Penname: jahchannah [Contact]

Real name: Carlotta

Member Since: January 25 2015

Membership status: Member

Bio:

I love to read and support aspiring authors!




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[Reviews - 776]
Summary:

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Jayden made the biggest mistake of his life when he let the love of his life slip through his fingers.  Could he make it right and start anew?  Tamaeya had been burned by Jayden once and had no intentions of being burnt a second time, but it seemed that the heart had it's own mind.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 4965
Read Count: 108469
Published: February 06 2013
Updated: April 19 2017


Title: Regret

That chapter was too funny!  I love Jay and Dana!  Good work!

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 02 2015

Title: Regret

I really enjoyed this book and your ability to do comedy is excellent. It's sad you haven't been able to finish... maybe one day...

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Date: March 02 2015

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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 53]
Summary:

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Thalia knows why she abandoned her hometown of Darming for the Big Apple. Her infamous Shannen blood could never let her forget it. But when news of her cousin's murder brings her rushing back home she finds herself caught up in a whirlwind of familial dilemmas and betrayals, all while going head-to-head with the notorious MC, the Saxon Horde.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Family, Mystery, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Femslash, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Challenges: The Tough and The Gritty
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 31051
Read Count: 19185
Published: February 28 2013
Updated: November 04 2017


Title: Chapter 9: The Price We Pay

I like this story. The update caused me to read the entire work and it's good...but Thalia doesn't need House...too much drama for a woman that tough (enough to be an excellent cop)...

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: November 17 2015

Title: Chapter 11: Sweet Little Lies

So sad these black women have no self love...for them a POS man is better than being alone...pitiful....



Author's Response:

I actually disagree with that, I have to say. Self-love, I have found, means many different things to Black women. Many different, many intriguing things. You’d be amazed at what little a man has to do with how a sista views herself.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: November 04 2017

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 72]
Summary:

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Lana and Lucas have an arrangement. Something that works for the both of them. At least Lana thought it did.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:Yes
Word count: 8868
Read Count: 11841
Published: March 12 2013
Updated: April 13 2013


Title: Chapter 3: What are feelings even good for?

Good story!  I'm so glad Lucas is dumping Lana...she's incredibly selfish and a snob...don't like her right now...

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 02 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 48]
Summary:

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A chance meeting on a bus ride headed for closure. 

Much thanks to my amazing beta Curiously Amused



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:Yes
Word count: 7159
Read Count: 8802
Published: April 30 2013
Updated: May 17 2013


Title: Chapter 6: Well that went well

Really sad, sweet and cute...good short story...definitely original...

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Date: April 10 2016

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 68]
Summary:

I never said I was the  good guy. I'm nobody's hero.

 

 

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Psychological, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Challenges: Through His Eyes
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 15545
Read Count: 8750
Published: May 11 2013
Updated: June 08 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Nagging obsession

Great story, but I hope Alicia can resist. He's bad news if you want more than sex. Otherwise at least be honest.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: May 22 2015

Title: Chapter 3: 2 weeks

Alicia didn't push him but just enjoyed being with him in ways he offered. When he seemed to blow her off she didn't fret but had fun with another guy. Morgan's not used to her way. She's different. Good story.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 22 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 417]
Summary:

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Benjamin Cunningham III decided to finally open the box that his adopted parents had given him which would reveal his past.  Little did he know that its contents would change his life forever.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Rape
Challenges: Through His Eyes
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:No
Word count: 82948
Read Count: 53943
Published: May 15 2013
Updated: September 05 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Learning and Coping

Really good!

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: August 14 2015

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[Reviews - 189]
Summary:

An innocent night of fun ruins the lives of two people who realize they are screwed without each other but especially with each other.

 

"My body is your party"



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:Yes
Word count: 44180
Read Count: 56973
Published: July 07 2013
Updated: October 04 2013


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Ariana says she's not a whore yet she behaved like one with her boss...sure women have the right to be as promiscous as they desire but professional lines were crossed...the woman is quite unprofessional...why turn her into the stererotype right out of the gate...

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed half-star
Date: December 05 2016

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 125]
Summary:

I am currently NOT working on this story and don't know when I will be again. Writing this takes a toll on me and I have kinda been posting other things here. Give them a looksie. :]

 

Kensington's battered body ached from abuse, each blow recieved slowly tearing her apart. She was drowning in the hell that once used to be her home until a mysterious stranger comes along. Will he be the one restrore Kensington's faith in the world?

Heads up: The beginning (meaning the first few chapters)  of this story is a bit DARK. If you are of a faint heart than I fear this story is not going to be appealing to you. 


 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed:No
Word count: 10114
Read Count: 12987
Published: July 25 2013
Updated: May 29 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Honestly, how does she get shoved down concrete steps without breaking something?  The stairs must have been a short row because she walked about hurt but with bones intact.  That part requires to me requires a willing suspension of disbelief.  Otherwise, definitely a difficult to read story that grips one with sorrow.  I want to see where you take this.  



Author's Response:

Yes, they were a short flight of stairs. More so the ones that lead to the entrance of a school, so not very steep or long. 

 

Hope that helped, and now back to the top to answer your other comments. :]

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: May 29 2015

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wow! Stan is a sicko!  Another difficult to read but well written chapter.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: May 29 2015

Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

If he's been abusing her so severely since she was two years old, how is she even alive?  And if alive how is she even functional?  What other people are in her life to counterbalance this man.  It seems his abuse would have started when she got older for her to be as sound of mind as she is.  Otherwise, it's hard to believe.



Author's Response:

I suppuse the fault in that lies with me and the way in which I have written i, for that I do apologize.

The abuse has been more of a progression. With the age comes the different forms. While there is not much that one can do, or should be doing to a 2 year old, negligence is still a form of abuse and that is what she suffered from and as she got older the severity of the forms of abuse grew more intense. Now that she is 17 and rapidly approaching 18 the punishments and abuse are at their peak. The only thing that that she has in her life to counterbalance Stan is the short and hazy memories of her mother. What's keeping her mind sound is that she knows that it is all that she has left and her mother did not sacrifice herself for her to break so easily. I hope this cleared somethings up for you and if it did not, comment again with your concerns. I am more than happy to answer. ;D

 

 Thank you for reading.

 

- Ren

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 29 2015

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I'm glad Kenzie has a "hero" willing to help her escape from Stan.  He cries but couldn't help?  What about the past few days?  What is prompting the appearance now and not a day ago when Stan was attacking her?  Did she reach some magic age?  It's just hard to accept with so many unanswered questions.  I like the premise but currently I'm asked to willingly suspend my disbelief too strongly.  But I'm still reading to see where this goes because I do think it's got promise.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 29 2015

Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

She had money to go somewhere else but she stayed in the house?  Even if she didn't go to the safe house her "hero" had arranged for her, why not go to a hotel?  No food in the house?  Stan doesn't sound like the type to shop so wouldn't she always have to find other ways of getting food or is he only violent when he's drunk?  Clarifying some issues will definitely strengthen the story.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstar
Date: May 29 2015

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

This chapter was believable.  I like the idea of getting rid of her tormentor without resorting to violence.  Sure I understand forgiveness, which she should do to prevent becoming bitter, but she should never forget or excuse the abuse perpetrated against her.  The idea that she can take care of herself says she's getting help somewhere or at some point Stan is functional enough that he is providing some type of support to keep her in clothes and fed at times.  It's not clear this is the case.  Why doesn't Stan kill her already?  Why do her bruises go unnoticed by the school officials?  Just questions that make the story less believable but can be addressed if deemed important. 

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: May 29 2015

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

I liked this chapter because she fought back and didn't give up.  But having been with Stan for so long without her mother and no one else, it seems it would have been easy for him to break her.  She seems strong so how?  

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 29 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 43]
Summary:

My name is Camden, and I'm the ‘other' girl.

 

You know, the girl who was best friends with the popular girl in secondary school.

 

The girl who awkwardly stood there as yet again her friend gets hit on by a guy during fresher’s week.

 

The girl who doesn’t really fit the 'norm'.

 

My friends like to call me crazy.........I guess I would just say I'm 'different'.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 9354
Read Count: 10435
Published: August 20 2013
Updated: August 28 2015


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4: What you see is what you get? (Part two)

This chapter doesn't flow with the previous chapters. And as I mentioned in my last review, for some reason in the morning Camden can now leave and get into her room? Makes no sense she couldn't do the same last night.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starhalf-star
Date: August 29 2015

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: What you see is what you get? (Part one)

Why didn't Camden just go to the front desk to get help? Who would just sit on the hallway floor instead of trying to get help at the front desk? Or why not try to find the other stunt actors with whom she worked? She didn't seem very practical...

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starhalf-star
Date: August 29 2015

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5: You never know?

IIt's getting better. They made a connection. He's looking for her and she"s looking for him...I wished we had a chance to see more interaction between them. Her crying was enough? There was no mention of his thoughts of her while she was in his hotel room. Yet he became so enamored he goes after her...why? So getting us into the character's thoughts would help.

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: August 29 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Should've, would've, could've

Really cute! I really like Camden and love the name for a female!

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: August 29 2015

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: When one door closes......another door swings wide open???

Camden is too funny!

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: August 29 2015

Title: Chapter 3: Cast

Liking the cast!

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: August 29 2015

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[Reviews - 197]
Summary:

When Joss begins receiving anonymous letters, she has her suspicions as to who might be penning the ominous messages.  But as the list of suspects grows, will she uncover the author’s identity or stumble upon a greater truth?  *A response to the Random Letters prompt.*



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Challenges: Random Letters
Series: None
Chapters: 15
Completed:Yes
Word count: 46306
Read Count: 37781
Published: August 29 2013
Updated: October 17 2013


Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Such a beautifully written tale of romantic love...I love that the story was about the love between Eshan and Joss...we often get so caught up in the physical that we forget what is really important...for me, love makes the world go round...thanks for the joy you provide in writing about real love...be blessed...



Author's Response:

Thanks jahchannah!!!  Eshan and Joss are my babies.  I so enjoyed telling their story and hope to go back and spend some time revising and possibly expanding their story.  

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed
Date: March 26 2016

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 160]
Summary:

What's a girl to do when there are two after you? 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Threesome+
Challenges: Give Me a Mountain Man Anyday!
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 6583
Read Count: 43887
Published: September 02 2013
Updated: July 13 2015


Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

Why didn't Sallie just go to the police with the information she has about her relatives?  Why did the McRyan brother's kidnap her as they have no reason to want to protect her.  She's a stranger to them as they are to her and this excuse of taking her to protect her from her relatives trying to possibly murder her makes no sense because they don't know her...it's really a stretch...in this case to believe this part of the story definitely requires a willing suspension of disbelief...And why would the brothers assume once released from the basement that Sallie would just stay and not try to leave...again this part makes little sense...just saying...

Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstar
Date: June 26 2015

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