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[Reviews - 415]
Summary:

 

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* ON THE CHAMBER'S TOP TEN MOST FAVORITE STORIES LIST

& NOW KINDLE VELLAS TOP 250 FAVORITES LIST *

FIVE STARS ON AMAZON

When the lines are drawn, will you risk your life to cross them for love?

In the Summer of 1988, tragedy hits home for Charlene Jacobson and her father when her little brother is killed playing a game of basketball in their Detroit housing projects.  She soon finds herself living in the small rural town of Millersville, Georgia, with her estranged grandmother. Millersville is a place where time stands still and the racial divide is as prevalent as the 1950s.  Secrets, lies, and betrayal lurk in every corner. Yet, through it all she finds solace in the arms of Ryan Quinn, a white senior track star and the son of the town Sherriff.  

Will their love cross the finish line?  

EDIT:  Crossing the Finish line has been removed from this site and a revised version with added new content has been published on Amazon Kindle Vella (as of November 2022) under the penname, Shelly B Williams. To those of you who have left reviews, added me to your Favorite Authors and Story Alerts, and helped to make CTFL one of the Top Ten Most Favorited Stories on Valent Chamber, I trully appreciate all the support you have shown me over the years. I hope you will continue to support me as I begin the next phase of my journey as a published author. I couldn't  have done this without you. 

Much Love!

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Challenges: Deep, dark, and mysterious
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 5758
Read Count: 214644
Published: November 07 2010
Updated: January 09 2014


Title: Crossing the Finish Line

Thanks for the update. It's been a long time. I am glad to meet those characters again.And the writing is very good.

I'm not too surprised about Wes and Christi. If I remember well, there was always some underlying sexual tension between those two. Wes sure broke the bro code, and he loose major cool point with this. And considering how Christi is such a mean and not very nice girl, I don't think it was worth it. But Ryan should get over it : he needs his friend more now than ever and his friendship sould be stronger than his male ego.

About Charlene's parent, I suspect Ryan's dad must have pursued Charlene's mother and they may even have fallen in love but being the coward that he was Ryan's parent wouldn't come public and so Charlene's mother turned to Charlene's father asking for help. I just hope there is no hint of Charlene and Ryan maybe  being related. That would just be UGH! I also hope that whatever Charlene finds out, she tells Ryan. She should keep to their promise to not having secrets between them. It just leads to unnecessary drama.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 24 2013

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[Reviews - 419]
Summary:

Farewell

 

She didn't choose this Life. He chose It for her. And for that, he must pay the Ultimate Price.

Exceedingly Dope Banner by my homeskillet Valhalla.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Horror, Mystery, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 32
Completed:No
Word count: 92749
Read Count: 99692
Published: January 24 2011
Updated: March 20 2014


Title: Chapter 31: Grin of the Trickster

Glad you're back! Thanks for the new chapter. I don't care much about anyone else but Bowie, her brother, best friend and Vladmir!!! I mean all those superbeings are ok, I guess. But i think I am only here for Bowie, whatetevr the fuck she is, and Vladmir. So glad he's coming to get his queen back. I so want them to be together, what a powerful couple they would make. I guess vladmir is supposed to be the big bad wolf, but I want those two together. Bad. Can't wait for the next chapter, and hopefully their reunion!

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 01 2013

Rated: Members ONLY: 17 and Older
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[Reviews - 478]
Summary:

TLAL 

It happened one night. No biggie. Right?

Until Moliere Baker realizes her one night with Simon Ford has repercussions that affect not only them and those they care about, but a brand new life as well . . .

Now there's a wedding approaching and time to come clean is running out. Is there enough love between two friends to last a lifetime once the secret's out?

Gorgeous Banner by Valhalla



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Challenges: Spring Baby-Fic Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 17
Completed:No
Word count: 50743
Read Count: 78804
Published: March 27 2011
Updated: May 01 2016


Title: Chapter 13: Man Eater

I get Cooper being in love with Molière, even though I found it a bit annoying...At leats, I know and care about Cooper. But adding that doctor too feeling insta-attraction" is really too much. I don't see the point except that it adds drama to an already drama filled situation. I detracts from the main plots and characters we actualy care about (aunt Mae and Cooper). It's a bit disappointing.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: May 03 2016

Title: Chapter 16: Another Man's Treasure

This doctor situation is just getting more and more ridiculous! Like, seriously, WHAT is the point???? URGH !



Author's Response:

welp, prepare to be more disappointed. i understand what you're saying, but this is my project and i'm looking to have a little fun with it. i'm sorry it doesn't fulfill your desires or some contemporary literary requirements or rules, but, again, i'm the author, this is my project, this is what i'm writing FOR FREE ON A FREE WEBSITE. i find nothing wrong with Moliere being desired by multiple men at the same time because, hey, it happens. and frankly, that's how i want it to happen in this version of this story. but thanks for the feedback!

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed
Date: May 03 2016

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 615]
Summary:

 

When rockstar Adam Brand makes a racist remark during a drunken magazine interview, it becomes an international headline.  Within hours his PR Agent concocts the perfect plan to revive his rapidly sinking career before it’s too late, but will Adam be able to pull it off?

 

**** STEREO has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 922
Read Count: 90699
Published: March 24 2012
Updated: August 30 2014


Title: Chapter 14: 'How to Land a Rockstar in Thirty Days'

Thanks for updating, bu I got to say I am NOT rooting for Shaun AT ALL. No matter how fucked up her reasoning is, Celia at least owned her shit. And she is the one that ultimately saved the day by signing Mickey Mouse. So Shaun has no moral gigh ground. Also it only makes her look even more pathetic. She has been so passive, without any sense of self, of agance. The only moment she acted when she choose to got into that mess on her own (miss me with the "blame the veil Celia" busllshit). By the end she couldn't even get out of it on her own. Celia saved her ass. UGH! She is just annoying and I wish she would go just away. I would so love for Adam NOT to call her and move on. I think it won't turn out this way, and womehow, something will happen to make them get back together bla bla bla, but I will so not cheer about that...

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: March 10 2014

Title: Chapter 13: Rule #10: No More Games

Thanks for the new chapter, but this stalling thing is getting beyond annoying. The fact that Shaun is still listening to Celia is just beyond me. How can she be so STUPID? It is not cute, it is horribly annoying. At this point I don't even dislike Celia anymore. She may be a mean girl and play stupid "games", but at least she own her shit and she is coherent in her hating. And she had a point about why Shaun had the article finished ready to be sent. And she let her computer wide open ! I mean, C'MON girl!

I think I dislike Shaun more than Celia now. She should have call Adam the next morning after her stupid run into Veronica at the magazine office (yet another very stupid idea), to tell him the true. She should have immediatly sent an email to Jackson telling him she won't do anything. And why would she have a phone conversation with him in the bathroom of the clud where Adam is having his party? No really. I understand that this writing tactic was meant to make the "reveal" more dramatic, but to me, it only made me annoyed and angry against Shaun. She is too stupid for words and I just hope Adam dump her stupid ass and move on with his life.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: September 27 2013

Title: Chapter 12: “I knew there was something off about you."

Thanks for the update. This is a nice story, but quite unnecessarily frustrating.

Shaun started an interesting character, now she is just totally annoying. I get that she has serious confidence issues, but I can't believe she is still acting so stupid and dumb. Seriously, how old is that girl? 1st, why is she still listening to that Celia girl to keep that stupid seduction "game"?And how come she is ready to have sex with Adam, after explaining how important her being a virgin was and after realizing that Adam actually care about her, but it never crosses her mind that before taking such a step she should come clean  and tell him the all true? Why go and try to break into the office of the magazine editor in chief at past 11 pm, when she could just call him, AFTER having told Adam the all story, and tell him she will not finish the article but would be willing to write something else?

She is stupidly and unnecessarily making the situation more difficult. UGH!! The 1st thing to do is NOT to stupidly try and erase emails and shit, but to tell Adam the truth. Then she doesn't even have to abandon her writing carreer. She could still write the article on Adam, not behind his back but with his collaboration: if she comes clean, she could offer him the opportunity to publicly address his racial prejudices and white priviledge, and how he is working on it now. Any magazine will be ready to buy such an article, even more "serious" magazine/newspaper than Cosmo. It would also be a great way to not only apologize verbally, but to show him how sorry she is and how she wants to make amend. And for her, it will be a real and deeper empowering process than the superficial body-related ego-boost that the modelling gigs are giving her, by owning her mistakes, standing her ground (against Jackson) and actually being proactive and doing something smart (not like the stupoid break in shit) on her own rather than letting everyone else, from Celia to some random photo shoot's director, boss her around. 

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: September 11 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 113]
Summary:


Nia Jones, an amazing designer at Sohma Graphics, has strong feelings for her boss. She doesn't think they'll ever be reciprocated. In fact, she thinks he hates her. They both realize otherwise when his suave older half-brother is abruptly added to their lives.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 14
Completed:No
Word count: 20126
Read Count: 22677
Published: July 23 2012
Updated: May 26 2014


Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

This story is interesting. Il like Nia : she is fun. But something bother me a little: it feels like Nia's character has no real self motive or will. I don't understand how it is a "progress" for her to accept Yoshi's offer : she is just putting herself into a situation she already know will be a mess. I mean, she know there is a rivalry between the two borthers, and she just agreed to play into that. Also, personal feelings aside, her boss told her he didn't want her to quit, how come she can just up and decide to cut back her hours at her firm and work part time with another? And it isn't a better or high ranking position she'll be in. Either she quit her present firm and accept a better offer from another company, or she stays there and asks for a raise or something.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstar
Date: May 27 2014

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[Reviews - 252]
Summary:

Matt was the love them and leave them type till he met Azalea. She turned the tables on him but not for the reasons he thinks. Will he forgive her when he learns the truth?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:No
Word count: 45561
Read Count: 65817
Published: August 25 2012
Updated: June 02 2014


Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

Thanks so much for the new chapter. Love it. The hot angry sex and then the shower discussion. Love, love, love it ! Cant' wait for next chapter.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar
Date: January 21 2014

Title: My Dearest Matt

Yep, that was hot!! Great writing, despite the errors, here and there. thanks for this new chapter, it's so great to have them back. I am totally for those two to get back to each other, and I really hope things don't turn for worse but better after having crazy hot angry/make up sex for hours this night up until the next morning!

I really love this family, and althought i side-eye the hell out of Z, and I am totally with matt for being even more angered discovering those letters ('cause she totally not bakced away just because of that Poeple cover, but because she was a coward!), I hope they work things out.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar
Date: November 02 2013

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Summary:

Aubrey is living the perfect life or so it seems. With her demanding boyfriend, Vincent and his quick temper, she doesn't know how much more she can take. Things take a turn for the worse when Chase a co-worker steps in . . or maybe a turn for the better?

 

This story contains - Violence, Abuse, Sex and Rape (further into the story)



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 24078
Read Count: 11048
Published: December 20 2012
Updated: October 31 2013


Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Six

Not too bad at all!! Thanks for the new chapter. And thanks which ever great spirit is out there: she left that asshole of an abuser! This relationship was so infuritating. Great work, writer: you totally made me feel so powerless reading about that sweet girl being abused oevr and over again, physically and mentally, and her making excuse and loving him, and being destroyed day after day. The path of recovery will be long and difficult and I really hope Chase is there for her, as a friend first and foremost. The last thing she need is to get into another romantic relationship right now.  She needs to rebuild herself. She needs her best friend, her sister and her father to be there for her. I fear her mother will play's the advocate 'devil and try and make her go mback to that asshole. UGH! Can't wait to read more of this story.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: November 02 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 117]
Summary:

Dr. Tyler Elijah Lenz Solomon Weber is a psychologist who works as the head of Human resources at a law firm. His life seems to be perfect. Not only he has the perfect job but he also is a visiting professor in many Universities for his innovitaive research in developmental psychology. He has a fiancée, Alexandra, who loves him unconditionatly.
However, under the surface lays a man that has been affected by his life experiences and cannot fully trust others. This is his story, and that of Alexandra, and Lucas, the man Tyler fears will take his woman away from him.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Psychological, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 49503
Read Count: 16670
Published: December 26 2012
Updated: February 21 2014


Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 14: Sideways

I just discovered that story, I didn't realize it was about a triangle (which I really hate), before getting sucked into it! So great job, writer ;)! I liked the fact that there was the 3 different points of view. It helped understanding those characters's motivation.

I don't dislike Tyler and don't quite understand why people hated him so much. I thought that he was quite honest about what he felt for Alex from the beginning, aknowledging his issues. Yeah, he made mistakes by breaking with her twice just because he was insecure, and he was being a bit of a coward for not confronting seriously his issues. But I didn't like how Alex's family and friends constantly dissed him, pushing her to be with Lucas and all. It was bad, rude, disrespectful. I mean, it is not like Tyler cheated on her repeteadly or abused her. He sounded like a somehow decent guy, despite his commitment issues (which where quite serious, 1st his mother then his girlfirend). And it looks like they never really did give him a chance, to get to know him, apart for little Andre, who acted with more maturity than all the adults. The only thing that was really, really stupid was that spying on his girlfriend shit. For now, I really hope he is able to seek some professional help, with his rabbi AND a therapist, and not just in order to make up with Alex, but for his own good. Good that he is the one who decided to leave Alex. I hope he stick to it and there won't be any going back together, at least not before he has began to confront his demons.

About Alex, I was really upset reading the first chapter, when she decided to feed on the very insecurities that Tyler had told her repeatedly by 1) going to stay with Lucas 5 minutes after leaving Tyler, and getting back at Tyler by letting herself be photographed with Lucas. That was a very low move on her part. And then acting all innocent like she didn't understand why he was being jealous and accusing her of cheating on him. Really, girl? Also, the fact that she was so oblivious to Lucas' love is juts too hard to believe. For years everybody had been telling her that Lucas was in love with her and she just kept behaving as if it was nonsense. She was in denial. And it was bad 'cause she kept acting all besties with Lucas, telling him she "loved him", which was NOT cool at all. She totally led him on. And her so-called other friends should have told her to stop bullshitting herself and be honest with herself and with Tyler and Lucas. I get that she didn't want to lose his friendship, and I am with her for not agreeing to stop seeing him just 'cause Tyler told her so, but at some point, she should have confronted Lucas: asking him point blank if he was in love with her. But she didn't and that was wrong. So in a sense, Tyler was right: she was emotionally "cheating" on him with Lucas. And I also think that she kept going back with Tyler because it was the easy way: she knew that despite his issues, he did love her, so it was better to go back than to confront Lucas. That is why I hate triangle story: the girl (as it is often the girl who has  2 competing love interest) always comes out of it being selfish and annoying. I am glad that she aknowledged it in the last chapter. I hope she let Tyler go for good. She could hep him, as a friend, to get better, but she has to stop playing with him, especially now that Lucas had told her how he felt. She can't be like "oh my god I don't know what to do, I love them both". Please, not that! That won't be fair, to any of them. After all, seeing how those two guys hate each other, it is not like they would be willing to be in a ménage à trois. So now that she aknowledged her feelings, she should try and have a relationship with Lucas, and stop the unnecessary drama.



Author's Response:

I want to start by saying that I had absolutely loved your review. I was thinking about many of the points that you have raised.

Tyler is not so bad. He has never got over the trauma of being abandoned by his mother. But he will deal with his issues. I can't allow him not to. It just wouldn't be right.

When I was finishing off chapter 14 I was thinking why Alex kept going back to him all the time. After all, why would you put yourself through such heartache and insecurity and at the same time deny your obvious feelings for Lucas. She did it only because Tyler was what she knew, what she was used to. She didn't want to take a chance on Lucas because she thought Tyler was the one and didn't want to see that unless she and Tyler worked proactively to solve their issues together, and him to solve his own as well, everything was only going to deteriotate. I wished she had realised this sooner. I don't know if things between them would have been different if they had acted differently. 

I don't like triangle stories either, however, I ended up writing one and before I realised what was going on it was too late. 

I don't know whether she needs to have a relationship with Lucas as of yet. I don't really see her ready for that, and I don't even know if Lucas is ready to be with her.

Thank you very much for reviewing. I'll post the next chapter in a few minutes. I'd love to know what you think about it.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: September 20 2013

Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 17: Backstreets

Nice surprise, thanks for the new chapter and the update the lives of those three.

I am glad that Tyler has been slowly mving on. I so don't want him to go back with Alex. This ship has sailed, for good. going back would be such a step back IMHO. Also, knowing how her family and "firends" will never accept him, unless they all have a collective "come to Jesus and stop being an asshole" moment, that will always put strains in their relationship. So I really hope he is able to put this part of his love, with all the good and the bad, behind him. I get this is a slow process, but I whish for him to start fresh and going back with Alex fells so "wash rince and repeat"...

Also glad he was able to talk to is mother. Is he seeking some professional help? I think he needs it 'cause this is going to be a long way for him to walk in order to confront his issues : they won't be resolved just like that, it is another step, after the one he took by leaving Alex. He needs his family support, but also the support of someone, outside of family and friends, who could give him a fresh perspective on his live, and won't be emotionally bound to him one way or another.

And then, I also hope he is able to find love again and build an healthy loving and trusting relationship.



Author's Response:

I am so happy for Tyler too. He needs this, and although the path ahead is tough, I am confident he will get to move on at some point, as long as nothing drastic happens on the road.

I don't really want him to go back to Alex, but am still conflicted about this story. I'm exploring all possibilities before closing doors on the future. He might be better off without her and she might be better off without him. 

I think now this is the time for him to seek professional help and actually be serious about it. He's spoken to his mother, which was a huge step, but now that he has done it he should be finally on his way to dealling with his issues. 

You're like a mind-reader. He will get outside support. Just you wait! And this person is going to be awesome. He will develop friendships with someone who had not witnessed all the stuff that had been going on, and that person will be able to look at his past and his issues more objectively. 

I kind of want him to find love again. However, it is not possible until he learns to love himself so much that he is able to trust and love someone completely and put his fears aside. Until that happens, I don't see love in his cards.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: February 21 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 29]
Summary:

Tai never understood why his family thought it was best to send him to the United States until he met Lana, a beautiful woman with a very troubled past and is broken. Can he fix her, or will she have to fix herself? And what's up with her obsessive ex boyfriend and her colleague who she sees as just a friend?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Psychological, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:No
Word count: 15162
Read Count: 4697
Published: February 23 2013
Updated: July 16 2013


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Hmmm. This story is interesting, but first there is a big problem with the editing: the sentences are much too long without punctuation and it makes the reading more difficult.

Now, about the plot. I still don't understand why has Tai been living for 5 years in NY, without anyone really close to him, while he misses his (former?) girlfirend and his family. The stuff about his mum having some kind of premonition about a woman he is supposed to fall in love with (if I understood everything correctly) is a bit far fetched.  Also his father is supposed to be that big ass international trader, his familly send him all the way to NY to get the best education possible and he ends up going to the Police Academy? No offense to PA but it is not like he went to Harvard and then chose to go to PA.

As for the 2 sisters, the abuse storyline is clearly upsetting, and sure it seems coherent that they both have been traumatized, but I really can't understand why Lana hasn't said anything to their father. I mean, the guy is a cop, the police commissioner even!! Especially now that she doesn't live in that place anymore and now that she has realized for some time that her sister is being abused too.

Also the bit about her ex is not clear: in the 1st chapter it was said that he loved her and wanted to be with her, now he is supposed to have cheated on her? I also disagree with the idea that a vulnerable man, a man who shows vunlnerability is a weak man, ans stated in previous chapter about him. Now him behaving clingy and stalkerish is another story. But the way he was depicted in the first chapters was more of him being vulnerable and too caring so she considered it to mean he was weak. For someone who has been a victim of abuse, it is quite harsh a statement.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the honest review. You're correct this story is unedited, and I'm pulling it straight from the TST site where I first posted it about a year or so ago.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstar
Date: July 16 2013

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Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 629]
Summary:

At some point, you'll have to eventually let your guard down.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 31
Completed:No
Word count: 192818
Read Count: 287961
Published: May 08 2013
Updated: October 03 2015


Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

I've stopped reading a couple of chapter in 'cause I was getting majorly annoyed by Valerie: it is one thing ot have a character with insecurities and all, it is another to have her whalowing in self pity over and over and over. Also, the way she behaved at work with her father was so unprofesionnal, childish and immature, it was infuriating. Then I decided to give it another go when I saw the update, and I am glad 'cause I liked how Valerie evolved. She may be finally growing up. I liked the moment she shared with Henry when they discussed their past, loved their intimate moments. About the one month hiatus, I think Val may have overlokked Henry's own insecurities, and how he felt. She was rightfully pissed he did not called her, but I am glad it did not just end up with them yelling and then nothing. She should voice what she feels. Also, did she finally find another job?

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: October 02 2013

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 77]
Summary:

For Jamie Watson, raising Alex was supposed to be a short time gig, a means to an end before starting her new life. But with it brings a type of love she never could have imagined with Alex's father Mitch. While caring for him brings them together, will doing what's best for him tear them apart? 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 20139
Read Count: 54895
Published: May 20 2013
Updated: October 25 2013


Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Nice, nice! And thanks for the new chapter!

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 26 2013

Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Thanks for the new chapter. This is a vey nice story. And I am grateful that there is no unnecessary angst-filled love drama. The stuff with Jamie's mother feels very realistic. I can't wait to read more about it.

I was a bit confused 'cause I thought I had missed their first time together, especially since it was said that Mitch had performance anxiety so I thought it would be addressed. But morning sex was pretty hot, there is no obligation to write a first time. As long as there is some hot and heavy stuff, I, for one, am good!

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: October 09 2013

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[Reviews - 1032]
Summary:

   

 

A virtual wallflower for most of her life, what will Sasha do when she encounters the first man to ever make her want to be noticed? Dmitri is a man used to being surrounded by the most beautiful things, including women. Will he accept Sasha, a woman who is usually overshadowed by the beauty of her friends? Is he capable of noticing that while her beauty may not be as blatant, it should still be treaured? This is the story of a wallflower and the man she loves.

 

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 31
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2670
Read Count: 196744
Published: May 31 2013
Updated: November 25 2015


Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

The long wait was worth it: great chapter, as usual!!! Thanks a lot. So glad about the evolution of Sasha and Dmitri relationship. Dmitri is really growing as a man and a lover: it was about time he confronted his sister, and he aknowledge publicly his relationship with Sasha. I don't think it is bad that he did said back to Sasha that he loved her, or that she should feel rejected or disapointed. I think his actions spoke for him, and he will directly express how and what he fells in his own time. Am a bit surprised that Slade didn't know anything; I thought they were close friends. Also, what happened with Slade: it seemed that he was quite interested in Dina. I think that it is Nadia who told their father about Dmitri and Sasha. So Daddy dearest has made his grand entrance, can't wait for the big confrontation!

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 15 2013

Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14

So happy you're back!!! Thanks for the new chapter.

Now Sasha, sweety, the bath idea was a very good one, your mother story was very heartbreaking, but your piece of advice was just crap. Stop projecting your family issues on your boo. Some people are just assholes you are better to get out of your life and move on, not matter if they are "family" or not. Sur, it sucks and hurts, but just because some one was part-responsible for giving you life does not mean you owe them life long daddy or mommy issues. Dmitri's father sounded and behaved like a total big giant asshole and Dmitri is way better to not have him in his life. he may be able to help Nadia, and he definetely should try and build a better relationship with his brother, who looked and behaved like the only decent and nive person in this family, except for our dear Dmitri, but he needs to kick this father from hell out of his life before he destroy it.

Nice to have some explanation from Slade.

What about Dominic and Teagan? That could be a nice pairing...

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 02 2013

Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23

Thnaks for the new chapter. I would have done without Sasha's family reunion but it seems like she needed that closure to grow out of her abandonment issues and I am glad that she may start to do so. Yeah, some people, some family are just assholes, and you are btter off NOT having them in your life.

As for Sasha and Dmitri, I have always been team Dmitri, thought they were both at fault for the break up, liked how he started growing out of his own issues and didn't think he had to grovel to supposedly "win" her back. But now I think may be they need to start by rebuilding some friendship rather than jumping back together, especially considering the very vulnerable state Sasha is now.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: June 05 2014

Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

Thanks for the new chapter. It's great to read about those two again.

I, for one, didn't blame Dmitri for what happened. I thought he was unnecessarily hurful, but I was so upset againt Sasha myself, that she wouls do such a stupid stupid thing, that I could understand Dmitri angriness: I know I would have been as hurful as him as I can't stand when people behave like Sasha did in general, so when it comes to privae things like that...So, yeah, Dmitri was cruel, and lashed out, but Sasha was way way out of line. And I says that even though I thought Nadia is just a racist spoiled brat, eating disorder or not.

I am also not convinced about the all "he didn't love her right". I disliked how Sasha was kind of pushing Dmitri to tell her he loved her, and was being disappointed when he didn't. They had been dating for 4 months, for Pete's sake! You can't force love on someone. I thought it was another sign of Sasha's immaturity and misplaced eagerness. Dmitri had to deal with his own growing feelings, and it was unfair of her to expect him to fall in love right away the way she did. He cared for her deeply, he was getting used to being in love with her, he was slowly falling for her, why rush everything?Why expect him to declare his endying love after a couple of month?

Now I am happy that Sasha is getting a bit more confident, even though the "hardening"/"toughening" up wearing skinny jeans and high heeled boots thing is, IMHO, a bit too much. I am glad she confronted Dmitri , aknowleged her wrongs and called him out for being cruel and harsh to her. But I thought her accusing him of not loving her "enough" sounded like ol' Sasha self-pity act, still holding onto a misguided idea of what love is supposed to be. If SHE had loved him enough, she would have respected him too and she would have never thought she knew better than him about his family dynamics. If she had really loved him, she would have told her mind, and then would have had his back and stood by his side.

I hope that she will be able to grow up, and learn how to love herself more and how to love and respect people she supposedly love too. And I do hope that Dmitri will also be given the opportunity to confront his father and let go of his sister, and not wallow in self pity about "not being good enough" for a supposedly too good for him Sasha. This is utter BS. I don't want the tables turned into strong cold Sasha and sad lonely mopping around Dmitri. I want both to grow and learn from this story and be able to love again, to learn to love better, and then, may be, meet again at a better place in their lives that may enable them to be together again and make it work this time around...

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 18 2013

Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20

Thanks for the new chapter ! I like that Dmitri mooks to be on his way to work on his relationship with his brother. Screw that horrible dad : Dom and Nadia are his family, and now that Nadia seems do be better, having saught treatment and worked on her issue, those are the family relationship he can (re)build now.

I am also glad that Sasha stayed to have dinner. I am team Sasha and Dmitri. I still think they were both at fault for the demise of their relationship. Dmitri hurt and mistreated her but she did too when she disregarded what he wanted and hurt his sister, even though it was an accident. And I don't like wathcing people be humiliated or "groveling" to "make amend". When you admit your mistake, own your shit and ask for forgiveness and to move on with the other person, no need to lead them on or taunt them : you either give your relationship another chane or you move on. I am glad Sasha looks like she may be giving their relationship another chance.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: February 17 2014

Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

Thanks for the new chapter. Sooo...They met again ! That was...good. Sure, they didn't make up and make out, but at least they were able to talk and Dmitri was able to kind of apologize. I think Sasha's seemingly contradictory reaction was very understandable. Her inner turmoil is due to the fact that she may have moved on and grown and matured, she still loves Dmitri, despite everything that happened. But she has also learnt to be more cautious about her emotions, and she has learn how to make a good poker face. I also liked to share Dmitri POV: I still root for him to be happy, with Sasha or some one else. I would like to learn that he was able to work on his own issues, someway, and that he began to build some stronger relationship with his brother.

So, what now ? I quite like Carter : he is a decent good man, but I don't think Sasha should "settle" with him just because she feels that she "needs" to be with someone, and I hope she will be honest with him about Dmitri and not lead him on. I also don't want to seel Dmitri grovel : sure he has to earn Sasha back, and earn her he must, earn her trust and respect and love back. But I don't want him to be humiliated or hurt. If Sasha can't get over what happened, at least I hope she will be able to get over him, in the sense that she will be able to love some else, like Carter, truthfully.

Lastly, I like seeing Teagan again. I looks like Jayleen is less of a mean girl while Faye still has her head stuck into her own ass : totally deserved Sasha's smackdown!

Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 31 2014

Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22

Thanks for the new chapter! I really liked that Sasha was honest with Carter and didn't try and play games with him. And I am glad they try and be friends.

Though this PI thing was a bit much, at the end it was worth it as it helped Sasha in her researches. So good job, Dmitri. I still root for you.

I liked younger Sasha's pic but I am ok with her knew one. I understand that she changed and grown. She owned her part in the break up and toughen up a little which isn't all bad. She didn't fall right back with Dmitri, she has valid concerns and reason to be cautious, but she also needs to be honest with herself. Now I wonder about that Mamma business, I hope she'll be to start sorting out her mommy and abandonment issues.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstar
Date: May 27 2014

Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

First of all: so glad to read you again! Thanks, thanks, thanks, I missed this story.

Secondly: this was sad and quite pathetic and so so so why Sasha should have never tried and fixed whatever she thought she was fixing.

Sasha, Sasha, Sasha, such a glutton for punishment! You were so out of line calling his sister, lying to her and then attempting to convince her to seek help ! Like, how dumb was that? Thinking that you, off all people, would be able to convince her to do what her brothers couldn't convince her to do, after years of trying. I mean really? I love you, woman, I really do, but I can't stand dumbassery. And that was such a dumb ass move and dumb ass thinking and dumb ass every thing. I know you have issues, comitment issues, abandonment issues and all. But rather than using your boyfriend as a pet project, why don't you go and confront your own problems? I still love you, woman, I really do, but now, you need to back off, take some deep breath and go confront your issues and grow out of them. Go and seek some professional help, just like you "advised" Nadia. Follow your own advise. Because as harsh and cruel Dmitri was dumping you, you better now learn from that and check out of dumbass land once and for all.

Dmitri, man: you were right to be pissed and mad at Sasha. I was pissed too, since her failed attempt at giving life leassons to you right after you had that draining emotional confrontation with your father. She totally overstepped and that is annoying. And then she put your sister into a dangerous situation. So yeah, I got that you were worried about your sister. And angered by your father. So you lashed out. Ok. But man, that was harsh, and cruel and totally a jack ass move. Sasha behaved like a total dumb ass and you behaved like a total a jack ass. Your father can be proud, that's for sure!

So now, I need those two to clear their head, cool off  and come back to their senses. I don't want to read about Sasha mopping around for months, I don't want to read about Dmitri retreating back to is old ways just worse, I don't want them to just regress to lesser versions of their old selves. I understand they can't be together, for now. So let's have them take a seat, a long breath and a good look at their lives and  try to work out their probelms and come back better from this mess. Then, maybe, they will be ready to give a try a this relationship.

Meanwhile, let's give Dominic some love. May be a fun hook up with Teagan, so that Sascha and Dmitri will keep some kind of contact throught this. Or ma be not. Give him a hot fun WOC sister. Dominic deserves some loving. I am only here for him, right now. And for Dina and Slate too.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar
Date: November 20 2013

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