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Title: Chapter 15

Congratulations on your acceptance!! I am so glad that the truth is coming out although I think Logan could have chosen his words a little more wisely. I like that they have matured and Emery deciding to fight for Logan at the end had me cheering her on. I really hate to see this story end but I knew it would have to. However, I would personally love to read about their lives after they get together :P

Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 24 2013 02:12 pm

Title: Chapter 15

Logan didn't explain that right.

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 24 2013 09:15 am

Title: Chapter 15

I knew there was something off about Cassidy and Logan. And now we know what it was. But can Logan be more stoopid in how he's coming clean with Emery? And why wouldn't she think Logan is the one that's impregnated Cassidy? I could just smack him.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 24 2013 07:41 am

Title: Chapter 15

very good update

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 24 2013 07:29 am

Title: Chapter 15

Congratulations for getting into the University of Arizona.  Logan you dufus now she thinks that Cassidy is having your baby!?  Their momma is trip, it's her own fault that they are close.  When Emery gets away she won't be coming back!!  So how many chapter are left?  I am going to miss this story it was very good.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 24 2013 07:04 am

Title: Chapter 15

Great update. I hope the end is good and about time Logan told her how he feels.

Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: February 24 2013 05:47 am

Title: Chapter 14

I really like where this is heading. They both seem like actually people now instead of characters. 

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2013 06:15 am

Title: Chapter 14

Great update! I can't believe Logan was/is Jimmy and switched the phones himself, that's so messed up! Logan needs to get his act together and dump Carissa and go for Emery because he obviously wants to be with her. Hope there will be more interactions with Logan's uncle, I want to know more about what he knows about Emery. Can't wait to read more!!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 03 2013 01:16 am

Title: Prologue

I always look forward to your updates.  Thank you for taking the time to write and share your story.

The initial concept of this story seemed to be girl falls for brother's best friend who doesn't notice her so she purchases a self help book to get his attention.  You did a great job taking us through that process and showing the development of and chemistry between Logan and Alicia.  So now they both like each other, they want to be together but instead of letting that happen there are more obstacles to keep them apart.  It seems unnecessary at this point unless you just want to draw out the story.  Put Logan and Emery together and show the growth of their relationship as she has to deal with a father who never wanted her and a mother who's too self observed to care.  Cassidy and Logan's guise of a relationship is insignificant compared to her family life.  Don't get caught up in tryng to surprise or mislead your readers so there can be a great reveal.  Your writing and story are too good for that.

Reviewer: Cassie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 03 2013 12:26 am

Title: Chapter 14

I think there's something else going on with Logan and Cassidy. Something is a tad off with the whole boyfriend/girlfriend thang. And color me confused that Emery had no idea that Jimmy was Logan.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 11:27 pm

Title: Chapter 14

Jealousy is something else.

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 08:10 pm

Title: Chapter 14

I realky hate the mother, she doesn't love Emery. Eden just wants a real life Barbie to amuse hersekf with.  I know that Emery can't wait ti get free because her mom is a total bitch!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 07:38 pm

Title: Chapter 14

Great update. I want Logan an Emery to get together already! Great idea bringing another guy into the picture . So glad Logan was jimmy. Please update soon.

Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 03:17 pm

Title: Chapter 14

This story is so confusing. At the begining, the idea was good, but it became really confusing. You gave good hints that Jimmy was Logan, then you give him a girlfriend, send Emery overseas, to end up revealing the truth we already suspected!

You should have revealed it sooner. Because this info doesn't make sense anymore. He is best friends with Darren, then how can't he know her middle name, moreover if you imply that he went after another girl to forget her, that means he used" to like her. That we already know considering his actions before she went away. And how can he so casually call her name, when you insisted at the begining that he nerver wanted to call her other than Darren's sister? This is something Emery wanted for a long time, so why is this improvement not emphized?

For Emery, I don't see the point of sending her in London, it's a drastic measure for something so little. She claims to be in love with Logan, so how cant' she even know his first name or make the connection with Jimmy. If she's so in love with him, how didn't she notice what his phone looked like before and after the swap? Nowadays, it's so normal to pick and look at our phone anywhere, that it's impossible for her to not have noticed. Moreover since he is Darren's bestie, she should have recognized her  brother's name or his nickname in the friends list and his way of texting. This does definitively not make sense. And I don't like how she keeps having long monologue about not liking or deciding to drop him, to finally do the exact contrary the next time sh's with him. This can be seen as being so in love that it makes you do things you shouldn't have, but in her case, it's a waste of thinking. Choose a way or another and stick to it, she looks more bipolar than confused to me. And how can she still be attached to him when she sees that he is only using Cassidy for his needs, keeps flirting with her wheras he is in a relationship. You picture Cassidy as the bad guy, but she's only a girlfriend pretecting her territory. Even if Emery and Logan are the main characters, and we naturally root for them, it's too easy to despise Cassidy when she didn't do anaything we wouldn't do ourselves. On the contrary, this gives me the feeling that Logan is simply a slut, a manwhore and that Emery should understand that at the end he doesn't worth it. At least, make him assume it and not act confused to have two girls in tow.  Girls have needs too and can be the one playing, so I think it's a good idea she sees someone else, it would be refreshing for the story, accentuating her idea of droping Logan rekindle his interest or persuing Emery.

Your are a good writer, that's why I keep reading your updates, but please, as  the owner of this story, choose the way and we're going to follow you. That the difference between a good vs a bad writer, the first one leads the way and the reader is enchanted, the second one needs to to be led towards the good direction. I'm sure you don't need that, so make up your mind and lead the way. And then, I'd agree with the others, good things should go on and never end!

Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 02:56 pm

Title: Chapter 14

this is stupid....wish logan would man up and admit his feelings for emery and break up with cassidy already.....wish emery would confront logan and ask him straight whether he has feelings for her or not....

Reviewer: lizzie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 02:43 pm

Title: Chapter 13

wish Logan would break up with stupid cassidy already...he adores emery right..

Reviewer: lizzie Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 17 2013 08:29 pm

Title: Chapter 13

I just read the story and it's amazing. Great work, please continue it, Logan and Emery's chemistry is spectacular. (He should have taken her in the tent...even though I see where he was coming from. Obviously his lost)

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 15 2013 07:51 pm

Title: Chapter 13

"How could someone give life to another human being and not protect him- or repent for failing in doing so? How could a person overlook the fact that her daughter was being violated right underneath her very nose? How could a person not love a child?"

This. Makes me feel so bad for Em. And Darrell might start to suffer the same way since he's about to rebel and not be the "perfect" child anymore, well, as far as Dennis is concerned. I wonder about Dennis and Eden. Why would they have children? Or was it a case of making them look good to the public?

Yeah, Em, you're so over Logan. And what is up with Logan and Cassidy? And why was Cassidy staring so hard at Darrell? Is she concerned that he might remember where he'd seen her before? So many questions. Can't wait to get some of the answers.

Glad you know what you want to do with this story. Loving it. Well done, Chica

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 14 2013 01:45 am

Title: Chapter 13

Great update

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 14 2013 01:05 am

Title: Chapter 13

Yeah, Cassidy needs to disappear now.

Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 13 2013 12:05 am

Title: Chapter 13

I don't like this Cassidy chick.  She seems more interested in Darrell than Logan.  I think she's a plant by Darrell and Emery's parents so that Logan is distracted by her and not by Emery.  If she wasn't a plant, why would she be so interested in what Darrell decides to do with his life?  She needs to go away.

Reviewer: dcphoenix1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 07:52 pm

Title: Chapter 13

Great update! Although I feel like Emery and Darrell: what is going on with Logan and Cassidy? Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 06:13 pm

Title: Chapter 13

The parents are evil, I so want Emery and Darrell to get away from them. This Cassidy chick needs to disappear as well as not sticking her nose in other people's business.  Shs' s a skank because she was chec king out Darrell.  Ho much?

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 05:15 pm

Title: Chapter 13

I understand you do not want to drag it out because I hate to see a story end. But I really hope you have Logan and Emery together in the end. I really hope this Cassidy shows her true colors. All I say is please do not drag out the connection between Emery and Logan. The have danced around each other for to long. 

Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 03:34 pm

Title: Chapter 13

Yay!!!! So happy for the update. I agree wiyh C. You did a great job with combining A and B. I am so curious as to the relationship Darrell has with his father.

Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 03:07 pm



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