Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 16 FULL
First, I don't find Valerie annoying. She is real. Something lacking from most of the main female characters in IR fiction. She is an insecure woman with a host of issues going back to her childhood. A man is not going to magically erase all of that, nor would having weight loss surgery. Henry can be with her, he can love her, take care of her, but VALERIE will have to do this on her own. I appreciate your staying true to the character. Character driven storylines are tricky, most authors fail because they lose the narative, the voice of their creation.
Second, I really admire that you take time between updates, which means you are taking the time to tell your story. You can see every thought in the words. As a reader, I would love to see frequent updates, but I prefer quality over quantity.
I really enjoy the direction of this story. Thank you for sharing.
Author's Response: thank you so much! your comment made my day! and thank you for understanding the space between updates. yes, a man will not flush away insecurities at the drop of a hat. that was kind of my approach, i was afraid no one would notice. thank you so much.
Reviewer: PaperRoses Signed
Date: December 31 2013