I am convinced that Logan is Jimmy. I wonder how Emery and Darrell both will react when the truth comes out. Thanks
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed
[Report This]Date: July 17 2012 01:23 pm
good chapter but I missed Jimmy
Reviewer: guest Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 13 2012 02:09 am
I'm a big fan of the story and I don't think you need to change anything. The one thing I questioned was addressed in this last chapter and that was why she just didn't arrange to give the phone back after school one day. I liked the insight into why and I loved this chapter b/c there was so much more interaction with Logan. I think he really likes Em but he's scared of losing his friendship with Darrell b/c he doesn't really have any other stable relationships in his life. I've kind of vacillated back and forth but I really think that Jimmy is Justin and I think there's going to be a point where she has to choose. I'm liking them both and I hope that I'm wrong but the personalities are different.
Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 13 2012 01:59 am
absolutely brilliant!! And kudos to Logan for having such excellent taste...in video games ! lol! I love Max Payne... and Victoria Secret!
Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed [Report This]Date: July 12 2012 02:19 pm
hahaha! this story keeps me laughing
Reviewer: ChristinaElizabeth Signed [Report This]Date: July 12 2012 05:54 am
I love your story. I like how you put Logan's pov in this chapter. If anything I would say add more Emery and Logan interaction to your story other than that your story is great.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 12 2012 01:27 am
I really love what you're doing with this story. I honestly enjoy reading it and anxiously await your next updates. Whoever said it was cringe-worthy obviously thought enough of it to read it through... you can't please everyone so write what you feel the story warrants and maintain your voice as a writer. If they feel they can do that much better perhaps they'll give writing a go and show us all what their version of a 'perfect' story is.
Date: July 11 2012 11:02 pm
Well, beyond this reviewer's insults, did they give you any constructive criticism? What's the point of telling someone their story is this or that without telling them how they can imporve. Perhaps this story does have it's unbelievable moments, but they are far and few and, personally, I have no problems with them. I really enjoy and look forward to your story. Honestly speaking, I can be a "harsh" critic for online stories, but I don't have a problem with yours. Actually, there are plenty of stories out there that is way more deserving of that criticism than you are.
Also, Emery and Logan is where it's at. ;-)
Author's Response:
No, I got absolutely nothing to indicate what exactly the reader thought was wrong, and it was anonymous so I couldn't ask. Thank you for reviewing. :)
Reviewer: 2shy Signed [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 10:47 pm
That was too funny, but Emery continues to piss me off. There was no need for you have had an attitude with Logan or for that matter Sarah. I love that Logan agreed to taking Emery shopping she is making progress. I want to know what she wants from Logan, does want a relationship? Is she just seeing if she can catch him and dump Logan? I hope that isn't not the later, I like Logan he's cool people.!! Emery not so cool, it ain't cool playing games with people.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 09:24 pm
I really like this story and hope you find more time to update it more. Also, adding a little more smut to the story wouldn't hurt either. I like reading into the mind of Logan, as well :)
Reviewer: Joelle Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 08:23 pm
I like the story. I suggest you move it along so they can get some action going. I like this update but I want more sizzle between Logan and emery! I think you are doing good so far just get them going more or being the person who has phone around to make Logan jealous.
Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 07:50 pm
I sent you a message!!!
Great update:) I never thought of Logan as Jimmy, if he is, I can't wait to see that explosion.
Reviewer: idiotendenial Signed [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 07:27 pm
Don't take that remark to heart. this story is a teenvfic. its something I would consider for my teen dsughter. Keep up the good work.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous
[Report This]Date: July 11 2012 06:51 pm
Nothing about this story is cringe-worthy! It has a good flow and I personally enjoy it!
Reviewer: DecemberUnrest Signed [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 06:43 pm
hahah died. Loved it lots, just a little sad jimmy wasnt in it but still awesome. Upload soon. like now. :)
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous
[Report This]Date: July 11 2012 05:59 pm
Love Love Love this story and this chapter, espically the so, so, so part hehheh I couldnt stop laughing. Ooo I love jimmy please dont cut him out of the story. Anyway awesome chap.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 11 2012 05:33 pm
Love the suspense!!!!! Update soon please....... I'm just giddy with anticipation of the first kiss....
Reviewer: LadyeT Signed
[Report This]Date: June 27 2012 07:47 pm
Are we getting any pictures???
Reviewer: readlover Signed [Report This]Date: June 26 2012 05:59 am
I'm enjoying this read. You are doing a fantastic job at portraying the characters and plot. I love it!!! Can't wait for more. Is Jimmy who i think it is??? This story is genius and thanks to mom for help.
-Happy Wirting...
Reviewer: readlover Signed [Report This]Date: June 26 2012 05:59 am
Loved the chapter!!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 26 2012 12:16 am
so at first i thought logan was jimmy, but now I kinda want them to be different people.......anyways luv the update ^^
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 25 2012 09:13 pm
dont drop Jimmy I luv him already LOL
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 25 2012 09:00 pm
Love the story! can't wait for the next update :)
Reviewer: Darlene Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 25 2012 05:57 pm
oh my gosh . i had no idea that you've been adding all this time. well anyways i'm really crossing my fingers that this jimmy guy is logan . if not then... i guess because this logan dude... i don't know i can't figure him out and i'm thinking that things between them is not going to work out. & uh oh. emery is playing two . she shouldn't be doing that there's bound to have some kind of trouble coming in the future. hope all will be well in the end. update again soon. loving this so far.
Reviewer: Vava Signed
[Report This]Date: June 25 2012 01:06 am