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Title: Chapter 1

Wonderful story, Nick family does not know that Ellie is black. Nick family is involved in crime. Ellie think background check. Loving your story, please update soon.

 Reviewer: Bain Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2011 02:27 am
Title: Chapter 1

This is really intriguing to me, I can bet I know what the family business is, and I hope that Ellie has a little more gumption. She seems to be on more of the pushover side.



Author's Response:

Ellie avoids conflict I would say though I think you'll see that in coming chapters that when she finally decides to stand for something she doesnt easily back down which when Nick is involved there arguments can be explosive. 

Thanks for reading. 

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2011 02:06 am
Title: Chapter 1

I like this story.  Mysterious.

 Reviewer: read a lot Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2011 01:25 am
Title: Chapter 1

This is interesting and I like how Nick doesn't care what his family may think of her and all that matters is his love for her. I just hope he stays that way and that he tells her about whatever it is his family does before she finds out for herself. Can't wait to see what happens next.



Author's Response:

Yeah i think he is going to struggle with that because he has been raised to stay bery loyal to his family. Family comes first in his world. 

Thanks for reading 

 Reviewer: helloWORLD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 23 2011 08:07 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Ok is Nick in the mob?! I have a feeling his family is not completely legitimate. His brother Gio and Nina seem nice. Update soon!

 Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 23 2011 06:36 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I like the story,  personally like knowing the name of the city where the characters are.  I like being to picture actual locations in my mind as I read. I am seriously hooked on this story already!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23 2011 05:26 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I am really enjoying your story and the vagueness of the city and the people.

great job

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 23 2011 04:55 pm
Title: Chapter 1

OMG,love the story so far.....love the way you're developing the characters,can't wait for the next chapter!!

 Reviewer: Daniella Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 23 2011 04:49 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Thanks for the update!  So is Nick's family mafiosa???  Please post pictuers.

 Reviewer: Proudly African Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23 2011 01:31 pm
Title: Prologue

The opening paragraphs has me wanting more

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 04:00 pm
Title: Prologue

dont you worry, you're doing great. Just keep the updates coming. Did you post work on other websites?

 Reviewer: brenda Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 10:10 am
Title: Prologue

Me likey!! More please.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 07:21 am
Title: Prologue

please add more soon

 Reviewer: noona Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 01:56 am
Title: Prologue

Im loving this.....i got a feeling nicks  family is not going to be so welcoming lol

 Reviewer: noona Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 01:55 am
Title: Prologue

Funny, the characters in this book sound similar to a book I have been reading, He Changed Me, crazy the way the world works, huh?

 Reviewer: Humph Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 01:33 am
Title: Prologue

I love it. Happy that at least one side of the family will be okay, because I doubt his will be so accepting. Please continue.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 21 2011 01:07 am
Title: Prologue

I like, please update.

 Reviewer: Bain Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 05:52 pm
Title: Prologue

I'm liking it...Please continue.

 Reviewer: kim Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 04:45 pm
Title: Prologue

I am liking what have written so far, so please continue.

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 03:26 pm
Title: Prologue

This is a great start.  I can't wait to see what happens next!

 Reviewer: Proudly African Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 02:55 pm
Title: Prologue

I'm excited to read the rest =)

 Reviewer: Inthenykoftime Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 01:03 pm
Title: Prologue

This story has me interested, please continue.

 Reviewer: lady liberty Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 12:50 pm
Title: Prologue

Intrigued, please continue. So far so good!

 Reviewer: jovanfan4evr Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 12:22 pm
Title: Prologue

Promising start. I would really like to see how this story develops.

 Reviewer: Valis202 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 20 2011 08:52 am


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