Reviews For In Plain Sight
Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Great update! Hope Rory gives her some space for now.

Author's Response:

That's not bloody likely...LOL. He's one determined guy.

I hope you continue to enjoy the story!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 10 2013 07:50 am

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

I'm definitely enjoying this story.. What kind of accident did Rory cause that made Mallory lose her sight? Is it possible that she can regain her sight?

Looking forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

These questions will be answered very soon  but I will answer one... Her blindness cannot be corrected.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 09 2013 11:01 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

we need a chap 4 as soon as possible!



Author's Response:

Going to work on that today! I hope you continue to enjoy the story!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 09 2013 11:13 am

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Loved it! Can't wait to see the interaction that's going to happen between Rory and Mallory and her crew!!



Author's Response:

It's going to be interesting, that's for sure!

I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 09 2013 04:26 am

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

I'm really enjoying this story so far. Please don't keep us waiting to long for the next one. Can't wait for more. :)

Author's Response:

 Thanks! There's so much more!

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Chrissyo Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 08 2013 02:12 am

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

The flashback was smoking hot! Cant wait to read about Rory and Declan's parents and see what there all about. Grear chapter. Cant wait for more. It keeps getting better and better



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing! His parents...they're a piece of work, that's for sure.

Reviewer: Eboniwm Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 07 2013 12:43 am

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Mallory still loves rory regardless of what happened to her but since he left for five years and never tried to come back here are a lot of unwarranted emotions. Hopefully things will work out between them before its to late



Author's Response:

There's a lot to deal with, that's for sure. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 11:05 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

please don't let rory win, if he has done this to mallory, let him not be the hero this time, in all stories the bad boy gets the girl, why not the nice guy!?

Reviewer: dounome Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 09:32 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

I don't relish your struggles with putting out this story, but the end result is quite exceptional... Please update soon...and know your efforts are appreciated.

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm so glad that so many are enjoying the story. The feedback is  just astounding!

There is much more to come!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: LadyeT Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 08:03 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Another amazing chapter. There are so many words swirling in my head in regards to this chapter. I mean Mallory is still so in love with Rory that she has all this anger and resentment. But she can't hate him and that is very understandable but she truly would like to know what kept him away. That truth alone will help her heal. And I know her friends love her and even Declan but none of them can understand what Mallory feels and what Rory struggles with just to make it through the day. Declan might think he knows but he has no clue and the fact that he is angry is very interesting since he wants to be his bother and Mallory's protector. To bad he can't protect either one of them from their hearts desires nor can he protect them from the truth. And since no one not even Mallory herself knows the truth of why Rory stayed away I will not make any assumptions. And neither should her crew who has no clue about the accident, Rory, or the demons he runs from. I like her friends and I love that declan has stayted close to Mallory but I have a feeling they aren't going to agree with her choices when it comes to Rory. As for Rory there is still something about him that pull me towards him. His OCD is very interesting especially eith the number 3. My OCD doesn't allow me to deal with odd numbers its very strange and people tend to look at me like I am crazy but it has to be an even number our I will somehow make it an even number. So I understand how the number 3 calms him. I looking forward into learning more about Rory and Mallory together and apart.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I've  been doing some research on OCD  in preparation for this story and was truly taken with what I found. I can only hope that I am doing justice in the portrayal. Most often, writers only bother with the surface of issues-me, I like to dig in. So if there's anything you take issue with, please, let me know!

As for the story itself, yes, there's a lot of turmoil, resentment and anger abound.  This story is full of complex issues and of course, the most complex issue of all- love. No one understands it more so than the ones involved and I think Mallory will explain that to her beloved crew.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing- and for the awesome insight!

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 05:01 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Mallory has a great support system around her including Declan. I'm very interested to know what happened that night. The more I read, the more I want. Thank you for another great update.



Author's Response:

The accident will manifest very soon. 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 02:13 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

I knew that Declan had feelings for Mallory and she acted and acts like she doesn't know.  It's about to get ugly Rory this is not the time to courageous.  Declan will seriously deck you and Savoy will castrate you. Loving this story as well as the totured soul that is Rory McInnis!  Mallory give Rory what for because that is all that he derserves.  That sex scene was smoking!!!



Author's Response:

Yes, Declan has a soft spot for Mallory but realizes the best thing he could do was be there to support her.  As for Rory, he's determined to tug at Mallory's ear- the question remains is if Mallory is ready to hear what he has to say...

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 02:04 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Excellent chapter.  I can't wait to see what goes down.



Author's Response:

Thanks! There's much more to come:D

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 12:52 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

My lord his OCD is riding Rory hard! I almost cant stand it. Rory is a prisoner in so many ways. I almost think he's in a worse position than Mallory with her blindness. And where are these parents of his. 

What a strong woman to be so young as Mallory was. To fight for her man and their love in the face of what must have been incredible opposition says a lot about her. No wonder no other woman can satisfy him on tha level. Thats something to behold.

I hope Declan finds someone of his own. He's sweet.


 



Author's Response:

Thanks! Rory is definitely on my sleeve right now. Like you said, he's a prisoner to his own proclivities and unable to free himself. His parents will make an appearance, much to everyone's dismay. As for Declan, I like him in the role of protector for both Rory and Mallory (he may or may not get someone of his own, I haven't really decided at this point).

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 08:10 am

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

I loved every second of it. HOT!!!

I'm rooting for Rory but I hope Declan finds his happiness.

I'm rather in awe of Mallory I want to know more about her backstory before Rory. 

Can't wait to find out what Rory's triggers are for his OCD.

PERFECT UPDATE.



Author's Response:

Thanks!   There will be more of everything. I assure you we will see what makes these two tick!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: siennagray Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 07:49 am

Title: Chapter 3 Smoke Without the Flame

Holding my breath to know how their second meeting turns out...



Author's Response:

It's going to be good :)

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: amlaamar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2013 07:04 am

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

I LOVE your writing style :)



Author's Response:

Thanks! I hope you continue to enjoy the story!

Reviewer: got2luvmel Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2013 11:43 pm

Title: Chapter 2- First Impressions

I love that you made him have OCD. Its more common than we think. It makes him more human; the story more believeable. Looking forward to reading more.



Author's Response:

More is to come.I suffered from a fog last night while writing so I decided to take another approach. There should be a chapter today.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: amlaamar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2013 02:26 am

Title: Chapter 2- First Impressions

At least three times while reading this I said 'Oh, she's good...she's real good with words...', referring to you of course. I like your way with words, it makes it easy and fun to read. You keep me interested and I await the next chapter! :D



Author's Response:

Thanks! I always said if I didn't like the words in my head, I wouldn't put them down.  It is my hope that I continue to provide the caliber of writing that you'd enjoy!

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: RachieFly Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 04 2013 03:40 am

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

This is really good. It was delightful to read and certainly well written. I enjoyed this, great job! Well, onto the next chapter, I go!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I hope you continue to enjoy! More to come, for sure!

Reviewer: RachieFly Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2013 03:22 am

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

Excellent - you already have me invested in these characters - keep more coming!



Author's Response:

More is on the way!  Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: katie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2013 05:20 pm

Title: Chapter 2- First Impressions

More please... I need to know what he did to cause her blindness. If he was soooo infatuated with her, why didn'the acknowledge her blindness?

Author's Response:

Funny thing about guilt, makes people act all kinds of crazy. There will be more to come, rest assured.

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: LadyeT Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 04:29 pm

Title: Chapter 2- First Impressions

too short.



Author's Response:

 There's more to come. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: cuppacoffee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 04:17 pm

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

Your story is captivating, I love the situation the characters are in. It's positively unsettling. I just want to know more and how the accident occured. Really well done so far!

Reviewer: Peanut Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 01:15 pm

Title: Chapter 2- First Impressions

Wow! Excellent writing, can't wait to see their past unfold and what lengths Delcan will go to in order to keep Rory away from Mallory. 



Author's Response:

 It's going to be a journey, that's for sure.  Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 02 2013 02:48 am



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