that you had stopped writing with all of the comments you were receiving.  Soo glad that you thought to continue.  This will be going to my favorites as I love the premise of the story.  Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Thank you I just really wanted to make the story better so more people can enjoy it! 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 11 2014

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 9]
Summary:

Darlin', darlin', doesn't have a problem Lyin' to herself 'cause her liquor's top shelf It's alarmin', honestly, how charming she can be Fooling everyone, tellin' 'em she's having fun


She says, "You don't wanna be like me Don't wanna see all the things I've seen I'm dyin', I'm dyin'"


She says, "You don't wanna get this way Famous and dumb at an early age Lyin', I'm lyin'"


The boys, the girls, they all like Carmen She gives them butterflies, bats her cartoon eyes She laughs like God, her mind's like a diamond Audio tune lies, she's still shining



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Psychological, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Crackfic, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 2125
Read Count: 5141
Published: January 12 2014
Updated: January 12 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Cast Pics

Wow is all I can say.  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 12 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 301]
Summary:

She got the guy, the fairytale. But when complications of his new life come to light will she be strong enough to keep him?

 

***Please do not post this story to other sites. I post all my stories here with the intention of publication. I thank you all for your attention :)***



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 129
Read Count: 34239
Published: January 18 2014
Updated: March 31 2015


Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Now I am more concerned about how she looks if Griff couldn't feel the curves.  Makes me think she is a lot more skinny than she thinks she is.  I would hope Griff's dad calls him and tells him or Griff see's her in the light of day and realize you can't let these chicks get close to you at all.  She is insecure and being away from her for 1 month or more at a time is not going to help.  He doesn't have to work himself into a grave just yet.  He has plenty of years in the NBA and can still make very good money.  They won't be hurting if he slows down and make sure he reassure her with his presence.  Plus I was a little confused?  He dodging questions about Rose or is he firmly putting this to rest stating I have a fiancee name Roxie?  She needs to take more trips with him and go to more events at his side.  My poor Roxie, she needs some friends with her for a little while.  Some IDGAF chicks from the team who will run roughshod over these snotty bishes. 

 



Author's Response:

Oh! Thanks for pointing out the confusion. It's the second part about him putting the issue to rest. I'll add that bit so it's more clear in revision. This is why I love posting here. You guys help me so much! ^.^

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 27 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I think Griffin's dad is putting a lot more of the pieces together after this than anyone may suspect.  I am beginning to wonder how much weight she has lost.  There is something he see's that I think is giving him pause for concern.  Now Griffin better put the brakes to this #Griffin&Rose trending BS and them paparazzi need their ass handed to them, asking some dumb questions about Rose being jealous, if she is then she need to find her own man.  Blind as a bat, can't even tell that Brody isn't Griffin.  What the heck is Griffin even up to, want to hear what he has to say as well.  Everytime I see you have updated, I have to stop and read.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 23 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

You are spoiling me.  After a long day at work, getting the kids to bed and then doing homework, this was a pleasant surprise.  I'm glad Roxie is taking small steps and doesn't seem to be going overboard.  3x/wk is good for right now and she seems to still eat so I am not concerned with that.  Can't wait til Griffin comes back and see's this new and improved banging body, all for him ;).  His dad is too cute.  Uh oh, Brody is coming.  Woohoo!!  Looking forwards to more updates.

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Date: January 22 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I think he needs an intervention with Grams and Dad coming for a visit and listening to these two slick f*ckers talk because even though Griff is grounded he hasn't dealt with sleaziness this slick.  Adult help is needed ASAP.  

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Date: December 22 2014

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Roxie, you most definitely have to speak to Griffin about all of these feelings but Griffin is also ignoring his gut instinct that things aren't what they seem.  He noticed her smile didn't reach her eyes and he have to begin to see things himself.  He didn't hear/see what TMZ and other news places are trending.   He is aware of how he felt when he found out about that site she had and others were looking and why she did that.  Everywhere she turns she is being hit with subtle jabs about her size and he doesn't realize this. 

Also Griffin, the event that would happen for Roxie to be taken care of is DIVORCE!!  Do you PLAN on doing something that would end in divorce.  I don't need to be taken care of if you don't plan on doing something.  Regardless, without the prenup she gets more not less.  Are you thinking clearly, Griff?  He need to listen to his hustling friends who can spot game when they see it.  Griffin despite his maturity is blinded by his trust in Mark or whatever the heck his name is and that will lead to his downfall with Roxie.  He is placing the issues on other dude's shoulder but he can't do anything without approval from higher up right?

Can't wait to see how this shapes up?  I wonder what is going to happen when his dad arrives, I think that might be the beginning of some wake up calls for both of them.

 



Author's Response:

I LOVE all of this! Griff needs to keep that team of support nearby. Rough waters are defintely ahead! Thanks for your comment. Loved it!

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Date: January 21 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

It has been a great ride and so happy they have learned from their mistakes and willing to put practices in place to prevent it from happening again.

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Date: February 23 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 67]
Summary:

 

What happens when you begin to second guess the gift you gave to someone? Do you ask them for it back? Or perhaps you just take it back? Maybe that gift was fine for then, but holds no value now. Five years later, Teddy considers re-gifting but Tanner is worried that it is the same old tired shit just wrapped up in a shinier package. *Sequel to “The Gift of Goodbye”



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 10569
Read Count: 7612
Published: January 23 2014
Updated: February 19 2015


Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Yay!!! It's back and congrats on the beauties you now have.  I can't wait for more chapters and see how Teddy is about to handle this.  Teddy is a natural predator and territorial so now that he has seen her, touched her and know she still creates that buzz inside of him, all bets are off.  Now my question is will he place Tanner as a mistress or get rid of Angela and go after his girl.  He can't expect Tanner to be the side chick.  Also Tanner is gun-shy with him after he broke her heart and how he went about doing it so our boy will have to truly step his game up.  Sex alone I don't think is going to do it.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 17 2015

Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Sounds like neither one is over the other and settled in their current relationships because it is safe unlike their relationship and just because someone is safe doesn't make them the ONE for you.  If he has matured and gotten some help why can't they try again, outside of the significant others but I feel if they are around each other that heat will erupt again and feelings will really re-emerge.  They are both more stable and successful and aware of themselves.  That is a good start.  I look forward to seeing if they find their way back to each other and those great 6 months before his issues emerged.



Author's Response:

Me too lajack1! Me too!

Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 25 2014

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Oh shoot.  That wasn't the first time huh.  Sorry lackluster sex life is a no go.  I can't be tied down to no orgasms for life, no matter how NICE, GENTLEMANLY you are.  You need a sex ed class or something.  So I guess Trent is on the Angela bandwagon.  Curious how everyone's family had an opinion.  Does Trent not realize it was Teddy's abusive ways that destroyed the relationship and wasn't on Tanner.  Does he think if he gets back with Tanner he will return to his old ways?  That is his choice on how he acts.  My thing is once he got himself together why didn't he look for her?  Why be possessive now when she is back.  I think I would like them to develop a friendship first and see if their communication has improved.  That could be the test if a relationship would work.  Either way she needs to find someone who can ring them bells as well as be good to her and treat her right.  Why can't she have it all.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 29 2014

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 8]
Summary:

Who doesn't want to be wanted



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 4460
Read Count: 5755
Published: January 30 2014
Updated: April 23 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Once you have written more and I can understand who she is, why she must relax and get an overall feel for the story I can provide a better review but you do have me intrigued with the guy on the elevator and her next meeting with him.  If nothing else, he knows what floor she stays on.



Author's Response:

Lajack1 thanks for that I won't disappoint 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 31 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 10]
Summary:

 

He knew the day would come, he just didnt know it would be so soon 



Table of Contents
Categories: Music, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Family
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: Serendipity
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 741
Read Count: 1377
Published: January 30 2014
Updated: January 30 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was such a cute and touching story.  Wonderful the understanding the soon to be husband had in regards to her fathers feeling.  That will go a long way to the father truly loving him.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 31 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 35]
Summary:

Two people falling in love by unexpcted circumstances. Showing their love through one of their eyes.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:Yes
Word count: 9683
Read Count: 8311
Published: February 06 2014
Updated: June 24 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I would suggest keep going.  Why is he fighting for his life, is there a chance for him?  More reflections while she waits.  How old are they now?  Loved this one chapter.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 06 2014

Title: Chapter 6: Epilogue

I am crying right now, like literally need to blow my nose and everything.  It was a wonderful story and one that had to come to that end.  I love their relationship and it makes me want to have one just like that.  I appreciate you sharing it with us.  It was sad, uplifting, enjoyable all into one.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 24 2014

Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 10]
Summary:

 

Underneath

Rumors on top of rumors, all built on a crumbling foundation of lies. Vanessa Freeman has heard a lot about Christian DeMount, but tonight she’ll know the truth. What is underneath?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Un-betaed
Challenges: 3 Random Things
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 4488
Read Count: 3363
Published: February 15 2014
Updated: February 15 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Underneath

Awww, that was so sweet at the end.  I would love to read some more about them.  These one-shots are like trailers, makes you want to watch the whole movie.  More please.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: February 15 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 16]
Summary:

He's tall. He's handsome. He's funny and charming and sweet. He's everything that you could want in a man. But, he has a sweet tooth... and it might just be for you.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Horror, Suspense
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:Yes
Word count: 13191
Read Count: 5350
Published: February 19 2014
Updated: March 22 2014


Title: Chapter 3: The Kill

Damn, is all I can say.  She is going to rot in prison and maybe get the death penalty because she loved him.  She won't even raise her baby.  He needs to be tortured with guilt.  Just damn, damn, damn

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: March 22 2014

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