I really like this sory, so I feel guilty about my next comments. The typos can be annoying at times when the story is really flowing... then I have to back it up an interpret your meaning, hey writers' or readers' craft, go figure.
My major issue is that you tend to be all over the place with your numerous characters and their dialogue. You shouldn't leave us (your readers) into a fog of who is talking or what their doing. It really kills the tone of the paragraph. Also, big also, well maybe for me, but anywho, could you please start each new chapter by piggy backing from the previous one? I ask because sometimes I feel like I've missed something pertinent in between. Like maybe have them address a conversation, feeling, or an act from the last sentence from the previous chapter. If this really irks you that I suggested, it wasn't my intention. I so enjoy this but I just want it to flow is all. Oh, and thank you for making this with so many twists and turns. I like Vladimir, he's the baddy, but I like him just the same. The others (Joe, Cassius, Hiroshi, and Yoshi) are b-o-r-I-n-g; well Yoshi was till he started sucking Bowie's pussy drenched fingers... didn't see that one coming.
Oh, oh, well can't wait for ch 33! Happy writing, if you need an editor, reply.Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: August 07 2014 04:23 am
YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I haven't even read it yet and I'm hype! XD I'm so glad your back on this story. I have kept it on my dashboard just in case you desided to come back! :D I so happy!Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 24 2014 06:03 pm
Oh my goodness! An update! I'm so excited!!!Reviewer: paris Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 24 2014 04:16 am
Woah! I don't know how what to think about Ms. Bowie's grand exit, LOL! But a little part of me is glad she dipped on Vlad, he wronged her whole life. Without even a "welcome to my world then see ya in the next life" letter. SMH..
I love this story and I can't wait to find out what happens next. Great JOB :DReviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 22 2014 06:15 am
Damn YOU ! :D I still LOVE this story. Thanks for the update !!! :)Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 20 2014 05:13 pm
Yes! You're back! I truly missed this story. And I loved this chapter. I understand why Bowie was upset, hell I would be upset too if nobody was telling me what was going on with me. Can't wait for the next chapter!Reviewer: hazelbazel92 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 05 2013 07:02 pm
So, I was on my daily lurking schedule of The Chamber, hoping to find a favored story or a new one of substance and low and behold, Farewell is back!! I had to go put on some Kenny G, light candles and pour my glass of wine to settle into a proper reunion with my story.
Obviously, it's been a w hile for me. I forgot how badass Bowie can be, especially during her transfomation. Reading about Cassius' eyes did not let wine sit well (I'm easily thrown by a little bit of gore). So, I turned off Kenny G, mid-15 minute sax solo and went for the crackers to settle my stomach.
Yeah...this ain't Twilight. Thank fucking God.
I hope we won't wait too long before the next installment. And I'll remember: no wine or Quiet Storm music while reading. This story is magnificent and unpredictable!Reviewer: islandlass Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2013 08:53 am
Thank you for this great update.
I'm so happy to see Vlad going for Bowie. I know Vlad might be the big bad one with, Joey, Reid and Hiroschi, being the goods. But I don't care I'm team Vlad all the way. lol
His character is the most interesting one to me and his scenes with Bowi are incredible. I can't wait to see them come face to face again.
I seriously just love Vlad, and Bailey isthe second guy in this story that I love. I appreciate the others because they clearly cares for Bowie, but I don't love them.
I LOVE the relationship between Bowie and Mila, their friendship is heart-warming, and beautiful. I hope whatever happens with Reid and Bowie doesn't destory this beautiful relationship.
Please update as soon as you can and thank you, thank you again for this great story.Reviewer: truth7 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 02 2013 08:32 pm
Hey IT missed U welcome bk girl. I'm sooooo glad U decided 2 update this story it being 1 of my favs, that being said this update was great but Y aren't they talking 2 her, Y, they keeping her in the dark on who & what she is & what they are preParing her 4. This ending to the chapter girl really Y U wanna be away so long come bk with such a wonderful ch. Then tease us with that so not fair lol. Anywho so Vladimir is looking 4 her as he knows all what who she is & hopefully will soon find her b4 those other miscreants & oh what a reunion gonna be b/c both R horny. Oh 1
more thing is she preggers yet R no? Update Update ,Update
Date: December 01 2013 10:26 am