omg this was/is soooo good. im a new reader and you wont believe how I found ur story. I accidentally clicked ur name!! and im freakin glad I did! I cant wait til the next chapter! awesome story
Author's Response:
:) I'm glad you found/like it. I am working on an update
Reviewer: babygirl23 Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 02 2013 10:51 am
chapters are short, but powerful--very well written. thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading :)
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: June 30 2013 04:19 am
Good Steamy update . I like that Mark and Laila are addicted to each other. I like their "love/hate",push/pull relationship. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Thank you, yeah..they are something...thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 29 2013 04:18 pm
Laila again has pissed me off, it was your behavior after the miscarriage that made Mark leave. Your acting like you were the only one who lost a baby. So it was you who should have made the first move to contact Mark! Can you tell that I an salty with Laila right now? After she breaks you off a piece Mark make her work to get back into your life. So good!
Author's Response:
Lol, yeah I feel your pain. Perhaps she can redeem herself in the next few "chapters"
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 29 2013 02:08 pm
I love the chosen character, they seem real
Author's Response:
thank you, Thats why I chose them!
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2013 09:42 am
Sometime hard to express your truly feeling..I am cliff about the direction however, I love the story...Great update
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: June 19 2013 09:42 am
This was a very short but intense chapter, I could literally feel Mark's pain. Thank you for sharing your talent! Pleaseeee update soon.
Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 19 2013 06:51 am
LOVE LOVE LOVE this story!! I cant believe I just found it!
I totally understand her hurt and why she is pushing him away but he should have never left! Then again, she probably checked out a long time ago
Reviewer: Leogina Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2013 05:34 am
I think this was excellent and i think you need to do your updates to this deep, emotional story faster...just saying.
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 07:15 pm
Wow this is really really short given the time it's been since the last update. It is intense but repetitious. I feel like it should have been in the flashback of chapter 5 - Leaving
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 05:46 pm
This is one great story!!! I just wish the chapters were SUPER LONG, lol! I take it Laila did not ask Mark to stay. It's clear these two have a emotional filled history, but it's also clear that they love each other. More please!!!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:51 pm
When did they get married? I feel like I have mussed a major part of the story. Laila is stubbornly stupid! If they are really married why did they ask each other about family? Did Mark serve her divorce papers? Explain please!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:42 pm
She should tell him why she never called him. Laila is the that pushed Mark away acting like the loss of a potential child didn't affect him. Laila is selfish!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:35 pm
Laila is special! You the man is leaving you, so why ask the obvious? How about you offering an apology for drowning in your pain and not acknowledging his?
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:17 pm
I guess he told you Leila! You can't be jealous whenit was you and your remotional departure that pushed him away!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:11 pm
Laila is gun shy, why? I can't wait to find out more.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:05 pm
That was sweet although Mark's is really rude when he's attracted to a woman.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 02:01 pm
I like the chapter, I just wish it was longer. I love the couple and I like seeing his point of view.
Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 01:21 pm
More frequent updates. The story is good but needs to be fleshed out more. The characters need progression.
Author's Response:
Ok, point taken. flshed out as in..?
Reviewer: Apple Signed [Report This]Date: June 18 2013 12:22 pm
Okay, so I read it when I got home. What I really like about this story is the surreal passage of time and there is significant time that has gone by. His decision to leave doesn't seem in any way to be over night. Her grief seems real and, honestly, I love the surprise she experienced when she realized he was truly leaving. I've found that when you are in that disoriented space of grief, depression, anger, hopelessness, etc. time is almost overwhelming and nonexistent.
I look forward to seeing what happens next.
Now re Forrest Griffin, that is one smart Georgia boy and while not conventionally handsome as you stated, he is so appealing to me too. He was on UFC Tonight or something talking to one of his fellow fighters whose name I can't remember and they were talking abot movies. The other guy was saying Forrest was always telling him to read the book, read the book!
Author's Response:
:) thank you, I appreciate you reading the story and I hope not to disappoint with the next update.
I LOVE A MAN THAT REEAAADDSS!!!! :D
Reviewer: Pinklemonade Signed [Report This]Date: May 23 2013 01:43 pm
Need more!!
Author's Response:
Working on it!
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: May 22 2013 07:09 am
WHAAAATT!!!!!!!!!!! Woman you have me cussing after each chapter. WHY IS IT SO SHORT???????????????
Author's Response:
Lol! I am sorry, the chapters were intended to be that short. I 'll work on elongating them, though. Thank you for reading
Reviewer: LIBBY Signed [Report This]Date: May 21 2013 04:37 pm
What! too short. please us more
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: May 21 2013 05:29 am
I really like how you structured your story. It perfectly depicts one of the multiple evolutions of a relationship. From butterflies and excitement to detachment and loneliness in the presence of the loved one. Great job !
Author's Response:
Thank you soooooo much!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]Date: May 19 2013 02:10 am
How did they become so broken?! Thanks for the update!
Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 16 2013 06:34 pm