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Title: Two

I like Brady and Pen...though the story is moving quickly to the physical, it's written as if they both sense the underlying strength of character and integrity that each possess...so many stories start with lust like a bw has no value until what's between her legs is first discovered...intelligence and strenth of character matter so much more especially in the long term...good job... 

 Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 04:35 pm
Title: One

I like Brady...he's portrayed as a good man who is at a disadvantage because of the sacrifice he made in doing his job...I like that you are giving the love interest in an IR relationship an honorable man...I look forward to more...

 Reviewer: jahchannah Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 03:59 pm
Title: One

I am rereading this story.  This is so good. Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2012 01:54 am
Title: One

I am just wondering if Penny's mother is still alive?  Max seems like the type that kill a woman if he couldn't have her.  Just saying!!  I love this story!!!

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Date: March 30 2012 06:40 am
Title: One

This is going to be good keep going

 Reviewer: for real Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2012 12:16 am
Title: One

I absolutely love this story. I think that you have done an excellent job with this story. I don't think Brady has to think of his leg every second of his life or he could get nothing done. I am sure it will come up when it comes up. I love that penny does not act like some shrinking violet. Though I do think she will pull on the reigns when it's show time. My husband can sit through dinner and just listen to me talk and I think that is sexy. He listens to me. I want to know what is up with her father and mother. I want more you are an amazing writer. I would not have the ovum to write anything or put it out in public for people to read. Go Spiderbite 

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Date: March 28 2012 07:29 pm
Title: One

Good start to the story,  I like Brady.  It s amazing that he perservered after losing his foot and a portion of his leg.  I think that Penelope might be attracted to him too.  I couldn't help but LOL at his team mates working so hard to fix him up with a woman. Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 17 2012 11:53 am
Title: One

I am in love with the title I am in love with this story. I love Brady to death and Penny is so his woman. I love the wya you write. You just take me into whatever world you wish me to be. You are so talented. This story is going on the fav board

 Reviewer: AntiVenom Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 12 2012 07:35 pm
Title: One

I love that you love this challenge because it can be seen in your writing. I myself was going to write an amputee story but I've been engrossed in reading them here and elsewhere.  This is a great story.  Penelope seems like a shy sweetheart and I already adore her.  You got to love the girls who just don't even see their own sex appeal.  Brady is super hot and he's in swat.  Win.  I do get the feeling though that Brady will not be making the first move.  Three chance meetings is always the key and I think Penelope is gonna take the helm on this one and make a move.  Great chapter and I'm excited to read the following chapter.

 Reviewer: vaberella Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 11 2012 10:00 pm
Title: One

Can't wait for the next update.

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 05 2012 04:05 pm
Title: One

you are mean as hell for leaving me ...I mean US hanging like that LOL!

 Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 05 2012 02:48 pm
Title: One

Great start to a fantastic story.  Can't wait for the next update.

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Date: March 04 2012 03:43 am
Title: One

Oohh can't wait to see where this goes!

 Reviewer: jovanfan4evr Signed [Report This]
Date: March 04 2012 02:35 am
Title: One

I like it.

 Reviewer: the girl next door Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 04 2012 01:35 am
Title: One

i love this story please continue

 Reviewer: jadadominique Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 04 2012 12:56 am
Title: One

I enjoyed it. Looking forward to reading the rest.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 04 2012 12:19 am
Title: One

Very nice start, although I noticed that in some places you did not use contractions when you have the characters speaking to each other.  In normal conversations people use contractions all the time, it makes reading your story a little stilted in a couple of places.   Looking forward to seeing where you take this.  Thanks for sharing.

 Reviewer: Dee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 03 2012 11:50 pm
Title: One

Please update soon, this is going to be one of those stories where you cannot update enough, lol!

 Reviewer: Tara Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 03 2012 10:46 pm
Title: One

Another great story. Please update soon. I just love your writing style.

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Date: March 03 2012 09:26 pm
Title: One

Very nice story.  Look forward to reading the rest of their story.

 Reviewer: Realstone Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 03 2012 08:03 pm
Title: One

I just have to say that your writing is so genius. I love the way you express your thoughts. This story is just so marvelous. Your characters always have that chemistry needed to make a great story. Brady and Penny just melt together and I love it. I love Brady's team and how they rally around him. I cannot wait to find out more about Penny and see them grow towards love.

Please do not stop writing because you are talented and you should use that talent and spread joy as you have.

You have the most awesome Penname

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Date: March 03 2012 02:31 pm
Title: One

I just know you are NOT ending this here!  I want more!  *stomps foot*. 

LOL

 Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 03 2012 11:39 am
Title: One

Wow, good start.  I'm loving this challenge too, after all it brougt us this story.  Please post again soon.

A

 Reviewer: Arabelle Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03 2012 11:08 am
Title: One

Very good start please continue I hope you add pictures

 Reviewer: foxyprime Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 03 2012 08:15 am
Title: One

A good start, roll on chapter two.

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Date: March 03 2012 07:36 am


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