Penname: jahchannah [Contact]

Real name: Carlotta

Member Since: January 25 2015

Membership status: Member

Bio:

I love to read and support aspiring authors!




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[Reviews - 51]
Summary:

Keny is the lead singer of Fear of Self, and she's in love with her long time friend, Kirk. She wants to tell Kirk everything. Every feeling she has for him, but she's afraid of heartbreak and rejection. As Fear of Self goes to tour, she's glad she left everything behind. Until they come back to their hometown after a two month tour, she sees the former love of her life with another woman.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 22
Completed:No
Word count: 35340
Read Count: 17369
Published: July 18 2014
Updated: December 28 2017


Title: Chapter 2: Prologue

Kirk is not cute. I hope he gets better looking because Kenny is so cute and could do better.

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Date: February 18 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Characters

Kirk here is cute though I really like Doc more and Kenny is beautiful.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed
Date: February 18 2015

Title: Chapter 4: Stop running

This story is moving too fast to make it believable. Kirk seems really weak and unsure of himself. Keny and Doc are together so how will a break up affect the band? It 's hard to garner sympathy for Kirk or root for him and Keny as a couple since the reader has not been able to experience any real connection between them or any of the characters , honestly.

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Date: February 18 2015

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[Reviews - 573]
Summary:

Zoey Vance woke up in the hospital with no memory of her life before that moment. She doesn't even know her own name. Now she has to try and put the pieces of her life back together with the help of the man who hit her with his car that fateful night. As her memories start to return she wonders if she is better off not knowing who she really is. 

Brian Preston is consumed with guilt, the woman just ran out into the street with no warning. He coudln't avoid hitting her. He feels it is his personal responsibility to care for her until she can care for herself and moves her in with him and his fiance, Macy. As time wears on he starts to wonder if he wants her around to ease his guilt or if there aren't bigger emotions at play.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 33
Completed:Yes
Word count: 77720
Read Count: 103524
Published: July 19 2014
Updated: October 14 2018


Title: Memories Lost

Glad the stereotypical girlfriend is gone in an unfortunately stereotypical way. She didn't add to the story but I hope to learn more about Kelly's miserable husband as the story continues.  Outside of Macy the story is quite good.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading. I completely agree with your assessment of Macy in this comment and your previous comment. I swore she wouldn't end up so cliché and yet here we are. I got bored with her and didn't want to write her so I had to get her out of the main story line! Not in the most creative way but at least now I can move on! I appreciate the critique!

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Date: April 08 2015

Title: Memories Lost

Didn't see that coming! Excellent plot twist!



Author's Response:

Thanks! Glad I can keep you on your toes!

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Date: April 08 2015

Title: Memories Lost

Good story but Macy is the typical gold digging girlfriend. I wished more creativity was given to her character as the other characters clearly are not the typical stereotypes. Otherwise, good story with an original premise of amnesia in the "heroine".

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Date: April 08 2015

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[Reviews - 39]
Summary:

When Annalese Evans agrees to serve as medical staff abroad a corporately owned space station, she finds herself involved in an illicit relationship with the chief researcher and leader of their small team, Dr. Jackson Franco.  With the exception of periodic flares in Dr. Franco’s anger and his ego, all is well with their four-man crew—that is until they rescue a stranded cosmonaut who brings to bear the past Annalese thought she’d left behind.  With his arrival, it soon becomes frighteningly clear that not everyone on board is who they claim to be.  

When Annalese is forced to decide which man to trust, will she choose the man with whom she has shared her bed, or the stranger with the face of the man with whom she once shared her heart?

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Psychological, Romance, Science Fiction , Suspense
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 9174
Read Count: 2708
Published: August 04 2014
Updated: September 21 2014


Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 - Missing Signals

Wow, you never cease to amaze me with your talent...this story is soo good but then I say that about all your work that I read...

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Date: July 09 2015

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[Reviews - 19]
Summary:

 

Nobu was comfortbale with just being a teacher in the rural mountains. But with an addition to the alumni and the sudden disappearance of his students,detective might be his new occupation.  



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Mystery, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Dark Fic
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 3878
Read Count: 1189
Published: September 08 2014
Updated: September 22 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Good start. You've peaked my interest.

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Date: May 19 2015

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[Reviews - 48]
Summary:

Leiya Tate was a woman on the run from the life she thought she wanted and the man she once loved. When she learns that her ex-husband plans to take sole custody of her son, she hatches a plan for the both of them to disappear forever. So how does the ex-wife of one of the most prominent and powerful businessmen in the country disappear? That was the question Leiya asked herself until she comes across a photo she'd tucked away of her mother and the aunt she never knew. Adele Waters was the light at end of a tunnel filled with darkness; her way out of Adrien's grasp. It didn't hurt that she resided in a town so small that someone like Adrien Tate would never take notice. Here, Leiya is able to breath again....to live again, if she dares. Just as she decides to let go, she finds herself facing the devil in a fight for everything she has.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 22230
Read Count: 12872
Published: September 10 2014
Updated: September 25 2016


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

Really sweet and so well written...and the editing is excellent...great job...



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and for the review😊

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Date: May 29 2016

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

Good story...

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Date: July 30 2016

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Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 296]
Summary:

Sally McDonald is not who anyone thinks. Her life is filled with secrets. Some she doesn't even know about. But when Storm Monsello sees the terrified girl one night, he never expects how much her secrets would reveal the dark actions of the people he trusted the most.  



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Character Death, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 43
Completed:No
Word count: 133222
Read Count: 425565
Published: September 21 2014
Updated: April 26 2020


Title: Chapter 13: Fighting Both Inside and Out

Really love this story...there's something about Storm and Sally that pulls me into their story...good job

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Date: April 01 2015

Title: Chapter 4: A Plan is Made

Good story. You've got mystery and romance with intrigue between two very different characters. You've drawn me into their story. Good job.

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Date: March 01 2015

Title: Chapter 18: Chance

I'm confused but hoping to get some back story for Sally. Still I like this story.

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Date: August 07 2015

Title: Chapter 26: Disappearing Mirage

Good story...you will be missed but I will read when you return...

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Date: April 26 2016

Title: Chapter 11: I Wanted You

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Sure no STD but a baby's not a problem?

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Date: March 08 2015

Title: Chapter 14: Invitation Accepted

Sally is a mystery.  I hope the readers get to learn more about her soon.

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Date: April 02 2015

Title: Chapter 19: Checkers

Good work...I like the pace of the story and hope to learn Sally's back story soon.

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Date: September 03 2015

Title: Chapter 21: Friendship Torn

I am interested in this story but we are still in the dark about who Sally really is...what she is hiding is still a mystery...why does the cop want her except he's a perverted douche...Ronda has been in trouble and Sally bails her out...what trouble and how does it involve Katie...and now the trouble is enough that Storm and his friend want to investigate...this story hasn't given us enough background on Sally...no flashbacks, no potential interactions that she tries to hide from Storm...from who is she  hiding...it would help to have more information at some point to really pull the story together...

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Date: November 14 2015

Title: Chapter 24: The Friends You Keep

I love Storm...you've portrayed him as a really good man who adores Sally... you have not given us much to work with in terms of Sally's history...I hope you will remedy that for us soon...

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Date: January 23 2016

Title: Chapter 30: Sally Revealed

Wow...it's finally coming together...Sally has been a mystery and it's a doozey...good job...

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Date: April 10 2017

Title: Chapter 32: No Barrier

They divested each other of their clothes, not devised...a good story in need of serious editing..

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Date: October 09 2017

Title: Chapter 33: Secret and Lies

Poor Sally...she needs Storm...glad to see an update...

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Date: December 07 2017

Title: Chapter 34: The Lying Truth

Great chapter...

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Date: March 11 2018

Title: Chapter 36: New Year Confessions

Good update...Storm has been so good for Salina...

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Date: August 09 2018

Title: Chapter 39: Bleak Turn

Good update...glad you’re back....

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed
Date: February 23 2019

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