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"If you prick us do we not bleed? If you tickle us do we not laugh? If you poison us do we not die? And if you wrong us shall we not revenge?"- William Shakespeare

 

She didn’t believe in love at first sight, yet when she met Fabian she believed in anything. Even the belief of her death at the hands of her lover…

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Horror, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:No
Word count: 10873
Read Count: 20775
Published: December 28 2010
Updated: July 17 2013


Title: Con Te Partiro

Really like the story, Fabian's initial draw to Meka seems to be she reminds him of his mother, a lady he loved but because of his father's estrangement from her Fabian could not receive the love and relationship with her he wanted.  Perhaps, this explains what I sense is his need to dominate, control; so that that love fulfillment with a woman by his complete ownership he will not have to fear loss of, that also means no sharing, hence why he was so upset about Remy.

I like Fabian and Meka very much so I greatly look forward to continuance of this story.

Thank you LunarAngel 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 10 2011

Title: Con Te Partiro

AHhh!  They are so cute!..kind of romantic.  I like Fabian the more I see of him and also Meka has something about her that draws my interest.

I like very much that both characters have a depth of complexity that I cannot easily define in words and that makes them interesting, real as persons.  Because, real people although each person has a few things that immediately stick out there is also a hidden psychological depth that no one , not even themself can easily put in a mere few words. 

Thank you for this update, it continues the evolvement of these two in an interesting simplistic way; yet, stimulates in me a rather exciting anticipation that Fabian will soon become more personal and Meka is rather receptive.  I can hardly wait to see what will happen next.  

LunarAngel, ..I'm glad your slowly building this story, the characters and their relationship.  I also like your recent introduction of the father, he was very Real and natural; I also suspect daddy is where some of Fabian's need to possess comes from; his father is into ownership.

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 14 2011

Title: Con Te Partiro

Fabian sure makes Meka nervous, she is rather a shy person it seems, not an assuming person.  And like Meka, I like his forty dollar tips which he has now left for the second time to get her attention and notify her of his interest while still being a gentlemen, I like that kind of man, not cheaply trying for her attention nor vulgar.  Meka is impressed and I don't blame her, he is also very attractive, perhaps rather handsome.  His interest is a compliment since he could choose other women.  I like his quietness.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 14 2011

Title: Con Te Partiro

Well LunarAngel,  your change to this story, in harmony with your new plot, whatever that plot will be, has me confused.

 I think this story, before your present change, had possibly nine chapters and was headed in a direction I could understand based on it seemed an obsession Fabian has on Meka.  But, with the present change and deletion of chapters I am in the wilderness of where this story is headed.  

Since in the prologue, Meka seeks to escape Fabian but, with deletion of previous chapters her reason for escape I do not now know, also her escape plan appears childish and Fabian laughs at her; I also found her rather humorous, like a child.

In the next and present chapter Meka is visiting her mother in an insane asylum.  Now, I'm beginning to wonder is Meka a crazy person, is that the new plot??  And was Fabian really her saviour in preventing her from injury during her childish unsuccessful window escape!



Author's Response: I will admit I have new ideas popping into my head each moment. My intentions for the prologue weren't to be childish with her escape. I was iffy with the prologue but decided to post it anyways. Thank you for your honest opinion. And you will be lost. Haha. I'm sorry but as events happen I do believe you will see where I am headed. Well... Is she crazy? Remember that is just a prologue. An excerpt from the future. Thank you.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstar
Date: April 09 2011

Title: Con Te Partiro

I had to read this chapter twice and each time slowly deciphering; to discover what is going on, however I think it was worth the effort.

Fabian Ehrlichmann seems to be a scary man and also is he a Killer? An assassin?  Why does he kill people; although, his recent kill seemed to be because the person stole money from him!  But, still, Corporate business world does not casually take care of thievery this way.  Yet, Meka is a College student working hard toward her degree and applying for internship, that she greatly wants, with the Ehrlichmann Industries.  A very prestigious business in the Corporate world as famous as the Rockefellers!

I am surprised Fabian hired her in that her appearance was an exceeding Mess!  I know she normally would not have chosen to look as she did but why did Fabian choose to over look an appearance so messy that it would invalidate the professionalism of her resume, that she was forced to hand delivery because post office closed!

Anyway, I'm on to read the next chapter because this story is very intriguing!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: February 01 2012

Title: Con Te Partiro

This is a weird story and LunarAngel you seem to write it in a way that does not flow, continuing to force me to put it together:  Who is Cinnamon in relation to Meka?  I presume she is her roommate but where do they live?!  I now know Meka has a younger sister name Cameron, I wonder where she lives, does she live with their father?

Fabian is a Murderer, I'm intrigued, how does this "occupation" jive with the multi-nation billion dollar Corporation he has ownership interest in thru his family's ownership of it.  And I am further intrigued in that while he talked to Henry,  he seems to have a business that is in some way criminal, even a murder incorporated??

Anyway, I remain intrigued with this rather scary story.  Then there is Meka's mother who murdered her new born infant...Yeah! this story is creepy scary!

Thank you for the Update!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: February 01 2012

Title: Con Te Partiro

Meka captivates Fabian but I greatly wonder Why?  

Fabian has seen and I'm sure due to his immense Wealth, business position and personal attractiveness, he has been sought after by some exceptionally beautiful women and some of high prestige themselves, also within his own race.    Meka from description also appears a simple girl.  So what about her captivates this great Man!

I like that Meka refused to accept an inferior attitude from Henry, regardless she is just an intern and a new employee, that took courage and character!

Lunar there are several German words, could please you provide a translation in post notes.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: February 01 2012

Title: Con Te Partiro

Thank you for the Update!

I remain in a mystery of what is going on with these people, especially within Meka's family but I presume it will unravel!  However, for some odd reason I don't yet care anything about any of these characters, and I don't know Why!

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Date: February 01 2012

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Summary:

Farewell

 

She didn't choose this Life. He chose It for her. And for that, he must pay the Ultimate Price.

Exceedingly Dope Banner by my homeskillet Valhalla.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Horror, Mystery, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 32
Completed:No
Word count: 92749
Read Count: 99692
Published: January 24 2011
Updated: March 20 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Bullseye

Interesting!  I like that inwardly Bowie was scared of vladimir; stories of strong alpha women scared of nothing, including losing their job become boring after reading two too many of them!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 07 2011

Rated: Teen or Above
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Summary:

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Grandpa Amethyst and Grandma Kendra have strong love, and vow after an incident to make love to each other for the rest of the lives, even now in their old age. When they have to take care of their four year old granchild, their love life is being challenged. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Drabbles
Genre: Family, Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:Yes
Word count: 3252
Read Count: 7148
Published: April 22 2011
Updated: April 22 2011


Title: Chapter 2: Love Forever

Thank you very much for this story!  Very well written.  LOL, the grandchild was sure a nuisance! The couple are people who very evidently have a lot of wholesome love, to have such loving patience with the child.  

All the characters were well drawn by you because, I could clearly see all their actions and even their nuance of emotion, including the child.

I am an elder widow and still wish for love in my life.  Not sexual love but, that warm platonic, best friend love, hand holding and a few cuddles, and plenty of hugs.  If sex arrives, okay and if not that's okay too.  For me its that best friend and true love in a mate that at these 60 plus years of my life;  would be greatly treasured.  So reading that this elderly couple also experience very active sexual life, was a good reading for me, to see that indeed we oldsters are still very much part of this romantic world! 



Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yes the oldsters are still very much a part of the romantic world. 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 21 2011

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Amaris Manning was a woman that was over six feet tall.  Julian Arrington was just a little over five six.  They were attracted to one another from the beginning, but would it be a good fit?  She was sexually repressed.  He was sexually promiscuous. She was looking for a relationship and he was avoiding one at all costs. She was black and he was white.  They were totally opposite in every way, yet their hearts didn't seem to hear their heads talking!

 

Good Things in A Small Package is an original work of fiction. Please do not copy or post this story to any other websites. Copyright 2011 BRAnderson

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 38
Completed:Yes
Word count: 169606
Read Count: 140135
Published: August 22 2011
Updated: August 28 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Prologue

I like Amaris, i'm so proud of her tenacity to work her way out of the projects and the immoral life of her family and i also credit her with still loving them and respecting them without real condemnation.  Also, credit mom and sisters for always protecting Amaris virginal innocence regardless of their promiscuousness, especially mom's.

I like Julian, he's a good boy, remarkable that he gives up one of his kidney's to save the life of a father whose never loved him and always showed he did not.  But, Julian, God Bless him!... has still been able to sustain his self esteem even with the constant bullying of his jock superior brothers that he is inferior due to his comparably small size.  That takes a lot of character.  Very happy for him to be so successful in college academia, at least he has that that he is proud of and which he is happy in.

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 1 The Size of Things

Love Tamera, Amaris girlfiend, and their sexy conversation about men, especially White guys that was very erotically amusing!

Loved Julian's unexpected visit and his charming conversation with Amaris.  Irregardless of their many physical opposites including race and that he is extremely shorter than six foot Amaris; nevertheless, he is the first man in her 28years that affected her erotically.  And she greatly affects Julian whose never before been attracted to a Black woman.  Julian is really unique; his first attraction to a Black woman is nearly an amazon in height and very dark chocolate in color.  I see he is apparently a man who wants the "original" and likes a challenge!  THIS STORY SHOULD BE REAL INTERESTING!  I'm excited!

It's surprising that Amaris is 28Years old and never slept with a man;.. true she uses her sex toy but like Tam said that has no equivalent to sex with a man and sexy Tam should know, Lol!

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 2 Leaving Your Comfort Zone

AHhh!  I really like Daniel Wong; he is truly THE MAN!  He wants Tamera sexually but is determined to also have her heart and that she truly want him as a person, not just sexually.  Daniel is very wise in knowing that relationships and eventually love can only truly be acquired by temporarily foregoing immediate sex and building friendship first.  Unless its some kinda Soulmate at first sight and that's rare to happen!

Yayyy!! Daniel!

DAMN!  That was a REALLY HOT! date with Julian and Amaris!  Amaris got herself a Real stud, he sure don't have to be real tall to qualify!  Julian laid some love making on her with just a Kiss and slight finger fuckin!  Had Amaris in a total wet swoon!  YAYYyy!! Julian!!

I'm sure enjoying this story ever since from it's beginning and it just keeps getting better!

 

 

 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 3 Seeing the Real You

I loved Tam and Amaris talk about how they really see sex, love and men; also, as usual Tamera had me Cracking up laughing in her sex discussions with Amaris, who is truly a scared virgin but OH SO HOT!!, Lol

Julian is so sweet, I'm liking him more and more, he's getting scared cause out of all the many women he's been with he feels Amaris is moving into his heart, so now his repressed insecurities from childhood are arising, if he let's go and falls for her will she eventually reject him for someone else?... a "jock".  

 

 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 4 Sinking in Deep and Liking It

OMG!!!  Those were beautiful love making scenes of both couples!

I absolutely ADORED the love poems that Tamera and Daniel said to each other before their final consummation.  Tamera's recitation of the Song of Solomon to Daniel was so beautifully appropriate.  And his answering poem to her so lovingly possessive.

Loved the HOT SEX of Amaris and Julian's love making; and like Ameris's sisters have always told her, she did have a hidden freak in her and she really laid it on Julian.  Glad she did because he earned it after adoring her body all night yet he still has not required intercourse from her, he's respecting her innocence, taking it slow!  YAYY! Julian!

And Hooray Amaris you are delightfully learning that sexuality can be really nice with the right MAN!  Many of us ladies never get that true gift!!

Great writing especially the juxtaposition of the poetic lovemaking with the more physical of Amaris and Julian.  Although, immediately after their dinner but before their love making when Julian told Amaris of his love for chocolate especially her chocolate and dropped to his knees kissing her sex through her dress before pulling her panties down; that really touched me!!!

 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 5 Revealing the Hidden Part of Me

Great update.

I love how this story is writing the human experience in such realities, including Julian's insecurities from his childhood.  Daniel too has some secret insecurities and i hope they will not break his romance with Tamera.  Amaria seems to almost have a phobia about intercourse, i hope it will not cause her to lose Julian; afterall a man can only take so much sexual angst!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 6 Revealing the Hidden Part of Me II

Great upsate!

Good that Julian has faced the sorrows of the past in his family relationship and that mending can be done before its too late.

Amaris is strong, she faced the racial intensity against her from a few family members and did not fold, also Loved Julian's unquestionable love for Amaris despite his mother's opposition.

That's what I love about this story, how it continues to speak in life's realities.

Also, hope Julian can help the poverty of his family he was not previously aware of but now wants very much to help them.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 1: The Cast

I like the cast, especially Amaris and Julian.

Really like that Amaris has a dark chocolate complexion and she has a lovely exotic look.

 It's wonderful to see a AA girl  of dark complexion as the love interest in a story instead of the usual depiction of the light complexioned girl.  Our race has a lot of variety but the literary consistent omission of the very dark hue for the beloved leading lady is unrealistic. 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 10: Additional Cast Pictures

I continue to like the choice of cast, what affects me most is that each is realistically representational of their role in this story.

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Date: January 17 2012

Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 14 So You Think You Know All About Me

I accept that Seleah has a psychological problem due to her unfortunate sexual experience with the Paster when she was only 12years old, actually statutory rape.  However, like Paula, her Slut mother,  Seleah continues the trashy irresponsible conduct of pregnancies by many different men and never actually raising the children, allowing them to develop on their own like animals.  I'm glad Joseph recognized her as the trash she is and that she's just a parasite with no ethics whatsoever.  These two may have a affinity of weaknesses but there is hope for Joseph so I hope his heart does not get involved with Leah because I don't think anyone can save her to an acceptable adult status of some degree of human worth, she is too infected with the trashy character of her mother since possibly as early as being 5years old.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 18 2012

Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 12 My Actions Speak Louder Than My Reputation

Paula Manning gives me laughs but she's really just Trash and a Slut, the more so for birthing kids and keeping them in a trashy environment.  Amaris was just lucky to have the hand of God on her not to have been raped  by any of the numerous men going through her mothers house and God helped Amaris to raise herself toward a better life.

 

Now, Paula gives these cheap trinkets to Amaris from her sporadic sexual communication with Amaris father who has never paid child support and evidently never concerned about the child he spermed back in America to even make any visits.

 

I'm very happy that Daniel has lived thru his near fatal shooting!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 18 2012

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Summary:

 

 

Mal has wanted her since the first night they met. CoCo has been fighting her instant attraction from day one. Will past dirty deeds keep these two from the one thing they both need...each other.

DISCLAIMER: All publically recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. (ME!!) The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

ME&U is an original work of fiction please do not copy or post this story to any other websites.

ME&U © 2011 by C.E. Givens (Elizablu)

###DUE TO A FUCKING THIEF KALANI ZOLDYCK, I TOOK MY STORIES DOWN###



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: Kitten's Bed & Bath
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 9674
Read Count: 127254
Published: September 02 2011
Updated: September 22 2014


Title: ME&U

I Like the Cast!



Author's Response:

So glad that you do! Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 24 2012

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3...Part I

Ginger deserves prison and even torture for her evil that she did to Olea but I almost have just a tiny bit of pity for her, regardless I despise her for her evil.

I wonder how Darren's busted face will mend, how will he look?

Good update!  Thank you!



Author's Response:

Ginger deserves alot for what she did to Olea. Darren will be looking a lil' different. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 24 2012

Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

DAMN!  Francis is always getting a Hellifyed beating because of all the Hate she has for CoCo keep making her do mean actions, I feel kind of sorry for her since her beatings are always so severe just like in the fight she caused before Jace and Tabby's wedding in the story Full Bloom.

Nevertheless, Darren showed himself to be a real punk by hitting Coco in retaliation for her fighting Francis.  I mean REALLY!  WOW!  Darren is muscular and strong and he hit Coco with full powered fist as he would a man.  I guess he also been repressing a lot of strong hatred on Coco.  Real glad Mal beat his ass, in defense of Coco.



Author's Response:

Francis needs to learn to shut her mouth. If she did...she wouldn't be beat up every 5 secs. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 24 2012

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Damn!  Sam's wife not only cheated on him but has destroyed his career and after hitting him over the head leaves him in that unconscious state in which he could die.  Yeah, Sasha, is a total evil selfish whore but Sam evidently loves her so much he was just dumb to his own to self destruction.  I do not feel sorry for him, although I probably should but, I have a feeling he has a past of selfish destructive actions to others and that he just met his match in Sasha, maybe Karma!



Author's Response:

Sasha is a selfish evil whore and she will be showing her face again. Sam's action will be doing him more harm than good. Thanks for reading!

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 24 2012

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.